Bit is a bunny who doesn't speak in his bunny village .they have tale of a mysterious treasure and a guy(bunny) who had gone mad trying to understand it and so nobody should goto him. The bit and his two friends (didn't found a good name yet for the friends) accidentally goto his house but he wasnt in there so they look around but suddenly he gets in they try to hide but he sees them he tells them About his research but he couldn't find the meaning of it and pulls out a bottle with a paper inside and shows there is nothing on it and then not points towards the back of the map then the guy realises that he was holding it back side front and it is the map to the treasure so he send them to get the treasure

Hello everyone!

I tried realy har to write this!

So I've been working on an original story for quite some time, and I've reached the point where I have a lot of ideas for the world, characters and lore, but I'm not sure anymore whether everything fits together as well as I think it does.

So I wanted to share the basic concept and some of the lore and get some honest feedback. I'm especially interested in hearing if anything feels too complicated, cliché, confusing, or unnecessary.

The basic premise

The story takes place in a future version of Earth after a catastrophic event connected to humanity's first contact with non-human civilizations.

After the catastrophe, the world changes dramatically. Technology advances, but at the same time something much older begins to emerge: magic, supernatural entities, monsters and mysterious "aspects" that allow certain people to manipulate things such as Fire, Water, Air, Earth, Light and Darkness.

Human civilization develops around academies, cities, hunters, researchers, secret organizations and large neutral institutions such as the Continental.

The story starts relatively small, with a young student entering an academy, but gradually expands into something much larger involving ancient civilizations, cults, forgotten history, time paradoxes and the true origin of the catastrophe.

Jack

The protagonist is Jack.

He's intelligent, curious, eccentric and often jokes around even in situations where he probably shouldn't. He's not supposed to be the strongest character in the story.

In fact, one of the important parts of his character is that he only has two aspects: Fire and Darkness.

He constantly sees other people doing things he can't do.

Someone with Air can fly.

Jack looks at them and says:

>"Darn you, Darwin."

Someone with Water has incredible control over their surroundings.

Someone with Earth can create massive structures.

Jack can't do any of that.

Instead, he gradually develops his own fighting style.

He uses Fire through martial arts, rather than fighting like a traditional mage. A punch might ignite at the last possible moment before impact, a kick can create an explosive burst, etc.

Darkness is much more about movement and deception. Jack can use shadows to hide, evade attacks, reposition himself and move through darkness.

So his fighting style becomes a combination of martial arts + Fire + Darkness, rather than simply becoming a character who learns increasingly powerful spells.

This also connects to his personality. He's not necessarily the most powerful person in the room — he's the person who finds a strange way to use what he has.

The Sin of Solace

One of the biggest mysteries in the story is an entity known as the Sin of Solace.

I don't want the reader to immediately know what it actually is.

Different groups have completely different interpretations of it.

Some cultists believe that it is the downfall of humanity.

Others believe it is a savior, saint or protector that once saved humanity from something even worse.

There is an ancient temple built around its imprisoned body, which is sealed inside something resembling amber.

The cult itself is divided over whether the entity should remain imprisoned or eventually be released.

This is something I want to keep ambiguous for a long time.

One possible description of the entity is:

>"The Sinister Saint, whose dark and dreadful power was matched only by the chilling mystery of his true identity."

And when the Sin is eventually released, Jack may describe what happens with something like:

>"First came the cold. Then came the darkness. It rose from below, swallowing the land, devouring the heavens, and blotting out the light of day."

The diaries

Another major mystery involves three ancient diaries.

One is in the possession of the cult.

One eventually comes into Jack's possession.

The third is kept by Jack's mentor, who knows much more about the history of the world than he initially reveals.

The interesting part is that the diaries may not actually have been written by ancient people.

There is a possibility that they were written by Jack himself — from the future.

In one possible timeline, Jack fails to defeat the Sin of Solace.

As a final attempt to change the future, he sends or hides the diaries throughout the world so that another version of himself can eventually discover them.

This creates a time paradox:

Jack finds the diaries because his future self hid them, but his future self only hid them because Jack found the diaries.

I'm still deciding exactly how much of this should be a literal closed time loop and how much should involve alternate timelines.

The "Fourth Hero"

The cult also possesses an extremely old diary containing a prophecy about a fourth hero who will eventually do something to the Sin.

