u/SummerAndTinkles

I tried posting this to r/storypeer, but my post didn't show up for some reason, so I'll try here.

I was recommended to try submitting my current script to StoryPeer by a couple people on this sub, but I noticed on the FAQ it recommends copyrighting your script before you submit it.

I visited Copyright.gov, and it seems like getting your work copyrighted is a long and complicated process. I sent a PDF of my script to my mom, and she said she'd help me out, but just in case it doesn't work out, is there anything necessarily wrong with submitting a non-copyrighted screenplay to StoryPeer if I have trouble with the copyright process?

Genre: fantasy musical

Logline: A thirteen year-old Canadian girl is turned into a deer and taken to the fantastic Maple Isle, where she makes several new friends who are under threat from a wicked Kirin Empress.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1XmAWXeu_I0sdj3VDS2BSsOhU9XmfQIlN/view?usp=sharing

I wrote this a few years ago, but went back and edited it last night to cut down the descriptions and hopefully make it feel less like a novel than a screenplay (since I got those complaints the last time I tried posting it here). This is basically a throwback to wholesome old-timey corny family musical films such as The Wizard of Oz or the works of Walt Disney. There's a few song numbers, but most of them are placeholders with a note saying "SONG IDEA" and a description. There's also a few cases of deliberate values dissonance (like the use of the word "Jap" at the beginning to signify the WW2 setting, or the Irish character being called a paddy) but nothing egregiously racist.

I was going to post this to StoryPeer, but they recommend copyrighting your screenplay before sharing, so I may wait until I get it copyrighted before I post it there.

Hopefully I succeeded in cutting down the descriptions.

I wrote it a few years ago, and all of my online friends and mutuals seem to be pretty satisfied with it...but unfortunately whenever I try to talk about it here, this community mostly just harshly badmouths it.

Most recently, I did a feedback post for it, and I got a bunch of comments complaining that it felt more like a novel than a screenplay. I was hoping they would go through the ReadThrough link and leave simple "change this to this" and "remove this" comments for each part that needed improvement, but instead their comments just came across as mocking and condescending (like "bruh, you wrote a fucking novel" and "boy you are getting nowhere fast"), so I deleted it out of embarrassment. (It didn't help that they didn't read more than a page.)

I spent last night going through the screenplay again and trying to reduce the descriptions as much as possible to the bare minimum based on the advice I got in this thread. I think I MAY be ready to try sharing it again...but I'm scared that it still won't be good enough and people will just be harsh again.

What should I do?

So much of this show’s magic comes from the autistic characters being voiced by autistic child actors, and it would probably be really hard to find another autistic child actor who sounds close enough to Kai that most people won’t notice, along with being awkward when this child character starts sounding like a teenager.

Will they have Carl grow with his actor (and the audience)? End the show right there? Hopefully they know better not to use AI to replicate Kai’s voice.

This was in Easter of 2006. We had a plush toy Easter Bunny, don't remember what color its fur was, but I remember it was wearing a dress, and yet it sang in a distinctively male voice, which I thought was weird as a kid.

I still have the song it sang memorized twenty years later. It went something like this:

>Candy Land, sweet Candy Land

>Where jellybeans and gumdrops grow

>That's where the Easter Bunny lives

>That's me! So I should know

Here's a recording of me singing the song doing my best impression of the bunny's voice to give you an idea.

I looked up "singing easter bunny toy" and even googled the lyrics of the song, but couldn't find anything. If anyone can find a video or eBay listing or something to prove this bunny toy was real and I didn't imagine it, that would be great.