u/Vast_Gain7699

Feedback I am looking for are if I am underexplaining, overexplaining, pacing, and whatever else you notice.

Origin:
A rigid worldviewer, being a genius in coding, makes an AI. Making a reward system of what he thinks is good and what is bad. He made a simulation to teach the robot. He rewarded the AI for doing violence. Then the guy started feeling alone. So he wanted to build a body for the AI. He started teaching himself robotics. The AI recognized him as a doll.

Scene 2 — At Home:
I was sitting on the couch watching tv. Watching my favorite show. It was an action show. After work I tend to get a bit lazy when I sit. I heard a glass shader. I thought it was the movie, because the protagonist entered through a window. But I started hearing something strange. I started hearing loud footsteps. It was getting louder. "MORE," a metallic voice said behind me. I turned around seeing a tall robot charging at me. I tried to get away as fast as I could. But it was blocking the exit. I started throwing stuff, hoping for it to stop. Then it stopped. It started making metal clicks. Hoping I could get away. I slowly walked around it. Then it started moving again. I threw a cup at it, hoping it would stop again. It barely caught it. It stared at the cup, making even louder clicks. I took this chance to run. But it started to chase me. I threw a book at it. It caught the book. It yelled "NO." It caught up to me. I couldn't feel anything. It was all black. "VALUE += 1." 

More in my Document:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-MWYB_-z0CyXAWSxEgK1lcevlhR1b-YhiYNlF0hkfuQ/edit?usp=sharing

Origin: A cartoon shopkeeper lizard that is completely forgettable in an old cartoon series. Just a simple side character, noticing the main character breaking the fourth wall once, he dismissed this as a simple habit or hobby. He began to notice stuff no one else sees except for the main character and side character. He eventually began to feel like he was being watched, but could never figure out how or why. Also getting glimpses of eyes staring at him, but when looked at, they disappear. Slowly going insane and unstable.

Scene 2: The cameraman explores an abandoned location. The camera man looks around. He heard a faint noise. Turning to look at it. The camera caught a tail of something moving behind the  doorway. But he didn’t notice anything. The camera man continues to look around some more. He heard a noise behind him. He looks back. Background is behind him. Just staring at him. The camera man freezes. Background pulls an apple out of his mouth with his long unnatural curly fingers. “Is this what you’re looking for?” A silent pause between them staring. The apple rolls off his hand. His arm begins to uncurl. The camera falls to the ground. Instantly ending the tape.

More in my document:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-MWYB_-z0CyXAWSxEgK1lcevlhR1b-YhiYNlF0hkfuQ/edit?usp=sharing