The problem is that the diary is so old and damaged that parts of the description are impossible to read.

Nobody knows whether the fourth hero is supposed to:

• kill the Sin,
• free the Sin,
• seal the Sin again,
• become the Sin,
• or do something completely different.

This is important because the characters may spend years believing they understand the prophecy when they actually don't.

The age of 27

There is also an old legend surrounding previous heroes who tried to defeat the Sin.

Every one of them supposedly died or disappeared at the age of 27.

Nobody knows whether this is a curse, a consequence of fighting the Sin, a time-loop phenomenon, or simply a distorted historical coincidence.

Jack leaves the academy at around 17 and eventually reaches the final confrontation when he is around 27 years old.

So when he reaches that age, the legend suddenly becomes much more personal.

The final confrontation

The final battle between Jack and William takes place beneath a group of enormous statues.

Locals believe these statues depict ancient heroes who once fought the Sin.

But there is a possibility that they are actually statues of Jack and William from a previous timeline.

Jack eventually defeats William and stands above him, ready to kill him.

And this is where I want to use something that was established much earlier in the story.

When they were young, Jack wrote a song about death and being remembered among the brave.

William criticized the song and thought it was terrible.

Years later, during their final confrontation, William begins singing that same song back to Jack.

Something that once seemed like a stupid joke between two young friends suddenly becomes their final conversation.

I want moments like this to show that their conflict isn't simply "hero vs villain." They were once similar people who made different choices.

William

William is the other central character.

I don't want him to be a traditional evil villain.

He genuinely wants to save people, but he becomes increasingly willing to sacrifice individuals, friends and eventually entire groups if he believes it will prevent something worse.

Jack and William are supposed to be mirrors of each other.

Both are intelligent.

Both investigate the unknown.

Both are willing to cross boundaries.

Both eventually gain access to knowledge and powers that normal people shouldn't have.

The difference is that Jack keeps asking:

"What kind of person am I becoming?"

William eventually starts asking:

"How many people am I willing to sacrifice to achieve the goal?"

What I'm trying to explore

The main theme isn't really "who is the strongest?"

It's more about what happens to a person when they are given enormous power and knowledge.

Jack begins the story believing that being powerful is what makes someone valuable.

Eventually he has to realize that his worth isn't determined by how powerful he becomes.

The final victory isn't supposed to be Jack becoming a god or the strongest person alive.

It's Jack refusing to become William.

This is still very much a work in progress, so I'd really appreciate honest criticism rather than just positive feedback.

Do these ideas feel intriguing, or are there simply too many mysteries and concepts competing with each other?

Which elements would you personally keep as the main mystery?

Does the 27-year-old legend feel interesting or too cliché?

Does the Jack/future-Jack diary paradox make sense?

Does the Sin of Solace feel mysterious in a good way, or just vague?

And most importantly: does Jack feel like a protagonist you'd actually want to follow through a long story?

EDIT So I'm writing the book, and the book follows an individual who can lucid dream. This individual goes onto create sentient life(without realising it), this sentient life goes onto escape her mind(It is sorta powered by the parts of their brain not being used) into the shared human conciousness. The being is able to duplicate itself and goes on to try to take over the human race by kicking humans out of their bodies during sleep and putting them into the shared human conciousness in their place. They can only access people while they're sleeping. The protaginists have to try to stop them in the dreamscape.

First post of the story I'm writing, hoping to get some help with it

DAY 1

I was scrolling through TikTok when I came across a video about zombies and the apocalypse, with what looked like evidence. I went to Google and began to research it, and what I found was alarming: zombies were rapidly spreading across the United States and the world, so I started learning new skills and practicing swordsmanship, while also ordering a full set of iron knight armor and an anvil to begin forging.

A month later, zombies began to appear in my neighborhood. As everyone was driving out of the neighborhood, I moved my family to the hill where the large, empty water silo sat, breaking down the door to get inside and cleaning it up, telling them to start building four floors. While they did that, I went back into the neighborhood to begin collecting supplies and killing the zombies that I found. They all fell one by one. They seemed to be weak zombies.

Going back to my house, I grabbed the chickens and put them into a sled so I could carry them all up the hill, and grabbed an axe from another house to chop down the trees on the way up. Each tree fell one by one. It had been almost 4 hours since I went down from the hill. I had carved a path in the forest to get up and down easily. I kept walking towards the silo to drop off the chickens.

