u/Key-Combination9507

Any feedback on this first draft would be much appreciated! Looking to hear if pacing, jokes, voices, etc., feel smooth and natural.

General log line would be: A new bar owner who refuses to ask for help somehow manages to stay in business thanks entirely to the people he never wanted to ask for help from.

Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1B0bg18H_B7ye53_NRYF1-ahsJeN9n99k/view?usp=sharing