u/Mariothane

Making this more as a means of developing his character.

Richard is a man who worked as a foster parent for the MC who eventually became a private investigator for multiverse situations around the country.

Richard’s intentions were to get some cash and maybe get his parents off his back about having kids. When Thane came to his door and the paranormal became normal, the situations changed and Richard’s focus became helping him learn how to be an investigator. Thane, meanwhile, showed him what he knew about the world and gave him an entirely new demographic for clients, who Thane later began to take.

He’s not exactly a bad person or a good person. Just someone who likes to say they solve problems. Thane was the first person who made him believe that people could be given a greater cause, but he himself doesn’t believe he’s got any part of it.

Richard is someone who Thane calls on a lot of occasions to get preliminary work done while Thane does most of the field work.

Wanted to get some opinions on who he is so far and if having him there is a good suggestion or if having Thane be a solo act who learned from an investigator is good enough.

A man who lives in service to the gods and acts as the means of fulfilling dreams and answering ones that nobody else would hear.

Whether it’s getting kids their favorite toys or saving a man on the front lines of a war to fulfill his wish of seeing his family again, he takes the missions he receives and lives a nomadic life to fulfill as many dreams as he can.

Since he works for the god of dreams, he’s become an illusionist, or “illustrator” since he doesn’t like to be seen as a cheap deceptive man, and since he occasionally does work for other beings, the missions can even be the kind of thing that can shape the fate of the world.

He knows he doesn’t have what it takes to fulfill every dream or wish and that some wishes shouldn’t be fulfilled, so he relies on his boss to see what he can do.

I want to make this a series of short stories, little 2-3 chapters of each story. Some reoccurring characters. He becomes this world’s equivalent of Santa Claus.

More just running with a concept that makes me smile.

The main protagonist is the gatekeeper of a city whose city was on the front lines of a war. When the evacuation orders came, he stuck around, because this city was his life, and he couldn’t bear with the thought of leaving. When the enemy forces took over and the city was turned into an enemy stronghold, he was mistaken for someone who was betraying the human race by supporting them, so he wasnt imprisoned for long.

The story mostly goes as he tries to maintain his work and get used to the new inhabitants of his city, most of which are hostile.

He’s the kind of person who tries to maintain a standard of excellence and will go out of his way to support his coworkers, so he did the same for this new city, eventually being accepted as one of them.

Over time, the hatred for the human race these invaders had arrived with begins to disappear under simple acts of kindness from the last gate keeper who stayed behind.

Gotta make some revisions to this guy because the race he comes from is unidentified. Want to get some opinions on what he’s got so far.

Zinc is a hard working person. The only things he loves are the things he creates and the people he makes them for.

Zinc has never seen peers that have quite the same qualities he has, so he isn’t sure what he is.

He looks like a golem made from bricks but the look in his eyes can only be seen in humans, who he adores and builds so much in hopes of finally meeting.

He can attribute everything he is to what he’s learned from watching humans, but he understands he isn’t a human. With all his time, he hopes to eventually become friends with humans someday and experience the little joys they have together, but with him included.

Dropped story but his origin was very different from what I made so far.

He grew up in Las Vegas with an alcoholic mom and a dad who he never met whose money his mom is living off of. With no good role models, he spent most of his time with an old man that lived in the complex who taught him gambling and how to manage risk and the unknown in life.

Thanks to that man’s conversations with him, he viewed life in constructive ways. School was an investment with knowledge being useful tools in his belt when he needs it. He began taking in knowledge from every source he could find and the old man took to making him more like a general than a gambler, making sure The Art of War was like his bible. Still, the kid spent most of his week playing games at the old man’s house in his free time and just talking.

Then, getting a bit cocky in his teenage years, he proclaimed on social media that he was the best gambler on earth and some alien took this at face value.

He got taken into space as a way to humiliate earth but managed to win and with some trickery, won the ship he was kidnapped with. The autopilot took him on a course to some planet far away and burned out the engines. Now he has to try and find his way back with cunning and whatever he understood from 16 years of life.

Premise isn’t too difficult to understand. Nobility member is nearing death and didn’t have the best relationship with his employees so while he was still alive and didn’t have anybody who could send messages, they began to loot his estate.

Guy comes around and stops it by calling the guards and becomes a nobleman’s last trusted ally. He comes and visits and helps him sort his affairs except for his will which was kept secret.