When I got there, they were hard at work building the four floors. They had almost finished the first floor's frame by the time I got there. I dropped off the chickens, and with the sled, I went back down to collect all of the tree trunks that I had chopped down. It took nearly 3 hours, even with breaks, to collect the trees and chop down more for the wood we needed for the base.

By the end of the day, the first floor was finished. There was about an hour before the sun went down, so I went back to the house and grabbed the mattresses for everyone to sleep on. The sun had gone down by the time I got back. I had also grabbed a few flashlights, and with the stone I had collected throughout the day, I began to build a forge outside of the building while also breaking down a small portion of the wall to let air in and out so we don’t overheat during the night.

I had just finished building the new forge when they called me in to eat dinner. I took off my armor and propped up my sword on the wall and began to eat next to everyone else. After dinner, we went to sleep. The night went by fast and without any problems.

Okay, so I'm in the writing faze of a series, and I really wanna incorporate time travel in the latter half of it.

However, my problem with it is my brain isn't big enough to comprehend time travel much.

My series follows a digital world, with the individuals within becoming sentient after the developer of the world pours his consciousness and heart into it (basically in the style of the movie '9', if anyone here has seen it).

However, later in the show, a threat is oncoming and to defeat it the characters need to travel into the past to find an individual that prophecies of the present tell can stop the threat.

The people in the past are before the whole 'sentience inheritence'.

The issue is I really wanna make the people in the past aware too (I'm not gonna spoil why, but it does have plot importance). The way I'm imagining is some sort of bomb taken from the future that has captured the essence of the developer's soul that can be unleashed on the world.

Only issue with that is that if they did this, everyone of the past would already have soul, which would mean the people of the future don't have to go back with the bomb which means they never get soul.

Is there any way to get around this?

So I was sitting down and staring at my ideas doc when this came to mind. I have this kind of mini universe already in mind with telekinetic mafia families? The idea is that a detective is looking into a string of unusual incidents that he has been explicitly told not to, and finds himself digging into centuries of cover-ups for two warring families in his city. Unfortunately, he has put a target on his back from both families and must use his wit and quick thinking to successfully not get killed, at least not until he reveals the truth. Is this a good idea? Because I think I feel really into it. Feel free to give honest thoughts or even contribute ideas that could enhance the plot.

It's called Stepsisters: What is Happening!?!?

My story idea involves Sidney , a Dartmouth graduate, who's a double major in computer science and chemistry, and eventually is assigned a job at The Pentagon , at the age 28. While employed there , he stumbles upon an incredible device that can create a life like image of someone, that's strikingly real. Too real. He confiscates this technology at a laboratory on the campus of the facility. After doing so , he attempts to approach a number of women in casual conversations, and in one case , explains to a woman wearing a green , shamrock laden Guinness hoodie, that he knows Colin Farrell. She actually believes him , but has her doubts. He explains how he knows him , and that he's going to be meeting him in a few days at a coffee shop in Georgetown. She's intrigued, to the point that when he asks if she'd like to meet him , she's clearly pulled in with curiosity. The Dartmouth graduate / Pentagon employee tells her not to tell anyone else. The coffee shop meeting time and date offers a slow , and not so frequent group of patrons and that's preferable to Sidney. While the young woman is clearly starstruck by Colin Farrells presence , Farrell continues to place , to redirect the young woman's focus on his friend Sidney , and what a great guy he is. As the conversation goes on , the AI generated image of Colin Farrell has clearly provided the influence that Sidney wants so as to pull this young , impressionable woman more into his life. Such a clever and unimaginable concept could be used for good purposes, but instead Sidney only has nefarious purposes behind it. He seeks to control the women he encounters through this methodology. Where may it end ? Just how impressed and influenced can this clandestine form of AI benefit him ?

I recently came across this phenomenon. “Psychological worldbuilding” is a phenomenon that manifests human imagination. It’s when a person invents a universe and its rules in their mind. They can constantly rehearse dialogues and plots in their head, think through the lore, and become attached to the characters. Most creative work (film, literature, video games) is built around this phenomenon.

My question is to those who engage in “psychological worldbuilding”: could you please tell us about your own universe and its plot?