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THE HIGH PRIEST OF SUNLESS CITADEL

PROLOGUE: The Man Who Came Out of the Road

You should be asleep, Roy. Pull the blanket up. There.

The man your history books call a myth — Mortis the Eternal, High Priest of the Sunless Citadel, the last and strongest necromancer who ever walked — came to Thornhallow on a November morning when I was ten years old, fixed our collapsed grain store roof, cleared the valley pass, and left without asking for a single grain of rye. We spent the entire winter convinced he had cursed us. That is the whole story. But you want the texture of it, and the texture is where the thing lives, so here it is.

The rye had gone grey from the roots up that year — a wet, bruise-coloured grey, smelling of stone-vessel water left standing too long, sweet in a way that meant spoiled, not ripe. Three harvests dead. The city down south had stopped sending tax men because there was nothing left to collect. We were in the outer lands, past the third marker stone, the kind of place that doesn't have a proper name on any map they keep down south. Soup from boiled belt-leather. Lard scraped from the bottoms of empty crocks. My father's face going hollow by slow degrees, the skin drawing close to the bone the way wet boot-leather draws close to the foot.

Then my father went silent. That was the first sign. He was a man who shouted at everything — the mule, the sky, the weather, his own hands — and on that morning he stopped mid-sentence, grabbed my mother's arm, and said nothing at all. I followed his eyes to the road.

Mortis was a hundred paces out and closing. Seven feet of rusted black iron plate, the joints shrieking at every step with the high grinding note of a mill-wheel cracking apart, his boots sinking boot-deep into the November mud and pulling free with a wet sucking sound, steady as a millstone turning. Behind him, twelve shapes, thin and pale in the grey morning light — and the distance had to close before you understood what they were, because at distance the mind tried to make them into something it already knew, tried to make them children or very thin men, and then the distance closed and there was no more room for that, and you understood. Wired cattle-bone and human-bone, yellowed and pitted, carrying iron ditch-spades and double-bitted axes across their bony shoulders. The sinew holding them together was old and dry and slightly hairy.

Old Bertram the miller dropped to his knees in the mud and began confessing sins aloud to the frozen ground, speaking fast, working backward through his life in a voice that cracked on every other word. Mortis walked past him at four feet's distance without slowing, without turning his iron helmet, without any acknowledgment that Bertram existed. Bertram took this as confirmation of everything he feared and confessed faster.

Mortis stopped in front of my father.

The iron helmet had no visible eyes. Only darkness inside the visor, and the smell — cold, wet cellar-dirt, the smell of deep earth that has not seen light in a long time. His jaw opened with the sound of an old latch. When he spoke, it was not loud, but the vibration of it got into your back teeth and stayed there.

"Roof," he said. Then, after a pause of several seconds, during which no one breathed: "I will fix."

He turned to look at the collapsed grain store. The oak beams had caved inward across the front face, the whole left side buckled, three months of dead weight from the snow that had already come and gone.

My father pointed at it with his whole shaking arm, as if Mortis might have missed it. As if a seven-foot iron necromancer standing four feet away needed direction.

Mortis nodded once, turned to his skeletons, and they moved.

The first skeleton to enter the ruined store had a rusted iron spike through its ribcage, entering below the left shoulder-blade and exiting just above the hip, the metal eaten orange with age. It walked directly to the collapsed end-beam, set its spade down with the careful motion of a craftsman settling tools, and wrapped its finger-bones around the timber. The second skeleton followed and took position at the midpoint. They stood very still, waiting for the third.

Marta the weaver's daughter, who was fourteen and had been standing just behind me, understood this as the beginning of the slaughter. She ran. Her foot caught the frozen rut at the road's edge and she went down hard on her wrist, and the crack of it was very loud in the silence, and every skull in that ruin swung toward the sound at once — twelve heads, a single motion, the way a flock of starlings folds mid-air.

Mortis did not turn. He was already at the far corner of the surviving wall, running one gauntleted finger along the line of the remaining upright, reading the timber the way my father used to read the sky before rain. He reached back without looking and touched the shoulder of the nearest skeleton, two fingers only. It turned back to the beam. The others followed, one by one, until all twelve had their backs to her again.

Marta lay in the mud holding her wrist to her chest. She did not make a sound.

