u/Zwaidz

[In Progress] [5347] [Grimdark, Post-Apocalyptic] Dual protaganist, dark character driven novel. Post-Apocalyptic setting

I'm a relatively new writer, but I'm ambitious. The problem is, I have no real idea whether my work is any good. I haven't had much luck finding people to give me feedback, so I would absolutely love it if I could find someone here willing to help. In exchange, I'd be happy to read your work and provide feedback as well.

Feedback:
English is my second language, so expect some grammar mistakes. What I'm really interested in is what you think of the story and the characters, and any other thoughts you're willing to share.

Blurb.
In 2062 the men with no senses spoke to God.

Maruta

The third world war left nothing behind. The land is poison, the sky is ash, and the people who remain have become something the old world wouldn't recognise. Man became ruthless, no longer caring for empathy, no longer caring for cruelty. They would survive at any cost. The diseased became fodder, the lesser fortunate ate their kin to survive, sustaining on the rotting flesh, the little it would sustain them. The rich hoarded the last of supplies, spewing their waste onto the poor. Some people survived the wastes desperately clinging on to life, or what was left of it. But in the bleakness there were still some men who tried to save the earth from disease and rot. And in their eyes, only through forced evolution could humans adapt, all other hope had abandoned them. A division of the most cunning and intelligent humans simply called ENDURE. The minds of these men were no doubt great, humanity's last defence against extinction. But, cruelty and intelligence often walk hand in hand, like lovers in life and death.

How far would you go to be the saviour?

Content warning 18+. Gore, and dark themes.

Write a comment or send me a dm, if interested.

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u/Zwaidz — 13 hours ago

[In Progress] [5347] [Dual protaganist, dark character driven novel. Post-Apocalyptic setting]

Feedback:
I'm a relatively new writer, but ambitious, problem is I really have no idea, if my work is good. I haven't had any luck finding people to give feedback, so i would absoulutely love it if i could find someone, here, willing to help. I will gladly read and provide feedback your work in exchange.

As for the feedback, english is my second, language, so expect faults in my grammar. I am more interested in what you think of the story and characters, and generally any thoughts, you are willing to share.

Blurb.
In 2062 the men with no senses spoke to God.

Maruta

The third world war left nothing behind. The land is poison, the sky is ash, and the people who remain have become something the old world wouldn't recognise. Man became ruthless, no longer caring for empathy, no longer caring for cruelty. They would survive at any cost. The diseased became fodder, the lesser fortunate ate their kin to survive, sustaining on the rotting flesh, the little it would sustain them. The rich hoarded the last of supplies, spewing their waste onto the poor. Some people survived the wastes desperately clinging on to life, or what was left of it. But in the bleakness there were still some men who tried to save the earth from disease and rot. And in their eyes, only through forced evolution could humans adapt, all other hope had abandoned them. A division of the most cunning and intelligent humans simply called ENDURE. The minds of these men were no doubt great, humanity's last defence against extinction. But, cruelty and intelligence often walk hand in hand, like lovers in life and death.

How far would you go to be the saviour?

Content warning 18+. Gore, and dark themes.

Write a comment or send me a dm, if interested.

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u/Zwaidz — 13 hours ago

Is it possible to write a non litrpg?

I've been writing for a while and recently started a more traditional 100–200 page post-apocalyptic/endurance novel, which differs from the progression/LitRPG stories that seem to dominate Royal Road, and as someone new to both the platform and publishing, I'm wondering whether it's possible to gain traction with a non-LitRPG story, and if so, how to go about it, since my main goal isn't popularity or money, but simply finding people to discuss my work with and help me improve my writing?

Anyways i attached my first couple chapters if anyone wants to read it, i would really apreciate any help!

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/166967/maruta

u/Zwaidz — 7 days ago