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A slasher with psychological depth

Hey everyone! I’m a writer working on a horror feature called Spare. It’s a teen slasher with psychological depth, about a girl recovering from overdosing. She joins her old friend group for one last night out, only for someone to begin targeting them based on “Sins.”

I’ve had this script for quite some time, but I recently did a rewrite and it changed the script heavily.

Would love overall feedback about how my first act is so far.

I’m >20yo

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1zpkMsM\_VP4o99M0t7\_M7CwQXl2cR7mCt/view?usp=drivesdkspare

[I'm sorry the link I shared yesterday was not public but this time I have made sure that it is] I just completed and copyrighted my first ever screenplay and would love to get some honest feedback on it. I have written it as a pitch black, no holds bar absurdist comedy, which means it might be off-putting to some readers, but I was not sure if I should mark the whole post as NSFW. I know the names used seem on the nose and will change them if the feedback suggests that I should.

Also, since it is set in India, some of the dialogues use Hinglish(A localized blend of Hindi and English), which might alienate non-Hindi readers but even if you don't speak hindi, you will be able to grasp most of the context.

LINK: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1oPZgDDplKSXf3_LAxJK7w7yA6DhCAI9f/view?usp=drive_link

Title: The Method Actor

Format: Short Film

Pages: 26

Genre: Satire, Dark Comedy, Mockumentary, Absurdist Comedy

Language: Hinglish [Hindi+English]

Synopsis: A mockumentary retrospectively capturing the hijacking of a movie's production by a narcissistic method actor.

What I'm looking for:

Feedback on the overall structure of the screenplay.

Feedback on the name of the lead character(Is it too on the nose)

Feedback on the plotlines (I've tried to sum everything up, but if there are any plotholes do clarify)

I am against the use of AI in filmmaking or art forms, but I did use Grammarly to check and correct some of my grammatical/spelling errors, and I hope that does not affect the artistic integrity of my script.

Thanks for giving my script a shot hope you guys enjoyed reading it as much as I enjoyed writing it.

hi. i’m a poet. i’ve done a summer immersion programme in dy patil which also included a session on scriptwriting. although the professor there wasn’t helpful and i couldn’t get much out of it- i still want to learn more about scriptwriting. i’ve gone through the websites of aaft online and zee institute of media arts. thier 6months course seems a pretty good.
is there anyone who had done the same or any other course there. or can anyone help me out and tell me if it’s a good idea to do a course or not. how effective would it be and what else should i do other than the course?

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/168XZRvQQoJI85vV2W2bFAKpYJS7H92y4/view?usp=drive_link

I just completed my first ever screenplay and would love to get some honest feedback on it. I have written it as a pitch black, no holds bar absurdist comedy, which means it might be off-putting to some readers, but I was not sure if I should mark the whole post as NSFW. I know the names used seem on the nose and will change them if the feedback suggests that I should.

Also, since the story is set in India, the language used for some of the dialogues is Hinglish (A localized blend of Hindi and English), but even if you are not a native Hindi speaker, you might be able to understand the overall context for most of the script.

Title: The Method Actor

Format: Short Film

Pages: 26

Genre: Satire, Dark Comedy, Mockumentary, Absurdist Comedy

Language: Hinglish [Hindi+English]

Logline: A mockumentary retrospectively capturing the hijacking of a movie's production by a narcissistic method actor.

What I'm looking for:

1. Feedback on the overall structure of the screenplay.
2. Feedback on the name of the lead character(Is it too on the nose)
3. Feedback on the plotlines (I've tried to sum everything up, but if there are any plotholes do clarify)

Thanks for giving my script a shot hope you guys enjoyed reading it as much as I enjoyed writing it.