r/raplyrics

Not a definitive list, just for fun!

Good work guys. I like a lot of these quite a bit.

1. Allow Me To Explain (1) — 9.2/10

Vulnerable, cohesive storytelling with sharp multis and real emotional stakes; strongest balance of lyricism and substance.

2. Random Freestyle — 8.8/10

   Aggressive, focused, quotable punchlines with clean cadence control and consistent conviction throughout nearly every section.

3. Allow Me To Explain (2) — 8.6/10

   Strong charisma and performance writing; simpler technically, but infectious momentum and memorable transitions elevate it.

4. 5AM Revelation — 8.1/10

   Honest introspection about envy, loyalty, and isolation. Direct writing lands emotionally despite occasional clunky phrasing.

5. Cohesion Feedback (Criticism Wanted) — 8.0/10

Most naturally conversational Hizzy piece. Internal conflict feels authentic, and the dialogue structure improves clarity significantly.

6. Act II by Hizzy — 7.8/10

   Chaotic structure, but genuine passion cuts through. Hook section is easily the most effective portion.

7. Cosmic/Singularity Verse — 7.1/10

   Extremely ambitious technically, though overloaded with abstract wording and repetitive constructions that dilute impact.

8. ACT IV by Hizzy — 7.0/10

   Creative imagery and personality shine intermittently, but coherence, phrasing, and reference overload muddy the strongest ideas.

9. ACT III by Hizzy — 6.8/10

   Energetic stream-of-consciousness style with flashes of creativity, but coherence and bar clarity frequently collapse.

10. Ode to Olde — 6.4/10

    Poetic atmosphere and melancholic tone work nicely, though it feels more like fragmented spoken-word than rap.

11. Drama at the Trauma — 5.9/10

    Meta AI concept is interesting, but structure, phrasing, and internal logic feel inconsistent and unfinished.

12. New Yeezy — 5.1/10

    Decent trap cadence and flex energy, but lacks originality, depth, and enough material to stand out.

Obviously not definitive - just for fun:

1)GHOST Protocol — 9.0

The most fully realised submission. It has a strong concept, emotional arc, performance direction, tension, restraint, and memorable lines. It reads more like a spoken-word rap opera than a standard verse, but it commits hard to its premise and earns the drama.

2)See the Glass — 7.7 The best compact lyrical piece. It has introspection, religious imagery, alienation, and a consistent mood. The writing is abstract but controlled, and the refrain “Retrospection defines how I’ll see the glass” gives it a strong anchor.

3)Cold to the Core — 7.1

A solid battle-rap style submission with a clear repeated motif and good internal rhyme control. The “Cold to the core like…” setup gives it structure, and lines like “Battle origami emcees n’ watch’em fold to the floor” work well. Some bars lean generic or crude, but the cadence is more confident than most entries here.

4)Act II by hizzy — 6.4

Raw and emotionally charged. The strongest thing here is the personal desperation: homelessness, shame, wanting rap to mean something, and feeling trapped by life. It needs editing for rhythm and clarity, but it has genuine emotional stakes.

5)Dog \it — 6.1

Has a proper song structure, a memorable hook, and a distinct personality. The councillor-candidate angle is unusual and gives it identity, while the recovery/mental-health lines add some depth. The downside is that the hook is clunky, the title phrase feels more distracting than punchy, and some rhymes sound forced to keep the scheme moving.

6)Drama at the Trauma — 5.8

More interesting as a meta-commentary than as a rap. The idea of exchanging bars with AI and feeling disillusioned by the result is compelling, and the fragmented style fits the frustration. As a finished piece, though, it lacks cohesion and a strong rhythmic throughline.

7)Singularity / Cosmic Rap piece — 4.9

Ambitious vocabulary and a consistent space/cosmos theme, but it gets buried under excessive rhyme stacking. There are flashes of cool phrasing — “red-shifted specter”, “heliopause of the syntactic laws” — but the piece often prioritizes sound over meaning, so the impact fades quickly.

8)Some Random Bars — 2.8

Chaotic shock-rap with a few bits of wild comic energy, especially the sudden Sonic ending. But most of it relies on crude sexual threats and random violence without enough wit, structure, or technical control to make the shock value land. It feels more like an unfiltered freestyle fragment than a completed submission.

