u/FellBee

I have read many a story and book, but I've come across an interesting issue(?) While writing myself. What are peoples thoughts on how a scene is written when it comes to action. I've read several stories that focus on every individual action and thought that goes into the scene, and I have read others that are rather bare minimum While focusing on inner dialog and feel. What's a good balance of action choreography (in a written sense, I would still call it that) and inner dialog? I don’t want to bog down the story with endless flowery lines of choreographed action while lacking in dialog, but I also want to have that dialog in which the character of focus (I tend to write in either first person, or third limited). Which is proffered method for audiences? I have been told I have a tendency to lean on passive voice, I am trying to get away from that, but the struggle of balance of "The character is experiencing this, this is what is happening" with "flowery expositionary, details of what is happening, what is being felt and seen" is tricky. Am I making sense?

I am writing a story containing elements of classical and nontraditional things found in fantasy media. Adventuring parties, guilds, nonhuman characters. But I personally don't think a different world would have the same names for things, as even in our own world different cultures have different names for similar mythical creatures. I am writing about a person who is from our world being reborn in that world, so they would have the perspective of drawing parallels of the creatures of our world coloring the inner dialog of the story, while coming to terms with the new worlds language and characteristics of these creatures. Would this be confusing if done in a way that explains the situation?

Examples:

Elves being called a native name that I am still workshopping (such as being called by what the people call themselves vs what others/foreigners call them), having in world names such as "knife-ears" (used in an offense manner or otherwise)

Or something like a Kolbold, which has varying different shapes depending upon the cultures it has been adopted into (DnD vs WoW vs Common media, I have seen them vary between tiny lizard folk to rat like nuisances to dog-folk), but I'm calling mine by another name and sticking to the reptilian race of humanoids who are somewhat magical in nature.

I'm not trying to condemn/condescend those of us who use the terms, I enjoy plenty of books that use our terms in other worlds, the terms have existed in the genre longer than I have been alive. I just want a second/multiple opinions on using different terms for familiar creatures, while also dabbling in coming up with new creatures and obstacles in the book that will drive intrigue into the world I want to explore.