(Crimson Witch [Lyrics]) looking for feedback. I reckon I’ll change the second verse but would like your thoughts.
Verse 1
Daughter of Lilith
Caught in your wrappings of lace
Hiding behind lies
A ceramic shard
Of your porcelain face cuts
Deeper than glass knives
Chorus
Demon of desire
I know who you truly are
A beast in woman’s form
Bleeding those who brave your love dry
Punishment of a carnal fire
I know what you truly are
A witch best suited as whore
You dreaded demon of desire
Verse 2
Find yourself a god
Go ahead and burn in hell
Torturing my dreams
Metamorphosis
Witch of misery and lust
Counteract your spell
Chorus
Demon of desire
I know who you truly are
A beast in woman’s form
Bleeding those who brave your love dry
Punishment of a carnal fire
I know what you truly are
A witch best suited as whore
You dreaded demon of desire
Bridge
And in the end, our dark exchange reveals
That "whore" has been too generous a seal
The anger, dread, disgust, and jealousy
Was what you took worth all my misery?
Chorus
Demon of desire
I know who you truly are
A beast in woman’s form
Bleeding those who brave your love dry
Punishment of a carnal fire
I know what you truly are
A witch best suited as whore
You dreaded demon of desire