u/96Muffins

This book is really hard for me to read...

I'm reading this book by a well respected author with great reviews. I won't name it because I'm literally only a few pages in. To be honest, I want to give it a chance but the grammar is making it really hard for me to read.

I want to make it clear that I haven't read a book in about 15 years. I'm a screenwriter and I've been reading/studying scripts for the last few years. They're all I've been reading and if you don't know, a script is much different than a book. It's short and to the point which is not what I expect out of any book. It's a completely different formula. But the amount of 'run-on' sentences in the book I'm currently reading has me ready to take it back to the library. I'll give you an example:

'She has already seen an evolution, or devolution, of communication from Tommy over the course of the summer reflected in his sleepover texts: In mid-June it was I'm going to bed now, which a few weeks later became night mom, then became night, and then gn, and if Tommy could've texted an irritated grunt (his sub-verbal communication method of the moment, particularly whenever Elizabeth or his eleven-going-on-twelve-year-old sister, Kate, asked him to do something), he would've.'

Am I crazy? Or could that have been like 3 sentences? I feel like it might be a tedious complaint but it is seriously making it hard for me to read. This may even be more of a personal problem but it's like every other paragraph is just full of these. Another example:

'Instead of wading into the swelling sea of the blackest of what-ifs, she dares to think that maybe the call is a wrong number, or a prank, and Tommy just forgot to text her, and she'll yell at him tomorrow about his selfish forgetfulness'.

Is this normal? Because this style of writing is really taking me out of the story.

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u/96Muffins — 1 day ago
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PENNYWISE - Tim Curry vs. Bill Skarsgard

Which version did you find scarier? And why?

To me personally, Bill Skarsgard's version of Pennywise ain't got nothing on Tim Curry's.

I just can't see that cartoonish, overly exaggerated, and goofy Pennywise as being scarier than Tim Curry's version!

I still watch IT (2017) because it's a really good movie, it's filmed so well, and the cast is honestly amazing in their roles. But I was not feeling the new Pennywise.

It's something about the 1990s miniseries that is so incredibly haunting. The music, the film grain, and most importantly Tim Curry as Pennywise. The movie was also super low budget and I truly feel like that's what made it magical.

The Pennywise from the 1990s miniseries looks like a real clown you can actually run into. That weak jaw-line, drunken stare, and badly attached head piece. It feels so real!!! It still terrifies me to this day! I would never expect to run into an 8 ft tall clown with a 52 head. He's just so goofy to me.

I mean Tim Curry's laugh alone, omggg.

I can't take Bill Skarsgard's version of Pennywise seriously. The kids truly were the best part of the current movies but imo, IT (2017) just felt too theatrical.

Do y'all know what I mean?

u/96Muffins — 7 days ago

Wil - Screenplay - 107 pages

Name: Wil

Format: Screenplay

Page Count: 107 pgs

Genre: Psychological Thriller/Horror

Logline: To combat her feelings of loneliness, a young and fragile maintenance worker adopts a terrifyingly intelligent bird with an unnerving ability to mimic human speech. But as the paranoia surrounding her recent breakup continues to grow, her rivals begin to drop and she must decipher between her imagination and reality to evade the detectives on the case.

Link:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1NReFtmWt6Z1XmS4cbLE5nB24SAeWPaBd/view?usp=drivesdk

This was inspired by movies like Willard (2003) or Secret Window (2004). I think it's leaning more towards a psychological thriller but it definitely has some horror elements. Let me know what you guys think. How do you feel about Mallory (my protagonist)? Is she relatable? Or does she come across as unlikeable?

*DISCLAIMER* I've read through this draft 4 times lol and I always seem to find a typo. I think I've gotten them all but if you happen to find any, please let me know lol (I'd really appreciate it 🙏🏾).

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u/96Muffins — 9 days ago

The Final - 2010

I haven't seen this movie in a minute, leave it to Tubi to have it available lol. They got everything.

My tt loved these lower budget type of horror movies (apartment on the 13th floor, The midnight meat train, Pinocchio's Revenge, The collector). She would watch these all the time! But I have to say this movie had the potential to be really good. I'm kind of mad it wasn't executed better. Have y'all seen this? If so, what did y'all think?

u/96Muffins — 10 days ago

Anybody else remember this movie!

Just popped up on my YouTube, I haven't seen this in forever! He used to scare the f*** out of me when I was little lol. I'm about 10 minutes in and tbh I miss the slow burn, suspenseful movies from the 90s

u/96Muffins — 17 days ago

Title: Wil

Format: Feature

Pages: 106

Genre: Psychological Thriller/Horror

Logline: To combat her feelings of loneliness, a young and fragile maintenance worker adopts a terrifyingly intelligent bird with an unnerving ability to mimic human speech. But as the paranoia surrounding her recent breakup continues to grow, her rivals begin to drop and she must decipher between her imagination and reality to evade the detectives on the case.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1to-e-mjSRLOQQkaZ-WTHeUuI7V65x0IZ/view?usp=drivesdk

**DISCLAIMER**

This is a repost. I had to go in and fix the unnecessary CAPITALIZATION and my scene headers.

- Feedback I'm looking for most:

I would love to know how you guys feel about Mallory and if my character's motivations are clear.

What sticks out to you, good or bad?

Does the dialogue sound natural? Or is it too 'on the nose'?

Thanks in advance!

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u/96Muffins — 22 days ago

Title: Wil

Format: Feature

Pages: 106

Genee: Psychological Thriller/Horror

Logline: To combat her feelings of loneliness, a lonely and fragile maintenance worker adopts a terrifyingly intelligent bird with an unnerving ability to mimic human speech. But as the paranoia surrounding her recent breakup continues to grow, her rivals begin to drop and she must decipher between her imagination and reality to evade the detectives on the case.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1NN8TdMXszICdGZPwie6heMOFpyMM5hjk/view?usp=drivesdk

**DISCLAIMER**

I received some bad advice from my screenwriting professor lol I will fix the unnecessary CAPITALIZATION in my script. And based on some advice I've already received here on reddit, I will also be changing CONT to CONTINUOUS in my scene headers.

Thanks in advance for the feedback!

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u/96Muffins — 23 days ago

Hey everyone!

I just finished the 3rd draft of my screenplay and I would really appreciate any feedback. If anyone is also in need of feedback I'd be willing to return the favor! I just found this sub and I'm excited to search through it. I've attached the first 25 pages of my screenplay down below

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1LR\_qiEmBlyGEPn\_ikmWmXBloR1a4g-JU/view?usp=drivesdk

Logline:

To combat her feelings of loneliness, a young and fragile maintenance worker adopts a terrifyingly intelligent bird with an unnerving ability to mimic human speech. But as the paranoia surrounding her recent breakup continues to grow, her rivals begin to drop and she must decipher between her imagination and reality to evade the detectives on the case.

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u/96Muffins — 24 days ago