Need like actual review for my magic-systems. (CHECK DESCRIPTION)
So, originally I went to the magic building subreddit and made this post there for review but all the replies were 'i CaNT rEAd!!!11one iTZ tu small!!!111one' So yeah, this subreddit is my last resort.
Ofcourse you may not be able to read because of the reddit compression and device constraints lol. I get that. So I have made zoomed in version posts of the two co-existing magic systems in my manga.
Links for both of the powersystems:
1. Part 1: Dream Revering & Central bridge
2. Part 2: Revengeance & Central Bridge
Why separate zoomed in version in parts? Well obviously as you can see this magic system is quite... vast.
So, I was doing writing for my manga based on a mod of Terraria known as Calamity. Designing fights and whatever, but one day I got struck with the realization that these fights are Hollywood basic, not the cool strategical fights like my favorite mangas like JJBA & JJK, and videogames like Undertale, Deltarune. So one day I sat down and thought to my self, I need a magic system asap. And I realized, I can just make it based on my central theme of my own manga, that is dreams and revenge. (Which is kinda me). With Undertale, Deltarune, JJK and JJBA as my main riding forces of inspiration.
Through 8 iterations and 3 months of hard work, I have designed the magic system which I am glad to call it my own. Now all I require is the analysis of it. And I don't want my own bias. That is why I am handing it to you for your input.
My questions to you all is:
- What do you find unique about this system?
- What is your most favorite and least favorite mechanic?
- What is your most favorite concept and least favorite concept?
- Your overall verdict on how good/bad it is.
- what contradictions, problems you find in this system?
I know this might be stupidly big and information overload, spell errors with many ramblings for you, so here's my proposal, read it progressively, whenever you get time, just do a casual read. Whenever bored, just read 2-3 mechanics. And please, give it an honest review.
That's all. I will be highly obliged for your input.