[Complete] [14k] [Fantasy/Adventure/Mystery] The Tail-Eating Monster
Blurb: Rimenari, one of the 333 elenia, was hoping to find plenty of rare herbs on her way to collect a water sample for a university assignment, and perhaps one or two fay-beasts to hunt. The signs of fay-beasts were there — but a dead body with a missing tail was certainly not part of her plan. And something tells her that the beast was not the only culprit.
With the police dismissing the possibility of law magic being involved, Rimenari has no choice but to set off with her friends to tail Tetrisïa’s most eccentric student, who is interested more in ancient cannibalism customs than in meeting an elenia.
Sample: <https://s.evanescent.space/the-tail-eating-monster-ch1>
What I’m looking for: I’m mostly looking for big-picture feedback. Things like, was the story interesting, what you liked/what you didn’t like, what was confusing, boring, etc. I have left a short note at the beginning of the manuscript about this.
Timeline: It’s short, so ideally I would like to receive feedback within two weeks. If it’s not possible, I’m flexible, but please let me know beforehand.
Swaps: I’m open to swapping for similar length manuscripts, or the beginning of a full novel. The manuscript must be completed and edited; I’m not interested in alpha reading. As for my preference, I mostly read fantasy and light novels, but as long as your story isn’t set in the present-day real world, I may be interested. Please send me a blurb, word count and sample if you would like to swap.
Full manuscript available on request. I can send a link to Google Doc, epub or PDF by DM.