[Lyrics] First song I tried to write, need feedback.
I wrote it like a week ago and have been modifying it ever since.
I was inspired by Lemon Demon.
English isn't my first language, though I've learned it and I *think* I can speak it, I'm still not sure about how "natural" sounding my lyrics are (I have used a rhyme dictionary, but i tried to make them sound natural and get the point across).
Also, I think it works with the right bpm; I don't know anything about how to write actual melodies, but I think I will learn it in the future, at first i need to know whether my lyrics are good or not.
Anyways, here's "Clone Song" (Title Needed)
[Verse 1]
Once, I donated my bone,
They said it would give me a clone
It was really quick, I think
And then I heard my doorbell ring
There he was, just like my twin
But then I went and questioned him
[Pre-Chorus]
At first it was kinda lame
It seemed like we're the same
[Chorus 1]
But he doesn't know my darkest secret
Even though he has to know my secret
Still he doesn't know my darkest...
Is he even me?
[Verse 2]
I was made in a lab
Or some magic cab
The cloning worked, and I'm the clone
I came back home, before the dawn
I saw myself, without denial
And then he put me on his trial?!
[Pre-Chorus]
What was that? Some kind of game?
Like obviously, we're the same
[Chorus 2]
But he has a different darkest secret
Even though he has to have my secret
Still he has a different darkest...
Is he even me?
[Verse 3]
And so we talked and both found out
And now beetween us there's no doubt
That he is me, at least has been
But then the third one came in
[Pre-Chorus]
I was late, but when i came
I saw Them, and we were the same
[Chorus 3]
But these *guys* talk 'bout some darkest secret
Even though that i don't have a secret
Still they have some crazy darkest...
Are they even me?
Am I even Them?
[Post-Chorus]
They are not like me
And I am not like them
Seems to me, my clone
Has mind of his own