u/justagir11

hi so i just “finished” my essay and would like some feedback on what i could improve or do to make it longer and better. please dm me if you can help!

hello i am f17 and need help deciding on my personal essay topic. for background i am a shy black girl that grew up in predominantly white areas until i was 15. these are the topics i have right now:

1. how growing up in predominantly white neighborhoods shaped me as a person and how i viewed myself, it’ll build up to accepting myself as i am and how/why i want to go to an hbcu
2. write about the similarities between me and the disney princess rapunzel. talk about the parallels of her being trapped in her “mothers” tower and me being trapped in my antisocial mindset. again, it’ll build up to me breaking out of my shell and how more opportunities opened once i did.
3. i write based off the quote “i cannot be comprehended except by my permission” and talk about how i may look from the outside vs who i am once someone actually knows me.
4. i write about how my music taste has evolved over the years and how each of my apple music replays reflect the person i was at that time.

also if you pick a topic , please give tips/advice on how i could structure it and make it the best it can be.