u/Individual-League431

I feel lonely and I’d love to talk to someone who actually likes to talk to me and doesn’t just deal with me. I’m from Australia, I’m trans, I like creating things. I write and draw and am currently writing a chapter. I like minecraft, rdr2, Fortnite, Stardew and overwatch. I like shows like bojack, the big bang theory, tadc, Steven universe and anime like chainsaw man, Beastars, sk8, JJK
I have a cat named hiccup

Hi!

I’ve been working on a story since December called HotSpot.

I’m not very experienced with writing and figured I would come into some spaces to ask for some criticism and what I can work on, maybe grammer mistakes or anything of the sort. I do want it to be longer because I want to post this online eventually and this doesn’t even crack 2k characters but I don’t know what else to add for the first chapter.

I’ve made 2 tabs in this google document of the same premise but there’s two different intros. Please tell me which one you prefer

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-FO\_\_8PHA12ucMN8dyiphjb3Cys1kQsGfOsUYfeB6xQ/edit?usp=drivesdk

I’ve been working on a story since December called HotSpot. It is about how a jock and punk dude falling inlove in 2015 in Australia, the jock, Dante Prescott found a cool account on Instagram and fell into deep admiration for them. He messaged them and they have texted each other everyday since. Now its the first day back at school and he notices someone that looks oddly familiar to the person he follows online. It’s in the 3rd person perspective of Dante and his first day back.

I’m not very experienced with writing and figured I would come into some spaces to ask for some criticism and what I can work on, maybe grammer mistakes or anything of the sort. I do want it to be longer because I want to post this on ao3 and this doesn’t even crack 2k characters but I don’t know what else to add for the first chapter.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-FO\_\_8PHA12ucMN8dyiphjb3Cys1kQsGfOsUYfeB6xQ/edit?usp=drivesdk

I’ve been working on a story since December called HotSpot. It is about how a jock and punk dude falling inlove in 2015 in Australia, the jock, Dante Prescott found a cool account on Instagram and fell into deep admiration for them. He messaged them and they have texted each other everyday since. Now its the first day back at school and he notices someone that looks oddly familiar to the person he follows online. It’s in the 3rd person perspective of Dante and his first day back.

I’m not very experienced with writing and figured I would come into some spaces to ask for some criticism and what I can work on, maybe grammer mistakes or anything of the sort. I do want it to be longer because I want to post this on ao3 and this doesn’t even crack 2k characters but I don’t know what else to add for the first chapter.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-FO\_\_8PHA12ucMN8dyiphjb3Cys1kQsGfOsUYfeB6xQ/edit?usp=drivesdk

20F, I really need a cash in hand job for some side money. I have a *really* bad stutter which is why I have poor people skills. I’m currently on Centrelink and I can’t even handle talking to my job provider without stumbling over every 2nd word, I might be on Centrelink for while but I really need a small job on the side bc I’m trying to just have some side money that doesn’t just go to bills and my pets, but I can’t think of anything in my small town that isn’t just takeout or retail. Does anyone have any suggestions? Anything I can do online or stupid things like dog walking?