u/opop45

Second attempt at this with a link instead of dark screenshots!

Looking for a critique on the beginning of my prologue! General feedback is great but also looking to hear if my descriptions are too generic or even repetitive. Working to slow down on my usual tempo to be able to effectively write in a more traditional style. Hoping to eventually be able to blend the two voices to create something interesting but right now I’m focusing on refining the patience to be able to do at least one first. Also hoping I used the correct subgenre based on what this may turn into. Any and all notes are appreciated, thank you for your time and have a great rest of your day!

Thank you for your time, hope for some general feedback on the beginning of prologue. Particularly if the description is effective or too generic

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1IsM-csOUFMa4j8tgoVmXbpkE_DoTsyzw9EEuLAzZtBk/edit?usp=drivesdk