u/nadimumimimka

I’m not too sure what to do with this, and I kind of just wrote whatever without much purpose. It’s not finished yet, but I just need to know what I could do better.

There are some things I’m unsure about, like Lara taking the pill bottles. She was very consistent about only taking 8 grams of coke so he wouldn’t notice, but I thought it seemed kind of fun for the plot? I don’t know. I know there are some inconsistencies, but bear with me 🙏. Also, sorry for the quality, I just took some screenshots.

Hi,i am writing a short film and those are the very first pages. My goal within does pages is to underline how uncomfortable Jane is. Shit will go down its not all boring office dialogue but i just want to get some feedback.