Looking for feedback on these opening pages. The narrator is supposed to be a kind of story teller, but I'm afraid this is too 'telly' and not 'showy'. The lyrical prose is intentional. Thoughts?
It's real tough out here for us guys 😮💨 Don't get me wrong, I love that genre fiction has become much more respected and taken a lot more seriously than how it used to be 50 years ago, but the resulting consequence is that there is virtually no space for literary fiction, especially online.
I feel very out of place in writing subs where everyone is writing fantasy, romance, dystopian, thriller, sci-fi, horror, and I have me and my little short collection too embarrassed to contribute to any meaningful discussion.
I'm honestly just looking for more teen writers who actually write literary fiction, and what their books are about.