I have 13 pages for a sci-fi/drama series pilot I'm working, and I just want some constructive criticism.
Title: Within The Void ( working title)
Logline: After years of war, two intergalactic super powers decide to bury the hatchet, but things don't go according to plan.
Hi, I've written the first 10 pages of a first draft for an animated sci-fi/drama series pilot. Any constructive criticism would help, and please remember it's an early draft.
Logline: After ten years of war,two intergalactic super powers decide to bury the hatchet at a Peace Exchange, but things don't go according to plan creating a galaxy wide event where the only way to stop it is to uncover the conspiracy behind it.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ktIcaDY2CVcvXmz8ZlYlMY65Ijocoz8y/view?usp=drivesdk
Sharing a rough draft for an anime series idea I've been working on. Need feedback and constructive criticism please. This is a nearly finished script. I have written some notes on what I want to fix,but I need outside opinions too.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/16bSC-A-70FGrYLS0ZAk0NolzBTQ8yhw62\_mkjBrvbSg/edit?usp=drivesdk