Logline: When a young sports reporter publishes a story linking a beloved college football star to a police incident, she becomes the target of a fanbase whose devotion quickly blurs the line between harassment, hysteria, and something far more sinister.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1in-PAROoTCKopq4MPmita5fSowtGuiSw/view?usp=drivesdk
Hello, I’m looking for some feedback as I start work on the new draft.
Logline: after a botched robbery that ends with a murder, a couple of thieves go on the run where they befriend a runaway teen and embark on a journey to reunite him with his dad in Phoenix.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1PjTr\_jKNqeuZ5Mhhcg8VYhjowuuLfPI\_/view?usp=drivesdk
Title: Sincerely,
Format: Feature
Page Length: 71
Genres: Adventure/Dramedy
Logline: After a botched robbery turns into murder, a thieving couple goes on the run where they befriend a runway teenager and embark on a journey to reunite him with his dad Phoenix.
Feedback concerns: General. I’ve went ahead and fixed some grammatically concerns and cut the “shot” out of page 1 heading into draft 2. Concerned about pacing, dialogue, structure, plot. Anything.
Will anyone be kind of enough to read and provide feedback on my first draft? I know there’s room to expand. I will start draft 2 this weekend and just wanted one more set of eyes on it.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1PjTr\_jKNqeuZ5Mhhcg8VYhjowuuLfPI\_/view?usp=drivesdk