No one went to her. I want you to understand that, Roy — there was not a cruel person in that village. We went to each other. That was what we were. But nothing about what was happening in front of us gave any instruction on what movement meant anymore. Whether standing still was the correct thing. Whether walking toward Marta was the act that ended everything, or whether that ending had already been decided and we simply had not been told yet.

Mortis measured the next beam.

Hazel looked at the fire. The embers held their heat, giving nothing else.

"Three days," she said. "And we never worked out — not truly, not in any way we could agree on afterward — whether he had come to save us or to sort us into something he needed."

Roy was quiet for a moment. Outside, the harvest moon sat fat against the shutters.

"Which was it?" he said.

Hazel looked at him for a long moment.

"Tell me the rest," he said.

"I just gave you the beginning."

"More of it."

The fire popped once.

"More of it," she agreed.

CHAPTER I: The Bridge That Held After Him

The second morning he was still there.

We had spent the night in the kind of silence you get when nobody has agreed to sleep but everyone has agreed to stop talking — the whole village in a state of suspended waiting, the children kept indoors with doors barred against something nobody could name precisely but everyone could feel in the back of the throat. By first light my father had crept to the window and looked out, and Mortis was standing at the edge of the road where it met the mill-crossing bridge, still in the iron plate, still in the dark. Standing. Simply standing. Whether he had moved in the night, whether he had rested, whether the concept of rest applied to him at all — none of us had an answer for any of that, and the not-knowing was doing its own particular kind of damage.

The bridge had been failing since my grandmother's time. One of the centre planks had gone soft from the inside, the wood going punky and pale, and three years of flood-wet had taken the lower stringer until it bowed in the middle like a tired back, the whole crossing carrying the feeling of a thing held together by the collective agreement of everyone who used it that it would hold. Old Bertram had refused to take his cart across since summer, hauling his millstone loads by the long route through the upper field, adding forty minutes to every run, because the bridge had looked at him one morning in a particular way and Bertram — who had by this point logged considerable hours communing with frozen ground — understood the feeling of something waiting.

Mortis looked at the bridge for a long time. Then he said, to no one in particular, in the voice that lived in your back teeth: "Load-bearing capacity. Insufficient."

He turned to his skeletons and held up two fingers, then pointed at the bank of the mill-stream below the bridge.

Two skeletons went down the bank sideways, their bony feet finding purchase in the frozen clay with the methodical care of men who had done this kind of slope-work before, which — Hazel paused, looked at the fire — well. They probably had. They went into the streambed up to their hip-bones and stood there in the current, water breaking cold and white around yellow bone, waiting.

Now. Here is where I want you to understand something about Pell the carpenter.

Pell was the closest thing we had to a man of practical sense. He had built the grain store's original frame. He had laid the foundation stones for the mill-wheel housing. If anyone in Thornhallow was going to watch skeleton workers wade into a streambed and think structural reinforcement rather than the opening motions of mass murder, it was Pell. He looked at the two skeletons standing in the mill-stream, looked at Mortis crouching at the bridge's edge and pressing his gauntleted thumb into the soft centre plank with the deliberate pressure of someone testing for rot, looked at the iron ditch-spades propped against the bank, and he put all of this together with the speed of a man whose entire life had prepared him for exactly this kind of material assessment. Then he turned to my father and said, very quietly: "He's shoring the centre crossing."

My father looked at him.

"The skeletons in the water," Pell said. "They're positioning for a support brace. He'll want new timber for the stringer and the centre plank, maybe two cross-members if the rot's gone all the way through. It's a half-day's work for four men, maybe less for—" He stopped. He looked at the twelve skeletons ranged along the bank. He said, much more quietly: "Less for what he's got."

My father looked back at Mortis.

"He's fixing the bridge," Pell said.

My father said, after a moment: "Why."

Pell had no answer for that.

This was the problem, Roy. This was the thing nobody could get past. A man fixes your roof, you understand the mechanism — he has a reason, even if it is only payment or obligation or proximity. A stranger fixes your roof, you want to know the reason badly enough that you will invent one if you don't have it. A seven-foot necromancer with an iron face and twelve skeleton labourers fixes your roof and then walks to your failing bridge at first light to assess its load-bearing capacity, and the question of why becomes a thing that sits in the chest and does not move, because every answer the mind reaches for is larger than the thing in front of you, and the thing in front of you is already plenty large.

