u/IXX303

A very, VERY simplified version of this story: Basically, in my story there was this great evil that was created due to a hundred year war. This evil was then 'defeated' by three heroes, with two of them sacrificing themselves and only one surviving, the main character's mentor. However, the evil wasn't really defeated but instead sealed, and only a few people know this. Later on, not only does the evil escape and become the final villain, but it's revealed that it had been working from the shadows to free itself.

So how do I make them 'haunt' the narrative, not only so that their eventual reveal doesn't feel forced or out of nowhere, but also so that they had an effect on the world and on people? Destruction and abandoned battlefields don't really work since there were already multiple wars before it. I tried to think something else up but came up with nothing

Hi!, I'm looking for a few bata readers. Would like opinions on on things like pacing, dialogue(particularly if they're to expo dumping), discription and general first impressions. I'm not looking to swap, sorry.

Blurb:

In a Victorian world where magic and spirits are a regular part of everyday life, Zeda Bloodhorn, a cat demi-human swordswoman, takes her first steps into a new chapter of her life along with her lively twin "sister" Gloria to attend the prestigious Royal University of Stanverd. But beneath everything, like a mountain of pressure, lie expectations tied to her powerful family, the political intrigue of the student council, and questions about her own motives for the goals she has been working toward. As Zeda's journey in Stanverd continues, she meets faces new and old and tries to make a legacy of her own by becoming the Champion Knight.

DM me if interested, might take some time to respond due to time zone issues. Thank you in advance ^^