Looking for peer review, amateur writing
This is a chapter from something I’m working on. A novel?? about a young woman looking back on her life using the metaphor “a cat has nine lives.” Most lives much more mundane but each representing a loss of innocence/ milestone of understanding herself and the world around her. I never claimed to be a writer, my therapist suggested journaling and I enjoyed it much more than I thought I would. This is one of the intense parts, something I wasn’t sure exactly how to write effectively. I don’t want it to come off as straight trauma dumping, but I don’t want to run away from it either. Also, I fear i’m coming off very tumblr sad girl writing :( #help ⚠️⚠️huge trigger warning for this content, SA and violence⚠️⚠️
Looking for honest critique to improve, I have thick skin so tell me if it sucks or I should rewrite it differently
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-A72_tFLUjXcM7eUn4QK9j75R9poGUFT9YvZUnzhm2k/edit?usp=drivesdk