Hi, I’m a 19 year old screenwriter searching for some feedback on the first page of a script I’ve been writing. I was just wondering if this reads well; I might be too caught up on my prose and such. Any advice is greatly appreciated!
So, I wanna write spoof movies. That’s what I’ve wanted to do since I was twelve but I’ve gotten some pushback from people.
Now, unlike what some have said, I have been taking in criticisms and I agree with a lot of them. Yes, my script does rely too much on references to pop culture. Yes, I do need a particular outline.
But a common recurring piece of pushback I’ve seen is just to not do a spoof. With people saying “Oh it’ll date your script”. Which, yeah I suppose is right, I mean my main inspirations for my script was the Wayans Parody Movies along with Not Another Teen Movie and Superhero Movie. Those movies had a lot of references to current culture but they’re still remembered fondly, and I’m pretty sure the reason why is because their movies weren’t ONLY about the current events. Usually if they referenced a current event it had to do with the plot or scene (example being David Cross’ character being flung out of his wheelchair due to the fact that his wheels were from Firestone, referencing a controversy they had). But I will admit, I did not do this in my script. And I need to improve on that.
And another piece of advice I’ve gotten is “Oh, don’t make a movie that relies on references from other movies, make a spoof movie like the spoof movies of Mel Brooks”. Okay, here’s the thing; I don’t really consider Mel Brooks’ movies “spoofs”. They feel like a silly comedy movie in a certain genre rather than an actual spoof.
Like compare Hot Shots and Spaceballs. Hot Shots uses exact scenes and exact characters to mock exact tropes while Spaceballs kind of just does whatever joke they want with the Sc-Fi plot and backdrop. Like, in Hot Shots there’s a hard, complex main character, a beautiful foreign love interest, a well meaning but damage causing pushover, a fellow soldier whose at odds with the protagonist, Government officials, terrorists just like how it was in Top Gun. There are plenty of characters that spoof exact characters in Spaceballs yeah but….what’s up with the Royal King? Who’s he supposed to be satirising? How about the Bearded Woman? The Grizzly Bear? The Robot Mafia Guy?
I’ve already planning on attempting to do a full feature script for a spoof of Sport Dramas like Marty Supreme, The Blind Side, F1 and Challengers but still, I wanna know your guys thoughts on this.
I got signed back in May (won't say where) and have sent out 20 query linkedin messages and probably another 7 emails directly via published IMDBPro contact details about my scripts.
Anyway he told me that I'm starting to make noise, and not in a good way, so he said to knock it off. Being perceived as a hustler vs. my writing, which he defended to the person who told him this.
I'm used to getting out there making the sale having done that for 30 plus years in a different industry but I guess that kind of hustle isn't appreciated.
I've stopped and will let the agent do his job. I've only been writing for a few years or so in this industry is still new to me to navigate.
I’m an aspiring screenwriter and I want to know the details of writing a spec script for an already existing IP like The Loud House.
Hello new writers! Welcome!
Step 1: Read scripts
Step 2: Read feedback, if any, on scripts posted here. Apply that feedback to your own work.
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It's really, really difficult to provide feedback on original work when you, the writer, haven't done any work. The Internet is free. Reddit is free. Take what's available to you and use it. Every post here is a writer who skips the first three steps.
I'm really annoyed by daily posts where new writers share their work and it's just a bunch of words on a page. We shouldn't have to tell you to fix your formatting. We shouldn't have to give you a list of free writing programs on every single post.
It's exhausting.
Do your homework.
Thanks.
If anybody would like to read more scenes, feel free to shoot me a message.
Title: Clary
Genre: Surreal Horror
Logline: After a massive flood washes away most of an already suffering rural community, a quiet teen participates in grotesque trials with other abandoned, feral youths. Meanwhile, the town’s remaining authority figures descend into madness.
I prefer to write by hand but have wondered if using my laptop is safe. I’m fairly savvy with technology but no expert by any means. If you only’type’, do you have a backup connected to your laptop or do you use the cloud. I guess what I’m asking is how do you circumvent the fear of losing your draft?
■ ▪︎ Ten to twenty years ago, they used to accept reality show formats from random people, but now they seem like secret societies. We’ve been watching the same formats for twenty years, with little to no innovation on their part.