My colour is versace that aint a cap i just cant afford that
Im homeless no walls to call my own when i wrote that
Without a shelter unkempt physical lookin like prior 90’s shawn kemp
Drama out the wazzo my frazo baddazzo yo assho fo dam sho shamed

Im ashamed my raps didnt go the mile i needed for my published
Punished my inner with the lecture no med lets get initiated
itinerary binary ordinary provide only extra expedient expeditions
My life my infinite vanity in tact no taciturn out league tarnished explicit graduated lessons.

((Cuz u see all I want is rap
Rap good so good all u wanna do is clap
Gangsta trap or conscious grasp take it how u wanna
What u see is what u get not a thing of matter more to me than honor
 
All I want in life is be free of all this crap
Trapped in purgatory hell pay for bills on time and this and that.
Imma pull the trigger tickle needed tremors from the distant inner
Meet my Jackal hide away no more halved away freed finally forever.))

I find reviews as interesting as the raps so I put todays submissions (plus 1 older one by request) into chat gpt and Gemeni just now.

ChatGPT

1. “happens to the best” — 8.9/10

Best overall writing here. The concept is clear from the jump: fame is temporary, audiences are fickle, the industry cannibalizes its stars. The bars actually connect and build on each other instead of just stacking random flexes.

2.“Dirty Diana” — 8.5/10 Easily the most cinematic piece. It tells an actual story with progression, temptation, conflict, consequences, and payoff. The hook is memorable and the Michael Jackson reference is used smartly instead of lazily.

3.“D.A.F” — 8.3/10 This is the best pure bar-heavy rap in the batch. The cadence is aggressive, confident, and mostly technically sharp. The “breathe” sequence especially reads like someone hearing the flow in their head while writing.

4.“Spider-Man” — 8.0/10

A surprisingly effective modernized Stan-style obsession track about parasocial Reddit attachment. The biggest strength is commitment to perspective — the narrator feels genuinely needy, manipulative, apologetic, and unstable all at once.

5.“Genesis” — 7.9/10 Feels like someone with genuine potential still polishing their pen. Ambitious, hungry, earnest. It swings for inspirational rap in the mold of early Cole / Logic / Joey-type introspection.

6.”crazy” — 7.2/10 Strong first section, entertaining descent into self-aware parody afterward. Uneven, but intentionally so. The satire works better when it’s subtle than when it outright announces itself.

7.“Sigh” — 6.8/10 Simple but emotionally sincere. This reads more like spoken-word poetry than rap, but the directness gives it weight.

8.”Hardcore Cardboard” — 5.9/10 Compact and energetic. Some decent imagery and battle-rap flavor, but not enough substance to rise higher. Feels like a sketch of a verse rather than a full idea.

9.“Manifest design no doin detours destructions” — 3.8/10 Still chaotic and mostly incoherent, though there are occasional flashes of personality. Reads like unfiltered improvisation with no editing pass.

10.“Free Palestine - youre all complicit” — 1.9/10

The political anger is clear, but as writing it falls apart almost immediately. There’s barely any structure, imagery, wordplay, rhythm development, or layered thought.

not meant to be definitive do not be disheartened in any way, if you disagree or agree I’d be interested to hear why!

All for fun

Instrumental: ⬆️

-

| Up On Me: |

< #FallingDown >

~

Artist;

Jaxx Moxx

_

{Intro}

-[Instrumental]

{Verse I}

• I find their discrimination stressful

• And their effing elimination vengeful

• Treating their intimidation careful

• Taking it into consideration headful

• That’s why I need an acquaintance

• Someone who will be my sedation

• Just so I can feel free in amazement

• Or alternatively seek a replacement

{Chorus I (X2)}

• Even time’s creeping up on me

• Every guy will get one up on me

• But baby, can you go up on me?

• Oh baby, will you go up on me?

{Verse II}

• And to the jokers who’ll call me out

• I am not hopeless nor falling down

• For my focus gone all these rounds

• Now that I chosen a horny spouse

• When you’ll spout your petty hatred

• I very much doubt you're educated

• And so, I could count on many cases

• Where my nouse has desecrated

{Chorus II (X4)}

• Even time’s creeping up on me

• Every guy will get one up on me

• But baby, can you go up on me?

• Oh baby, will you go up on me?

