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My protagonist takes a drug every day that dulls his emotions, because his emotions are a weapon that an otherworldly entity built into him
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My protagonist takes a drug every day that dulls his emotions, because his emotions are a weapon that an otherworldly entity built into him

In my Abaddon Cycle series (military/cosmic sci-fi, book 1 of 5 out), my POV protagonist Jason has "Abhamic powers" -- psychic abilities tied to emotional intensity. The stronger he feels something, the more dangerous he becomes to everyone around him, because he can't easily control his power...and the entity who 'gifted' this power to him is after his mind and soul. Jason is an unfinished test subject in a hostile world.

Jason didn't choose this: he, his brother, and Sam (pictured) were given these Abhamic abilities through repeated nanite exposure in a government laboratory setting, before they escaped. The lab and the nanotech both trace back to the same artifact: the Abaddon Beacon, a strange obelisk that was under study in the labs. The mystery of what Abaddon is, where it came from, and what it plans to do with the human race is a central first-book question...as well as whether the scientists were in control of the lab operations, or Abaddon itself.

But Abaddon isn't after his friends, only Jason. The reason why is another mystery. The 'chosen one' trope semi-applies here, but it's the series villain who chose him, not the universe or God or anything like that.

Abaddon is also the source of the Nanophage: a strain of its miraculous nanotech that can infect humans and machines, which has been happening more and more often as its technologies spread further and further into human society. It has been spreading through both primary factions of the story for years, despite attempts to slow it down. The Phage has a lot of purposes, but a big one is to allow Abaddon to project influence through it, at range. The Nanophage becomes the obelisk's eyes and ears in an ever-increasing radius (across the Sol System at the time of the story's beginning). So Jason can be ambushed by Abaddon's presence anytime, through a Phage-compromised laborer, a corrupted robotic unit, anything infected can become a conduit.

Jason's drug suppressant: Osmium

Osmium (not the metal) is the name of the neural suppressant Jason takes daily. It doesn't grant power or shield him physically; it flattens his emotions, same tradeoff as real-world drugs that dull your mind to manage a condition. Lower highs, higher lows, fewer feelings sharp enough to trigger a cascade, or Abaddon's notice. It works, but it costs him, bc Jason's not fully present in his own life--and his friends know this. But this keeps him under Abaddon's psychic radar.

If one of Abaddon's possession probes lands, or Jason misses an Osmium dose, or his control cracks, he loses control. Jason's abilities go into an automatic, indiscriminate defensive cascade that doesn't distinguish threats from bystanders. The only way to stop it is getting Osmium back into his system before his psychic outbursts burn through everything/everyone nearby. He's mostly a danger to others in these moments, not himself -- unless Abaddon's possession attempt actually succeeds, which is a different, WAY worse problem tied to what the obelisk ultimately wants him for.

Why I built the system this way

Magical powers, psychic powers and other stuff like that are super cool staples of the SFF genre, but these things have been done many times before. I thought that starting Jason off below where most protagonists start would be interesting -- BELOW the ability to even control himself, with that forming the core of his arc in the first book. Rather than training sequences with master Yoda, we see Jason gradually begin to get control over himself (and his outbursts), over the course of his journey to find Abaddon and stop it from doing whatever nefarious shit its trying to do.

There's a lot of focus on Jason's emotional state as he faces threats in the physical world, plus being under constant threat from an eldritch entity that can strike almost anytime. There's parallels to real-world forms of mental illness, anxiety attacks, panic spirals (which we're all familiar with, to some extent). Jason's struggle to overcome both himself and the entity that seeks his soul is the emotional core of the story, but once he's over that first hurdle, that's only the first stage of his development. There's way more to come in future books as Jason and his friends learn more about Abhamic abilities as they go--which is vital, because if they can't or they're too slow, Abaddon's ruinous plans for the human race will come to fruition.

Concept art attached is from an in-development graphic novel adaptation that I'm working on alongside the main series--different medium, not the novel's canon style, but it captures the moment better than I could describe it.

Happy to answer questions or comments about the Abhamic "magic" system, Abaddon, the Nanophage, or Osmium. Hit me!

(From "The Call of Abaddon")

u/ColinSearleAuthor — 18 hours ago
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Looking for book recommendations to spark inspiration and help me brainstorm story ideas !

Hi.. everyone,

After looking previous advices from all of you guys ,I think, first I need to read some solid inspirational books to help me generate and flesh out my ideas.

