u/DTashiki12

This is something that I have been seeing across my writing that I dont understand. Everytime I come across the issue of too many action tags in a short paragraph, it becomes far too noticeable and stiff. But for some reason adding a POV characters thoughts fixes the issue and makes it barely noticeable??

Here is some examples I written for general purposes only.

1. Action Tag Only

Jake smiled at Sarah. He winked at her and proposed to her again. Sarah screamed at him in disgust.

2. Action Tag with Stream of Conciousness

Clark looked at the two idiots before him that was making a mess of their apartment once again, the arguements starting anew. He was so tired of this. He stood there, hearing the shouting get louder. There they go again, making a big deal out of something so simple… the dry thought left him. He let out a long, frustrated sigh—removing his glasses and making his fingers pinch the bridge of his nose.

Couldn’t Jake and Sarah have their love quarrel somewhere else? Preferably somewhere that wasn’t within earshot of him. Jake was a close childhood friend of his, and they grown pretty close because of both of their fathers introducing them to the other as kids. They hit it off pretty well back then due to finding some unexpected interests they both had, and that was why he was willing to even entertain all this in the first place.

Can anyone help me identify why number 2 removes so much stiffness? I dont teally get it. Thank you!

I just want to double check because I am trying to figure out how to use the Ring of Fate on L80 Sanae. I have everything maxxed except just one last skill I need to upgrade. However, I expected something like the RE stuff to appear once I get close to that. Am I right or wrong that it would be possible to use the ring on her like this or is it an L1 exclusive thing?

This is a problem I am having a rough time trying to figure out how to get rid of, especially without using pronouns or placeholders constantly like He/She/His/Her. I know its possible to potentially avoid using the repetitive word “voice” , but I dont really know how I can consistently do that.

I did figure out you can use the environment to show how the words come across to establish the mood as well as body movements—but aside from that I dont know what else to do. Only figured this out recently and I am trying to get helpful advice and references.

Thank you!

Hey guys! I have been trying to incorporate a good visual in my writing for a normal storage closet in a Japanese shrine, and I have ran into some problems trying to figure out how to describe a small tatami room. The main issue is that I cant seem to figure out if a shoji door could be considered a window? I just dont know how I could put it in and introduce the blue skies and sunny day that way, since I want to show an open shoji door into the outside world and those features. It doesnt seem right to use the basic window term from modern houses though.

Is my idea accurate to life? Some advice would be helpful! Thank you!

One thing I noticed when writing immersive stories is that if I include these things in, my brain could far better visualize the scene the characters are in. Without any of them along with other sensory details, it is as if my brain just shuts out the believability and realism aspect because I am forced to constantly question things.

When I don't question my own plot and I don't see any plot holes I easily get sucked into the stories world. However, this has caused me to come to a confusing situation. Why is it that you need to experience other character's emotions and feelings as your own to even achieve that immersion? If that character is so different then your own life experience how is it possible for author's to make reader's with completely different life experiences want to root for that character? Thank you!

Hey everyone! I am just starting to get into drawing again for my goal of one day being able to make anime characters. However, I ran into a little bit of a mess. I have recently bought the book Figure Drawing for all its worth, and I can't for the life of me figure out what the heck number 7 and 8 here means. They are located at the bottom right side of the page and I am lost.

Thanks everyone! Also, are there any tips you guys think could help me since I am just starting out learning about figure drawing? I am feeling somewhat lost with the whole process and I don't really feel as if watching youtube tutorials all the time is going to help. The main goal is to be able to make accurate life sized body figures eventually.

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Hey folks! I am a new trader who has been studying how the stock market works and became interested in it because of meme stocks. That was how I started, and recently, after losing a little money I can afford to lose due to how volatile and stagnant they can be at times, I am trying to figure out how to avoid the worst-case scenario again. For now, I am just doing paper trades to avoid worrying about real losses anymore and on the search for normal stocks.

This brings me to my question: With stocks like these, how can you figure out which ones are likely to continue dipping sharply after a big hit? On the other side, what about when a stock dips 8% or more but you cannot tell in the moment whether it could get worse? It's so hard in the moment because I can never tell even knowing the companies directory. I keep on thinking that somehow it would recover only to get screwed later. I know that volume can help as well as average price range, though I don't really know how exactly a low or high volume(including P/E) could indicate a rebound in that moment.

I am pretty curious because all of this fascinates me, and any advice or ways to figure this out faster would be super helpful! I have no idea what factors matter when evaluating a normal stock, and I have been reading more to prevent repeating past mistakes. I have been using stop losses alot more for sure for sure.

Thanks!

Hey guys! I have no idea what's going on, but recently Mistral AI is giving me lots of problems--particularly in the file uploads. Before, I could easily just upload files without problem and have the ai analyze what I wrote. I have some nsfw stories I am writing that I uploaded(doc is 430 kb) that it flagged as "Content may contain harmful or sensitive material", so I am unsure if that could be the cause? It's not like I asked too much inappropriate questions and I was more or less interested in the dynamics of my character's relationship. I did get a temporary error message that locked me out of it getting analyzed and after waiting a few hours it was working as usual before.

Either way, I didn't have any issues at all prior to this even with the nsfw stuff I asked it to analyze. It was all working fine until recently, and now I can't seem to do anything with file uploads at all except uploading documents to the library. It doesn't help too that I can't seem to manually access the library page containing all my documents. I have to use the tab I saved when I created the library to go there.

If anyone can help me understand what's going on and give advice to help me solve my issues that would be really helpful! Thank you!

This was something I been having a lot of trouble with. I been using dictionaries and been reading books to try and fix the issue, and no matter how much I try to think this over in a way that could allow me to experience the moment like I am living it myself nothing comes to mind.

Is there a way you guys get out of this slump? Its so weird that my eyes would instantly pay too much attention to all the pronouns I use at start the sentence.

Here are examples.

1. When I do something for the weather:

She felt sunlight shine down on her skin.

-Can’t really think of any alts to live the moment myself then “Sunlight glistened down on her skin.” Still feels too character filtery instead of a lived experience.

2. She knew it, but it didnt matter.

- I find myself using the word but and however a bit too much to contrast stuff, and when I read my own sentences I hate how repetitive this feels. Dont know what suitable words there are to fix this issue because when I get rid of them and try something else it would read as too stiff to my mind.