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And so I turn

A choice, him or me
Revolver in my trembling hand
On this shallow poem we stand
He looks at me with a silent plea
A society that is eat or get eaten
Shoot or declare yourself beaten
In this fleeting moment I wonder
What is his worth compared to mine
Does he have a lover to entwine
Will his death make his family sunder
My brain tells me to pull the trigger
It’s too late to run
In the end I realize I’m out of vigor
And so I turn the gun

Idk if you’re allowed to add text to your poem but I don’t really care about anything anymore. This poem is just a blurb I made when I was in a dark spot, so it’s probably very shit but oh well maybe I can improve with some feedback, if someone will even see this.

And so I turn

A choice, him or me
Revolver in my trembling hand
On this shallow poem we stand
He looks at me with a silent plea
A society that is eat or get eaten
Shoot or declare yourself beaten
In this fleeting moment I wonder
What is his worth compared to mine
Does he have a lover to entwine
Will his death make his family sunder
My brain tells me to pull the trigger
It’s too late to run
In the end I realize I’m out of vigor
And so I turn the gun

Idk if you’re allowed to add text to your poem but I don’t really care about anything anymore. This poem is just a blurb I made when I was in a dark spot, so it’s probably very shit but oh well maybe I can improve with some feedback, if someone will even see this.

And so I turn

A choice, him or me
Revolver in my trembling hand
On this shallow poem we stand
He looks at me with a silent plea
A society that is eat or get eaten
Shoot or declare yourself beaten
In this fleeting moment I wonder
What is his worth compared to mine
Does he have a lover to entwine
Will his death make his family sunder
My brain tells me to pull the trigger
It’s too late to run
In the end I realize I’m out of vigor
And so I turn the gun

Idk if you’re allowed to add text to your poem but I don’t really care about anything anymore. This poem is just a blurb I made when I was in a dark spot, so it’s probably very shit but oh well maybe I can improve with some feedback, if someone will even see this.

I’ve been really into dystopian stories recently, after reading The Handmaid’s tale and Brave New World I am hooked, and I’m writing a dystopian horror myself! Though I want to write one where my protagonist isn’t just an observer but more of an retaliator against the machine. So besides those popular dystopian books does anyone know any good dystopian books? (1984 GO is on my read-list but it was already lent out in the library)

Firstly I would like to apologize for my english it isn’t very good and I know that.

Hello everyone I’m a new writer, like completely new. I am 16 without any published books, and I was wondering if 3000 words is a slow start for 1 month of writing. I am busy with school so that’s an important factor. Another annoying thing I was wondering anyone could help me with was with extending pages, I have 3000 words, though my story is already about 10% percent done which would lead to a 70 page book. Does anyone have any tips for extending a page? Like maybe overexplaining everything?

Thank you in advance

Weinerschnitzel