Could you suggest some books that really helped you spark your creativity, master the art of plotting, or just made you think, "Wow, I want to write something as brilliant as this"?

I'm open to two types of recommendations:

  1. Fiction books with incredible word-building, unique concepts, or mind-blowing plot twists that make you want to write.

  2. Non-fiction books on writing/creativity (like Stephen King's On Writing) that offer great actionable advice on how to pull ideas out of your head.

Thanks in advance for your help !

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u/Great-Cost9329 — 1 day ago

Would it be stereotypical to include dissociative identity disorder on a villain?

I have a villain in my story, who throughout his life was subject to heavy abuse and torture as a child. He grew up in a generational cult and even eventually took it on..Blah blah blah.. Long story short, he develops what would be classified as dissociative identity disorder today.

To his character, there’s no ‘evil’ personality, he’s just a villain that happens to have DID. Every act that he commits is done on his own whim, and he, as the core, is the most conscious personality of the five in his body, and I mainly view his disorder as a coping mechanism..only switching in cases of extreme distress, where stability barely exists.

Though still, I want to search for advice wherever I can as I acknowledge many subs for DID often have rules prohibiting questions about writing characters with DID, which I completely understand. I thought that here would be a good starting point, and i’ll be willing to move anywhere as directed.

I want to note, that i’m being as careful as I can be with such a complex topic and research is very prominent with his character!

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u/n_noenemy — 1 day ago
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So I am writing a story about a girl group that’s in college and is getting stalked about something that happened in high school so I can’t name the characters plz help me

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u/Moon_murder36 — 2 days ago

How do you avoid exposition with only one character?

I am attempting to write a screenplay about a young man obsessed with a recent unidentified persons case, a Jane Doe.

In a film that follows primarily one character how do I avoid him spelling out his desires and thought process. I have also considered making it found footage that way he can delve into his thought process by explaining it to the camera. In real life we don’t go around expressing our desires and psyche out loud to ourselves (at least most people don’t).

But if any of you have gone through a similar situation, how do you write a character and try to showing their psychology and thought process when they are all alone?

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u/Effective-Spirit-241 — 4 days ago

Can someone help with me on developing OC?

I am currently making my own right now I’m just Writing everything down the concept Before the Designing stage so I can get more refined

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u/Far-Bowl-4984 — 4 days ago
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Do you think I could redeem a war criminal in my story?

Before coming to America, Dimitri was a soldier in the Russian Civil War. He followed orders and took part in attacks that killed innocent people [Genicide] and destroyed entire villages. [Ethnic Cleansing] he also witnessed SA and Rape [never took part] things he did during the war left him with guilt that he could never escape.After deserting the army, he fled to America and moved in with his cousin in Port City (Portland, Oregon). Trying to survive, he got mixed up with local gangs and became a reliable criminal. Robbery, smuggling, and violence didn't bother him anymore because he'd already seen the worst of war.

Deep down, though, he wants to be a better man. He knows he can't erase his past, but he hopes that doing the right thing now might help him become someone different. Every day is a fight between the person he used to be and the person he wants to become.

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u/Striking-Can-1931 — 5 days ago
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How do I go about writing this without compromising the character's values?

I am in the process of writing a long romance fic, in which one of the characters (Character A) is an investigative journalist and the other (Character B) runs a big corporation. Character A cares a lot about his job and the work he does because of some abuse he faced in the past, and goes to interview and investigate Character B because of an anonymous tip. He ends up finding nothing, and they build a professional working relationship, where Character B respects Character A's commitment to journalism, and Character A recognizes that Character B stands out against the people he often reports on. The problem I am running into occurs as the romance develops further. As they grow closer and become official in their relationship, would that not cause problems with the integrity of Character A's reporting? If Character A had written about Character B, but then it comes out that they are romantically involved, would it not jeopardize Character A's work and career? I don't want to not address it because I feel like it is an important part of the character, but at the same time just having them say "Oh yeah we're dating but that doesn't change the fact I value news" feels like a shallow excuse that wouldn't pass in the eyes of the public. Does anyone have any ideas on how I could go about exploring this?

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u/Wild-Tough-6771 — 4 days ago

How to write a character with schizoaffective disorder?

Sorry if my English is bad or strange.

my character has a childhood with bad (stressful) episodes and severe trauma in adolescence/adulthood after which he closes himself off from the world.

he has a strong emotional reaction to triggers and persistent hallucinations

I'm not sure if I'm picking the right disorder for him. From what I've read, this seems like the most appropriate one.