So, I’ve been sitting and staring at my blank google Docs form for about 20 minutes now. I had so many ideas but I have no idea how I want to execute them. My mind moves at the speed of light and my hands are about as fast as a snail. My writing always sounds too on-the-nose. Can anyone give me some tips on how to make it more realistic/human and well… good? I refuse to use any sort of generative AI program, but I can’t seem to find any tips that aren’t “just write!” Or “feel the story”.
(P.S: I feel it’s also worth noting that I am a horror writer. My short films and feature films consist of mainly psychological horror or thriller.)
Hello! So I am currently working on a short animated project (3-5 episodes roughly 15/20ish mins per episode) I HAD 2 writers on the project, as while I’ve written short stories in the past I have no previous experience with script writing. Unfortunately one had to reduce how much they were involved with the project due to life stuff, and the other wound up having to back out because health stuff (this isn’t a problem, it’s unpaid and I’m not aboutta get mad when they offered free help - saints for that honestly) BUT this has put me in the fun position of writing the script myself. With no experience. The one who is still able to help at reduced capacity has given my script a read through and given it the ok - but is a personal friend of mine. I’m not sure my script is the strongest, and I’m not sure where to improve it. I feel pretty happy with the first scene, the second isn’t too bad but did I jump to it too fast? Like does it make sense there or do i need to add something else in between. And after that it just feels a bit off to me, but I can’t figure out what to do. So im asking you lovely people for help and advice as I am really not that sure.
A little context - it’s a show based off my dnd characters backstory - so the overall story shape is there. I’m mostly looking to explore it in more depth. Also this project is fully unpaid for everyone involved and my main limitation in that is I don’t want to make it impossible for my animators. They are absolutely lovely people and a very small team, and while I’ll be doing what I can to help them, I’m not that good at animation. So I don’t want to overload them. They’re up for a challenge but not too much of course. So yea, advice pretty please. I trust my friend but I also know friendship can bias things. Uh yea, I may come back with a couple more episode scripts with time but no promises. Yeah uhm if you have any questions on the world let me know and I’ll answer what I can. It’s not my world it’s my dms so I don’t know everything lol. Thanks for reading my ramble
EDIT: For anyone new reading this post, I am the producer/director for the project. I’m only writing due to the aforementioned circumstances and came here for advice on where to improve my literal first ever script
These are the first 20 pages of my short film. logline: A broke musician has one shot at a career-making jazz band, but when his only chance means singing with the girl he blames for destroying his life, will he make the cut?
(Episode 1 first draft ) 18 page script
Give me feedback and let me know what to improvise in this
I hope you guys read it and give some honest review
The show is about a fading celebrity who is desperate to get back into the limelight. It's a comedy drama inspired by Extras and Alan Partridge.
Is this a good 3 page hook? Any feedback is welcome.
What if I told you there’s an alternative timeline in the Jennifer Kaytin Robinson’s IKWYDLS continuity where the main Asian American slasher is the son of the iconic Helen Shivers and Barry Cox, who are ex-lovers of his Asian American parents before.
In this post: I’m showing you the sample screenplay of my fanfiction story taken place after the 2025 film.
The title is: anchor slasher — from the world of IKWYDLS.
Let me know what you think.
Movie Theater Scene
Drama, Emotional, Chaotic,
hello all,
i am extremely new to screenwriting and i am currently in the process of (trying) to write a tv series. i am thinking 8-10 episodes but as of right now i am not even halfway done with the pilot.
anyways, i am not sure how to introduce one of our main characters Nicoleta. I want the series to flashback quite a bit. Think of We Were Liars and how they switched between Summer 16 and Summer 17.
In the present Nicoleta is trying to navigate life after her best friend committed suicide. Before Esmerelda (that's the second main character and Nicoleta's best friend) commits suicide Nicoleta is a vivacious and outgoing person and afterwards she is a shell of herself. In the character description should I describe her as depressed and then when we flashback describe her as friendly?
I hope all that made sense.
If anyone is willing to work with me or recommend any good books, podcasts or classes on screenwriting I would greatly appreciate it.
Thanks!
Hi everyone. I just wanted to make everyone aware of a potential scam doing the rounds. I’ve had two emails like this word for word despite not having posted my email on my title pages in months. I just find this pretty suspicious and don’t want any writers losing their money. It may be genuine but it definitely comes across as suspicious.