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The opening two paragraphs of my first short story. I would really appreciate any feedback!
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This is an idea for a short story I had. What do you think?
A tech company has released its latest entertainment product: time travel. Users are able to select from a menu of historical places, events and people to interact with in person. However, a complaint begins to emerge; people are being transported to an event not listed on the product menu: The St Bartholomews Day Massacre, 1572. As the company scrambles to correct the bug, users begin to experience spontaneous transport against their will, and for longer durations of time. Support groups, protestors, politicians, and religious figures all attempt to offer their solutions, but as those who do return come back increasingly different it becomes clear that the world has been irrevocably changed.
One of my ideas for a short story. Would you read this?
A tech company has released its latest entertainment product: time travel. Users are able to select from a menu of historical places, events and people to interact with in person. However, a complaint begins to emerge; people are being transported to an event not listed on the product menu: The St Bartholomews Day Massacre, 1572. As the company scrambles to correct the bug, users begin to experience spontaneous transport against their will, and for longer durations of time. Support groups, protestors, politicians, and religious figures all attempt to offer their solutions, but as those who do return come back increasingly different it becomes clear that the world has been irrevocably changed.