u/GKaterle

Stamped and sent to the one I love\

These words seen and approved by the One above\

Only to her do I write these lines\

Pretty eyes, hers alone, my thought refines\

Read and read again by night and day\

Echoes of a smile upon her lips do play\

And love-thoughts in her mind and hers alone\

Doubt not my letters would not cause the Lord to groan\

In love so pure yet painful do I write\

Naught else but that which is right\

Gentle others, who are not my beloved\

Have no hope of knowing how she is loved\

Eternally and ardently, and my bones\

Recall echoes of my soul, those most pure tones\

May these jaunty lines reach her eyes alone\

Although no disrespect to anyone else be shown\

I pray that the stirrings of my heart-\

Love- is reserved for my beloved, set apart

Looking for feedback on my vows, I fear it's a bit too basic

With this hand, this unworthy hand\

Absolved by fiery love most pure\

I swear to be your protector and\

Provider, your life secure

Only yours, my love\

From now until forever\

To have and to hold, my dove\

No more shall distance sever

Looking for feedback on my vows, I fear it's a bit too basic

With this hand, this unworthy hand\

Absolved by fiery love most pure\

I swear to be your protector and\

Provider, your life secure

Only yours, my love\

From now until forever\

To have and to hold, my dove\

No more shall distance sever

My fiance and I want to write our own vows as poems and I need some advice. Is this too disjointed? Saccharine? I feel like there's just something missing:

My soul, bound with this ring 'round my heart\

Cleaves to yours, sweet spirit-song\

I swear to be yours all this life long\

Never more shall we be apart

With this hand, this unworthy hand\

Purges through fiery trials\

Purified in the athanor of miles\

I give you, my love, my only heart-band

My fiance and I want to write our own vows as poems and I need some advice. Is this too disjointed? Saccharine? I feel like there's just something missing:

My soul, bound with this ring 'round my heart\

Cleaves to yours, sweet spirit-song\

I swear to be yours all this life long\

Never more shall we be apart

With this hand, this unworthy hand\

Purges through fiery trials\

Purified in the athanor of miles\

I give you, my love, my only heart-band

Shooting down meridian beams\

Nature's eye gazes down on all\

The noisome, new harbor with mechanic life teems\

And the old, craggy lighthouse, stern and tall

The stony sentinel keeps moonlight vigil\

On its new children down below\

Fixed gaze, eye that's been harbor's sigil\

Humdrum haven, waves in smooth adagio

Wars waged in the glory of your presence\

Tears you shed for all the men below\

Today, frozen in peace evanescent\

Unchanged you stand, stretching forth bright tallow

One thing still holds, is still true\

You serve for wise, yet glib chaperone to all\

Young lovers who take pleasure in your view\

Centuries of romance, rise and fall

Here do I cling to strong, unyielding you\

As a child to his mother's skirts\

Fearful of this century of smoke, noise and spew\

To you, eternal fortress against the new

Shooting down meridian beams\

Nature's eye gazes down on all\

The noisome, new harbor with mechanic life teems\

And the old, craggy lighthouse, stern and tall

The stony sentinel keeps moonlight vigil\

On its new children down below\

Fixed gaze, eye that's been harbor's sigil\

Humdrum haven, waves in smooth adagio

Wars waged in the glory of your presence\

Tears you shed for all the men below\

Today, frozen in peace evanescent\

Unchanged you stand, stretching forth bright tallow

One thing still holds, is still true\

You serve for wise, yet glib chaperone to all\

Young lovers who take pleasure in your view\

Centuries of romance, rise and fall

Here do I cling to strong, unyielding you\

As a child to his mother's skirts\

Fearful of this century of smoke, noise and spew\

To you, eternal fortress against the new