{Verse III}

• I’m questioning if I’m your future plans

• Or if you’re venturing for a super man

• I’m beckoning with my exuberant hand

• It’s what I’m gesturing as I sooner can

• Ignore the movements and people say

• They show astuteness in their evil ways

• They’ve been toothless since fetal stage

• I’m heart to your shooter and lethal aim

{Chorus III (X2)}

• Even time’s creeping up on me

• Every guy will get one up on me

• But baby, can you go up on me?

• Oh baby, will you go up on me?

{Outro}

-[Instrumental]

_

^

©️ Jack Stephen Moss

Working on a podcast about baldness. What are the best bars with BALD in them? My personal favorite:

I'm so appalled, Spalding ball
Balding, Donald Trump taking dollars from y'all

Cold to the core like the freezer section of the grocery store

Whores approachin’ me more I leave’em with their ovaries sore

I openly roar and scare ya like we ain’t spoken before

With me it’s a guarantee while they pray you hopefully score

Cold to the core like my heart was sold to a whore

Battle origami emcee’s n’ watch’em fold to the floor

They told me the lore but I forgot cause I was totally bored

Went to sleep quicker than readin’ r/raplyrics poetry board

Cold to the core like the winter road to the fjord

I chase chaos n’ only follow the code of the sword

Emcees I goad into war end up on my killed soldiers report

At the fair givin’ a scare cause I felt like they owed an award

Cold to the core like glaciers before they flowed to the shore

After you’re butchered in the booth I’ll show you the door

Controlled like the force of a tribe who are locally Norse

Miners tryna pick at my brain for the vein of gold to be sourced

I find reviews as interesting as the raps so I put todays submissions (plus 1 older one by request) into chat gpt and Gemeni just now.

Gemini

1. Crazy — 9/10 The Verdict: The sharpest piece in the batch. It kicks off with top-tier multi-syllabic rhyming, seamlessly morphs into a brilliant parody of a toxic, braggart Drake track, and lands perfectly with a hilarious, self-aware punchline about going to the prom alone.

2. happens to the best — 8.5/10 The Verdict: A beautifully written, highly coherent look at the fickle nature of fame. The internal rhyme schemes are incredibly tight, the emotional arc is clear, and it delivers some great classic hip-hop wordplay about getting washed and hung out to dry.

3. Dirty Diana — 8.5/10 The Verdict: Masterful cinematic storytelling. It modernizes a classic concept, building genuine tension from a casual post-show conversation to a dark, pill-induced twist that plays out like a gritty psychological short film.

4. Genesis — 8/10 The Verdict: A rock-solid, high-potential underdog anthem about the grind and chasing your dreams. It features great technical patterns and a gritty "rat race/rat soup" closing, though it's slightly tripped up by a couple of bizarrely literal punchlines.

5. D.A.F — 7.5/10 The Verdict: Aggressive, high-energy battle rap with impressive, fast-paced chopper mechanics. The internal rhymes are incredibly tight and the breathe markers create an excellent rhythm, though the "hawk tuah" line will likely date the verse quickly.

6. Spider-Man — 6.5/10 The Verdict: A fascinatingly dark, modern take on Eminem's "Stan" concept, focusing on an obsessive, unhealthy Reddit attachment. The narrative structure and hook are very clear, capturing a creepy, desperate mindset perfectly. However, the end-rhymes are quite basic, the rhythm is a bit clunky in spots, and throwing a Rick Astley line into a stalker anthem undercuts the dark tone.

7. Sigh — 6/10 The Verdict: Deeply vulnerable and emotionally authentic. While the honesty about mental health and relationships shines through, it is technically limited by an overwhelming hyper-fixation on a single vowel sound (the long "I") across almost every line.

8. Hardcore Cardboard — 5/10 The Verdict: Boasts a fun, literal punchline about thinking outside the box, but the execution relies too heavily on basic, monosyllabic end-rhymes. The "hardcore/cardboard" imagery also creates a bit of an accidental contradiction.

9. Free Palestine - youre all complicit — 3/10 The Verdict: Driven by raw political frustration, but structurally and lyrically weak. It relies on very basic, short end-rhymes and suffers from a glaring logical contradiction between demanding a holy book be burned and stating there is "no hate."

10. Manifest design no doin detours destructions — 2/10 The Verdict: A highly chaotic stream-of-consciousness that completely lacks a central theme, structural cohesion, or a steady rhythm. While there is a raw underground energy to it, the words collide without logical connection or narrative anchor.

not meant to be definitive - don’t be disheartened by any rankings it’s all for fun

That fuckin loves me!

