Нужна помощь с проверкой ENG грамматики(2)
Спасибо реддиторам этого саба за разбор ошибок. Это перезалив того, как я исправил песню, мой английский строился на музыке, видеоиграх и кино с англ сабами, я могу ошибаться, прошу вычитать ещё раз. В голове представлять гитарный спокойный перебор в стиле Боба Дилана.
A seagull flies over the ruins, It is free and does not understand. I lie on the beach, In the seawater's reach, In my broken castle of sand.
Where once was a pretty young woman, Who promised to be, not pretend. And day after day, In a land far away, We gathered seashells from the strand.
Pearl rings were woven from wishes, And dresses were made from sea plants. We sang with the wind, Swam in streams full of hints, The waves were so kind in the end.
And we started building a castle, We built it from seafoam by hand, With coral and amber in a natural puzzle, Our home, our castle of sand.
And the sun shone bright in our kingdom, Where love was just meant to be. We read stories in clouds, Sang our songs very loud, And tasted our own Berry Tea.
But the girl was cursed by the witches, Afraid of her love for a man. And the rain full of glass Pierced my heart, broke the past, The waves saved my girl like a friend.
Her smile was a promise of a sky full of stars, Sea salt on the edge of these thirsty lips. We were like the gods, like Venus and Mars, My head on her gentle and warm sandy hips.
A seagull flies over the ruins, It is free and does not understand. I lie on the beach in the seawater's reach, The waves were so kind in the end.