So Pell said "he's fixing the bridge" and my father said "why" and no one answered and Mortis drove an iron pry-bar under the soft centre plank and began levering it up with a sound like a long exhalation, and the village watched him do it.

What the village did while watching him do it — well. You've heard about processions. You've heard about the kind of praying people do in temples, with the long silences and the formalized words. This was neither of those things. This was the village of Thornhallow standing in a loose cluster at the road's safe end, a good thirty feet from the bridge, in the grey November cold, doing something that had no name because nobody had ever had occasion to develop the ritual for it. Marek the blacksmith stood with both hands pressed flat against his thighs, in the posture of a man who has decided that total physical neutrality is the only correct response, his body a declaration of harmlessness addressed to the universe at large. His wife Sofie held their youngest against her chest and murmured something low and continuous, the words blurring together into a sound more like sustained breath than speech, a kind of sonic stillness she maintained for the better part of an hour.

Old Bertram had run through his immediate sins the previous morning and had apparently kept working through the night. He was now, by the sound of it, into his early twenties.

Mortis pulled the centre plank free and set it aside with both hands, carefully, in the way you set things aside when you will need to measure against them. He crouched and looked at the exposed stringer, pressing three fingers against the wood at the worst point of the bow and holding them there, and then said — again to no one in particular, though the carrying quality of his voice meant it reached everyone — "Worse than expected."

The village flinched as one body.

Pell, who had been watching the structural assessment with the focused attention of a man who cannot decide between professional interest and terror and has elected to feel both simultaneously, said very quietly to my father: "He means the stringer. The bow. He means it's worse than he could tell from above."

My father said nothing.

"He's not talking about us," Pell said.

My father kept watching Mortis.

"Pell," he said, after a moment.

"Yes."

"Go home."

Pell went home.

My father stayed, because he was the kind of man who felt that whatever was happening in front of him needed a witness even if the witness could do nothing, even if witnessing was the full extent of what was possible. He stood at the end of the mill-crossing road with his hands in his coat pockets and watched Mortis the Eternal, High Priest of the Sunless Citadel, spend the better part of that morning pulling rotten timber from a failing bridge with the focused, unhurried attention of a man who had done this kind of work before and intended to do it correctly.

The skeletons worked in pairs — one at each support position, one passing timber, two managing the iron bar-clamps they had produced from a carrying frame strapped to the tallest one's back — with the efficiency of a crew that communicated without speech because they had no speech available to them. Mortis moved between positions and directed with gestures: two fingers here, a palm-down flattening motion there, once a single raised fist that stopped all movement simultaneously while he crouched and looked at something in the underframe for a long time before lowering his fist.

He spoke four times across the whole morning.

"New stringer. Twenty-two inches."

"Cross-member. Here."

A silence of perhaps twenty minutes, then: "Acceptable."

And at the end, standing from the bridge deck and dusting splinters from his gauntlets with the brisk efficiency of a finished thing: "Load-bearing restored."

He turned and walked back through the village toward the grain store.

My father watched him go. Then he walked out to the bridge, slowly, and stood at the centre of it, where the new planking lay pale against the old grey wood, the cross-members fresh and clean and smelling of cut timber in the cold air. He put his weight on it. He shifted his feet. He stamped once, with the heel of his boot.

The bridge held.

He stayed there for a while.

When he came back, my mother was waiting in the doorway, and she looked at his face and said: "Well?"

"Bridge is fixed," he said.

She looked at him.

"Roy," Hazel said — and her voice had shifted to the dry, patient register she used when she wanted you to hold something correctly before she handed it to you — "your great-grandfather was a good man, and a practical man, and not a man given to elaborate feeling. But he stood on that bridge for a quarter-hour in the November cold, stamping his heel into planking a necromancer's skeleton crew had laid, trying to locate the feeling that belonged to what had just happened. He could not find it. There was no feeling that fit. The thing that had occurred was too large for the words he had, and too ordinary for the dread he'd been carrying since the morning before, and the space between those two things — that gap — that is where the legend grew."

She reached forward and adjusted the blanket.

"That is always where it grows," she said. "In the gap between what happened and the feeling people decided it should have meant."

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