Things I've learned marking 200+ dissertations that I'm not allowed to put in the feedback box
Marking season. Brew's on. Here's what I actually want to write but professionally cannot.
"Your introduction is four pages of you clearing your throat." Just tell me what you are doing and why. If your first proper sentence is on page five something has gone badly wrong.
"You have 47 references and have actually engaged with three." A long bibliography is not a personality trait. What did you actually think of any of it.
"In today's society is not an opening. It is a cry for help." Delete it. Every time. Without mercy.
"Your methodology reads like you are trying to convince yourself." Pick a method. Defend it briefly. Move on. We are not in the courtroom.
"This conclusion is just your introduction wearing a different coat." A conclusion should make me think. Yours made me check how many pages were left.
"I can tell exactly which paragraph you wrote at 3am." We all can. The vibe shift is not subtle. Your supervisor noticed. Your examiner will too.
Anyway. Back to it. If you are writing one right now you are doing better than you think. Just stop apologising in every paragraph and say what you actually mean.