I'm looking for advice on where or how I can learn more about this. or maybe someone has experience describing similar disorders and has advice. I want to portray this realistically so as not to create misconceptions about the diagnosis.

also a little more detail about lore.

Dan (character), from a fantasy world, so. He has a blood connection to a demon who constantly appears as a voice in his head and tells him what a piece of shit he is. This is one of the factors why Dan begins to have voice hallucinations over time. He also has a lot of traumatic experiences because he helps his caregiver with her work and she does shit like Rick. (from Rick and Morty) Therefore, he observed many unpleasant or cruel scenes, all mixed with a caring "family." Therefore, he develops a stress reaction, where memory lapses begin and he forgets most of the traumatic or stressful experience, and it is only due to certain factors/ triggers that he sometimes remembers it.and his traumatic experience is that his guardian dies before his eyes and he is left alone, after which he closes himself off from everything and looks for the killer with a desire for revenge.and this is the reason why his hallucinations are getting worse and he starts to constantly see different silhouettes or some smaller hallucinations, like it seems to him that a cat is running near him, but there is nothing there. A beetle flies, but it's empty there.

I don't know if this is a good representation, or if it can be built like this gradually. I have no idea either., how to describe it in the text itself or in the pictures. how to portray his reactions to stress or triggers

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u/odifkk — 5 days ago

How do I write subtle self-awareness?

I’m writing a character named Tanie.

She lives in Avanthier World, a fictional simulated reality. She knows the world is artificial, but I don’t want her to become a cliché self-aware AI character.

No constant fourth-wall breaking. No glitchy lines. No “I am just code” drama.

I want her awareness to feel quiet, almost like something she has learned to live with.

How would you make that feel subtle?

u/Far-Yogurtcloset1760 — 6 days ago

Writing an Apthetic MC

Hi, I am currently working on a sci-fi story that has a largeish main cast (8-10 characters depending on the point.)

And I need advice on how to make an Apathetic character interesting as he is one of the core characters and I have figured out his apathy and how aside from the main cast he is apathetic towards basically everything.

I also know I want his main arc to be overcoming his apathy.

(If it helps he is essentially part of a group that keeps the universe safe from threats)

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u/Silkpilk — 5 days ago

“Detective” Richard

Making this more as a means of developing his character.

Richard is a man who worked as a foster parent for the MC who eventually became a private investigator for multiverse situations around the country.

Richard’s intentions were to get some cash and maybe get his parents off his back about having kids. When Thane came to his door and the paranormal became normal, the situations changed and Richard’s focus became helping him learn how to be an investigator. Thane, meanwhile, showed him what he knew about the world and gave him an entirely new demographic for clients, who Thane later began to take.

He’s not exactly a bad person or a good person. Just someone who likes to say they solve problems. Thane was the first person who made him believe that people could be given a greater cause, but he himself doesn’t believe he’s got any part of it.

Richard is someone who Thane calls on a lot of occasions to get preliminary work done while Thane does most of the field work.

Wanted to get some opinions on who he is so far and if having him there is a good suggestion or if having Thane be a solo act who learned from an investigator is good enough.

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u/Mariothane — 5 days ago

If the main character of a book is deeply flawed, are they still the protagonist?

In the genre of lit that I like, “weird girl lit,” the main character is often a woman with some sort of emotional, dark, unhinged, even violent behavior.

It makes me wonder whether she is still the protagonist? Is she also the antagonist at the same time? Or are all of the people opposing her throughout the story, her antagonists? (Even if those people are good people).

I learned in school that protagonist is good/hero and antagonist is bad/villains so now my head is in a scramble 😆

I’m just a reader, but Reddit suggested I ask here.

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u/Layla_Wilson11894 — 7 days ago
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Have you ever become emotionally attached to a character you created ?

A s a writer, we spend so much time with our characters that sometimes they stop feeling fictional and start feeling real.

Have you ever become emotionally attached to a character you created? What made the character so special? Was it their personality, their journey , or something completely unexpected?

I'd love to hear your stories and experiences.

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u/Great-Cost9329 — 8 days ago

How do I write a character of colour as a white person?

