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How is the prologue for my modern gothic horror novel? Would you want to keep reading? Does it give you a clear idea of what time and setting the story is in?

A young girl sat at the foot of her bed, silent tears falling down her face, mirrored by the rain leaking in through the crack in the window. She found it fitting given the week she had, as though the sunless sky was offering sympathy when no one else cared to.

She was holding the worn book her mother gave her the same week she died. An heirloom she claimed her family brought over from Spain. The girl held it pressed to her chest, hoping to feel the comfort of family. A creeping hate filled her instead.

If only a kind hand were to hold her, a warm voice to tell her what she wanted to hear. Even if it was just a lie to make themselves feel better.

She tried to read the book, but it was in a language she didn't know. And yet she found words she had never heard nor spoken before, aflame in her mind. All she could do to keep them from burning her, was to scream them out.

"Mazmina otah l'Din Torah b'Shamayim!" Their volume choked by her pain into a whisper.

Yet the words took on a life of their own, and rang throughout the house. But when they tried to be heard, they were refused. And so they bounced from wall to wall until they left the ruined house. Moving along the rooftops and power lines, across streets and into the city, still unheard for none wanted to hear them. Save the shadow on the moon, and it moved in answer.

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u/DarkMoonSentinel2022 — 5 days ago

Whats wrong with dump stats?

I've heard from lots of places that dump stats are bad and need to be avoided, but I don't understand why.

The problem as I understand it is that players will not invest any points or XP into a stat because it's not useful to their build. But is that not the point of a build?

To use DND, a Fighter doesn't need charisma, and so it's a dump stat for them. But to a warlock it's the main stat of their class. Is that not what you want when making a game?

If there were no "dump stats" would not every class or character feel and play the same?

Again I understand if the stat is useless, like charisma in fallout new Vegas. there is no point making it high as it has no affect on game play. But that's not a dump stat problem but is a problem of not giving a stat something to do.

I think maybe I'm just not understanding the problem so if anyone has more thoughts I would love to learn.

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u/DarkMoonSentinel2022 — 5 days ago

Newbie asking for advice

I'm trying to pick my first army, and I like the Soulblight gravelords, but I'm not into all the vampire stuff. I just want all the bone boys they remind me of the old Lego fright knights, and I always love skeletons. So I just want to ask if it's possible to have an army that plays well and can win games with only bone boys?

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u/DarkMoonSentinel2022 — 1 month ago