Poem on Anxiety- Looking for Feedback to Improve my Poem Writing Skills
Hi everybody, I wanted to share a poem I wrote about my experiences with anxiety. The character in this poem is based on personal experiences with social anxiety and the toll it imposes.
I hope this poem connects with those who struggle with the twists and turns of anxiety. You are not alone and poetry offers us a way to articulate the emotions that we face everyday.
Please feel free to share your critiques, and suggestions of improvement!
Sheol
Sheol is man who has constructed a castle out of his fears and anxieties
No decision is made without great contemplation
The fate of tomorrow swallows the light of the present
Tomorrow is the enemy of today
In this siege, the fortress is bereft of foodstuffs
Its crumbling walls, and emaciated defenders with sunken eyes offer no respite from the silence of the night
Forays against the encroaching foe spring out of sudden moments of joy
But are repelled by internal doubt
An eternal stalemate in a land where the sun neither rises nor sets
For the defenders lack both the strength for a final charge and the will to surrender
Sheol exists in a limbo
A fate of constant movement yet never reaching a destination
Seeking a sequestered cure to the ailments of one’s own imagination
This is life