u/Fallen_Crow333

Is this boring? Confusing? Wordy? How is the pacing?

Any and all criticism is appreciated!

Hello! This is the first couple pages of an 8,000 worded short story. (It’s actually a shorter version of a longer story)

I don’t have beta-readers, so I do the best with what I have. How is the pacing? Is it boring? Confusing? Too wordy? Where did I lose you? All criticism is appreciated!

Hello! This is the first couple pages of an 8,000 worded short story. (It’s actually a shorter version of a longer story)

I don’t have beta-readers, so I do the best with what I have. How is the pacing? Is it boring? Confusing? Too wordy? Where did I lose you? All criticism is appreciated!

I wrote an 8,000 short story version of a longer story for a writing contest, and I don’t have any beta readers. So heres the first 2,000 words. Is it too wordy? Boring? How’s the pacing? Any and all criticism is appreciated!

Here’s some examples of my prose when writing descriptions. I personally like them, but in a book, as a reader, are they enjoyable or irritating? Do they flow good? Are they too long? Too wordy? Nonsensical? Is the voice too much? This is more of an indulgent story rather than one aimed for readers, but I’m always trying to improve. So any criticism is greatly appreciated!

This is a side story that I write when I burn out on my main story, and I’m wondering how the prose and pacing is. Is it choppy? Too fast? Too slow? Boring? Where did I lose you?

I’m also not really sure about the daisy part, I’m just not really digging it. Is it boring or a cliche of sorts? Looking for any reason to keep it, or scrap it, heh.

This is a revision from a previous post, so please critique away!

This is a little side project from my main one, just a little fun. It would probably be a children’s book, or at least YA. I’m wondering how the prose is, as well as pacing. Where did I lose your interest? Is it too fast? Choppy? I know there’s a bit of telling in there, but does it work as a style of prose or is it novice? Any and all criticism is appreciated!

I really like cool worldbuilding, as well as a lot of adventure and side plots rather than just a straightforward plot. Sort of like the Hobbit, the Witcher (short story ones) or Six of Crows. I like variety in a story, a journey. I also really like the prose of the hobbit, so any books withe that prose is good!

I'm on a writers block, so I decided to summarize my first two chapters in art, as well as practicing my digital drawing (since I typically only draw on paper) This is what I have so far, it's not the best but it sure is fun. The next drawing will be mountains in the distance, then a little girl staring at the moon through a golden gilded window.

Perhaps not the prettiest, but it was quite fun to make. It’s inspired by Tolkien’s artwork.

I enjoy making fairytale-este stories on the side of my main novel, and I’m wondering if this prose works? Is it too wordy? Is it boring? Any criticism at all is greatly appreciated!