[Complete] [64233] [Fantasy] The Legend of Kali Part 1 | Indian Mythology, Dark Fantasy, Mystery
[Complete] [64233] [Fantasy] The Legend of Kali Part 1
I'm looking for a few beta readers for my completed novel, The Legend of Kali – Part 1.
It's an Indian mythological fantasy with elements of dark fantasy, supernatural mystery, adventure, and science fiction.
Length: 64,233 words
Premise:
Abhimanyu Acharya, a teenager from Jodhpur, has grown up surrounded by strange rules and unexplained secrets. When he discovers a mysterious "AVATARA" marking connected to his father's handwriting, he begins uncovering a hidden reality tied to his family, ancient forces, the Kali Yuga, and something far more dangerous.
The story includes Jodhpur, Kuldhara, ancient guardians, hidden pathways, Indian mythology, supernatural forces, and a larger mystery that develops throughout the book.
I'm looking for honest reader feedback, particularly on:
- Plot and pacing
- Abhimanyu's character development
- Characters and relationships
- Worldbuilding and mythology
- Mystery and suspense
- Dialogue
- Emotional impact
- Confusing or slow sections
- Overall readability
- Whether the ending makes you want to read Part 2
You don't need to be a professional editor. I'm especially interested in genuine reactions from people who regularly read fantasy, mythology, supernatural fiction, or YA.
The manuscript is complete and available as a PDF.
If you're interested, please DM me. I'll send the manuscript and a short feedback questionnaire.
I'm looking for honest criticism, not just positive feedback. If something doesn't work, I'd genuinely like to know.
Fantasy, Indian Mythology, Mythological Fantasy, Dark Fantasy, YA Fantasy, Supernatural, Mystery, Adventure, Science Fantasy, Epic Fantasy, Kali Yuga, Ancient Mysteries, Urban Fantasy, Paranormal