For real!

She must've been watching my mom;

Starving me...

Harming me...

Scarring me...

And scooped me up under her wing;

And said, "let's feed you something"...

To have more than nine lives,

Is no easy thing,

To manifest love in life;

Fast cars,

Motorbikes,

Real Estate,

Not too overpriced,

Any toy a boy might like;

She's 'mhommhee wharbhux' to me...

She doesn't suspend me in greed;

She doesn't upend me for wants,

Or ever even my needs,

Socially,

Economically;

Sometimes I feel her reach into others;

Just to fuck with me sexually;

She knows I'm married,

And keeps it light and flirty,

She introduced my wife to me!

And still she gives me looks that lurks,

Looks that would strip a turkey...

It never hurts.

She blows a kiss;

I go 'pro-nerdy'...

She smells like the leaves on the ground,

She reminds me of Gramma;

And bad country grammar,

She gently sings in my ear...

As she caresses my fears...

"...All the leaves are brown..."

We Chip shop M's tell the butcher quick chop ems

im not new to this shit, might cop tools for this shit

might think im killing cops the way I pop blues in this bitch

im top 2 in this bitch, cant stop fool in this bitch

got dimes that make eyes shine, i stock jewels in this bitch

she hawk tuahs on this dick, sorry but I had to do it

the bastards knew it ever since that pastor flew in

I cracked his tooth in, im walking bossin like im in massachusetts

may lack the blueprint but fuck it its however the master choose it

nigga what? *breathe* the Jig's up *breathe* im sick as fuck

slit his guts *breathe* bleeding such *breathe* cleanest cuts

people buzz *breathe* season's done *breathe* beaming sun

heating up *breathe* demons hunt *breathe* you seeking hugs

with a swing of a hand see you lost in the web like spiderman

Karen bitch telling me "you cant put me in a box", well a sniper can

your shits trash, to cash in you'd need to hire stans

if everyone sees what im writing, everyone would die a fan

I sung and rapped at a bar-

In this imperfect lil town,

I’m walking back to my car -

After the curtains came down, 

I text my girl it’s so great - 

To be performing on stage, 

A woman shouts me a hey - 

And then starts walking my way, 

She says I loved what you spit - 

Did you just write it yourself?, 

Well actually yeah I did -

Writing real life is a help, 

She said you’re holding shit in - 

Guess on the mic you can breathe, 

I wonder after tonight….

What you gon’ write about me ? 

Dirty Diana, no

Dirty Diana, no

Dirty Diana, no

Dirty Diana - let me be! 

—————————————

Her gaze is staring so far,

But I’m withholding myself  -

Your music shows who you are, 

That’s why I know you so well -

Look at your hands on my hip,

That’s a sub conscious mistake-

She planted seeds of intrigue,

Until I wanted a taste-

Grazed my neck with her lips,

I almost had her right there-

She felt me tense up my grip,

I wanna take you somewhere -

She said that’s ok, 

Baby I know what you need-

You know my girl is at home, 

She says that don’t bother me- 

I don’t care what you say 

I wanna go too far 

I’ll be your everything 

And make you feel a star 

Dirty Diana, no

Dirty Diana, no

Dirty Diana, no

Dirty Diana - come on! 

—————————————————

So we arrive at her place-

I couldn’t hold it no more, 

Sunk in excitement and shame- 

As i go closing the door, 

Our bodies knew what to do-

So there was nothing to say,

She says just chew on these 2-

They’ll throw your worries away,

Blood quickly rushed to my head-

And as the nights getting blurred,

I laid stunned in the bed 

Pills paralysed my concern 

She said it’s ok, 

I’ll be the secret you burn 

You can do what you please 

I’ll be your freak you can hurt 

My baby called up my phone 

Diana picked up with glee

She said he’s not coming home

Because he’s sleeping with me! 

Dirty Diana, no

Dirty Diana, no

Dirty Diana, no

Dirty Di - Dirty Diana, no 

Dirty di - Dirty Diana, no oh oh 

this album is sparking controversy for dismantling the american administration and its misuse of religion, taking shots at trump and his christian nationalist agenda. it also serves as a narrative piece for the artist’s life, and proves itself as extremely nuanced and cohesive. take a listen if you like raw, elaborate, and purposeful lyricism