u/Heisnwin101

I've been writing a Re fanfic called The Weight of Scars, and I'm looking for someone willing to read it sequentially from Chapter 1 onward and give me honest, critical feedback as they go.

AO3: https://archiveofourown.org/works/90298341

Current: 20 chapters / ~68k words
Started: ~19 July 2026
Status: Ongoing

The story takes place after Arc 7 and is a canon-divergence AU focused heavily on Subaru, trauma, relationships, survival, and hurt/comfort.

I'm particularly interested in criticism of:

• Subaru's characterization and whether his decisions actually make sense
• Whether his mentality and past experiences are reflected naturally in his behavior
• Whether emotional scenes actually land
• Pacing
• Dialogue
• Character interactions
• Plot clarity
• Worldbuilding
• Anything that feels boring, forced, confusing, or out of place

I specifically want someone who will challenge me. If you think I've written Subaru's behavior incorrectly, a scene doesn't work, an emotional moment feels forced, or I've made a decision that doesn't make sense, please tell me. I'd much rather receive harsh criticism than empty praise.

I'd prefer someone to start from Chapter 1 because a lot of the characterization and context builds gradually, and the early chapters are noticeably weaker than the later ones. I've already gone back and rewritten some of the earlier chapters as my writing has improved.

A bit about me: this is my first long-form writing project and my first time seriously writing fiction. As of Aug 18, I've only been writing for about 29 days, so I'm very inexperienced.

I also want to be transparent that I used AI to help edit some of the earlier chapters. The story, plot, scenes, characters, and ideas are mine. I write the chapters myself and have used AI primarily to clean up prose during editing. It did not generate the story or originate the scenes.

You don't need to be an experienced writer to critique it. If you're a big Re reader and can tell me what works, what doesn't, and why, that's already extremely valuable to me.

I know 68k words is a lot to ask someone to read, so there's absolutely no expectation that you commit to the whole thing immediately. If you want to try the first few chapters and decide afterward whether you want to continue, that's completely fine.

If you do decide to read it, please be as critical as you want. I genuinely want to improve.