So I’m an 18, Nordic Non-binary person and have been working on a book series for around two years now and I’m questioning my methods. I want my roster of characters to be as diverse as possible, all shapes, sizes, backgrounds, skin colours, gender identity and sexualities. However I’m worried about whether I’m portraying my characters realistically. I’ve kind decided to write my characters based solely on their personality traits and not their gender identity or race. But I’m wondering if it’s the right thing to do to not take their physical attributes into account. So reddit, am I doing this right or should I change my approach? I mean why should my characters of colour be any different from my other characters? Genuinely asking here, please educate me:)

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u/blue_valley08 — 9 days ago
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What are some character quirks?

I am writing some new characters to a new story and was wondering what fun quirks or minor flaws could be! What are things you would like to see more of when writing? Some examples for quirks or physical flaws, etc I would include would be like a droopy eye, being deaf in one ear but not the other, scar from previously having a clef lip when younger, wears sweatshirts in the summer but shorts in the early and late winter, walking so quietly that they startle people when the don't mean to, rub their elbow when they are worried, etc. Things that are unique and special to characters, but don't make a huge impact unless you make it.

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u/warrior2queen — 7 days ago

Advice for how to tackle my religious character

Ok, this is gonna be really long, but please bear with me. I'm trying to write a religious character (either Catholic or Protestant Christian), but I'm also worried I'm sending the wrong message with how her character development is going. My character has some very extreme beliefs that get deconstructed in the story. When I say that, I don't mean she's a bigot (love thy neighbor is very important to her), or that she's against medicine (in her eyes, if God didn't want people to use medicine, why could the human body be understood medically), or even thinking "rock and roll is the devil's music". Here is a list of some of her extreme beliefs:

  • She and her mom are thoroughly convinced that a demon is constantly possessing her and has been since her first baptism (or christening, again depends)
  • Genuinely believes that self-flagellation or flailing is a reasonable punishment for "fighting off the demon inside her"
  • She should avoid any sort of friendship with others since she could be led astray. And I don't mean like vagrants, literally even other kids at church who are just like watching normal YouTube videos, are bad because it would distract her from reading her bible.
  • She avoids all guys since it could lead her to temptation
  • She avoids anything that she could enjoy, like soft stuff, pink girly things, and writing stories, since it could distract her from her faith in her eyes
  • She actually avoids all general entertainment or fun, since again, she could be distracted
  • She believes that if what she writes doesn't involve God, it's not something she should do
  • She avoids general physical contact to avoid being distracted
  • She thinks psychiatrists are the same as psychics

I think there are some more, but this is it for now. The point is that she's very self isolated and is constantly scared of the possibility of her eternal damnation if she lets sin in. She a huge battle tale since in her eyes it's better the person gets taught is better than her turning a blind eye.

Her character arc is her learning to let herself enjoy things without panicking, and that theologically she's not possessed but she probably has some mental issues her passed down to her. But my main worry is that I'll accidentally say with her arc "you don't need to worry about the media and influences you consume and just have fun" with as a religious person I want to avoid. Her interests are mostly just wierd stories she made up and a western story she's writing. So any religious people or people in general with advice or just a general rating would be great, Thanks.

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u/Busy-Butterscotch743 — 7 days ago

Soo I need to know if I should do this

In me and my cousins comic there will be an AI antagonist named Alina, but I need to know if this is a good route to take I’m giving her body dysmorphia, so she has an interesting story compared to our other villains , a prototype childcare robot from 2098 that was left alone in a lab after being abandoned, eventually during the story she is turned on by an accidental computer virus, it corrupts her, and because she was never finished she just has a blank mannequin body, instead of realistic synthetic skin, so she becomes obsessed with becoming perfect because she was abandoned and unfinished Our other antagonists include Mr Administrator, a conquest like villain, Omega-Man, a corrupt “Superman type” character, Henry/spiral, a guy in a exosuit that just likes killing people, an alien emperor, and one more that I forget

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u/Aggravating-Gear-668 — 7 days ago

How far can a character go[actions wise] and still be likeable/good?

My MC is an anti hero, though very on the edge between anti villain and anti hero. he is also a negative utilitarian, so he will sacrifice the few for the many a lot of the times. nd along with that many other stuff, like he will lie, decieve, etc etc, if it means he can save more peoplethat way. the only main thing he does though is he remembers every single person he has killed, and or failed to save, and is kind of a sin eater like archetype. he also is selfless, a bit too much at times, he doesn't want people to care about him if it means they will hurt when he inevitably dies. but i am not sure how far i can make him go and still remain likeable or sympathetic, and good in a way? he does have a few moral lines, he very rarely kills children, and would save one child even if 3 adults died.

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u/Elegant_Athlete_3737 — 9 days ago