Then the nobleman left the guy his position and his estate, disinherited his previous kids who didn’t bother to visit or care and adopted the guy who was helping him in his final days as his new son and heir.

Direction I went with it involved a person who could hear fate’s voice and wasn’t usually left with a place to call his home, so he assumed he was just there to help the nobleman so he wasn’t alone during his final days. Now he has to learn how to be a part of high society when his life so far hasn’t left him with much experience.

Where would you take it?

Wanting some opinions on this.

Sweden has a myth about a train called Silverpilen that only transports the dead and you to the afterlife if you’re unfortunate enough to get on the train. The train operator is going to be a figure kind of like a Charon whose duty is to ensure the dead make it to the afterlife.

In the story I’m brainstorming a section where a round trip ticket is used to travel on this train to the afterlife and back so I wanted to build up some ideas.

Basically, he’s lived for a thousand years on a desolate earth without any life, unable to age or die from natural causes as a punishment given by his own soul and as part of the deal he made with the being that destroyed his and countless other worlds by summoning him.

He came to this world because of the bloodline of a certain man who his old master was afraid of, and to take advantage of the criminal underworld with overwhelming power, he essentially goes through a super villain starter kit.

- Robs some facilities designed for human experimentation and recruits all of the experiments as henchmen.
- Raids and devours (figuratively and literally) a couple of organized crime rings for assets and money.
- Leverages his new power and connections to find any leads he can.

I’m working on the personality of someone who was driven insane by his guilt and came around full circle to sanity as he takes advantage of people from horrible walks of life for an overarching good cause.

When he does horrible things, he makes sure he does it to horrible people and makes sure that nobody else gets affected. The subordinates he has, while he did recruit them by taking advantage of their weakness at a vulnerable time in their lives, are treated as well as he can and it may be a part of his attempt at making amends for who he used to be.

“I fully recognize I may not ever see heaven on the other side, but that doesn’t mean I have no responsibility for the time I have left.”

Wanted to get some tips and feedback on this character.

Ex criminal is starting his new life with honest work and ends up finding a stone box at a garage sale. Assuming it’s a candle holder, he buys it and accidentally releases the ghost of a wizard.

Wizard teaches him magic to help him solve the case of his death and stop his past apprentices who plan to use his artifacts to summon the beast he made the artifacts from.

Still very much in the works. A thief who works for the ghost of a wizard to do his bidding while working his day job is the concept. Want some helps to find improvements.

The main antagonist has already received his prophecy of his undeniable victory. All the events that take place are all according to the future he sees, and all his generals understand the path to victory is clear and how to take it.

That’s all supposed to be true. The prophecy has been made. The future cannot be changed. That’s the assumption everything has been built under…unless something that isn’t in his sight comes to move.

A family, with only a handful of surviving members exist outside the bounds of evil’s vision. A knife hidden from evil to act as the sole exception to the earth.

A foreign element that the prophecy hasn’t accounted for. Futures begin to deviate when he arrives.

How much of an impact can one single person make to the fate of the world? Is he able to make enough of a difference to save the world or is the world already beyond saving at this point?

This is the prompt I’m working from. The person who this story follows is the last surviving member of this family who wasn’t a part of this world, and was left aside as some kind of blot on history. Nobody knew them, where they came from or where they went to. No awards or names for recognition. Just “the one that understands the world the greatest exists.”

Abilities aren’t necessarily the issue for this character. She’s a person who wants to put up a pretty front and be noticed by guys from the organization that the story takes place with but the way she was taught to use her powers is extremely violent use of water magic.

Her specialization is compression and surface tension. When she wants to do damage she makes bubbles of water, super compresses them so they’d be instantly boiled and volatile, and fires them off at opponents so they second the surface of the bubble gets popped, they explode. She can turn these bubbles into gloves or fire them off from her finger tips like a gun by focusing the explosion of two bubbles, one that acts as the ignition that shoots the bubble and the other that detonates on impact.

What I need help with is writing a character who tries to be majestic and dainty but fails horribly at it while using an ordinarily majestic magic attribute.

“I signed up to be an Aquamancer because I heard Wizard guys would think it’s cute. Turns out my teacher was a former MMA coach who picked up Magic. I want to look pretty damn it!!!”

I thought of doing stuff like her trying to learn to walk in high heels for the first time and wearing things like a long skit but ditching the act a lot when fights get tough.

What I want to try and make is a character who embodies that gap. Eventually she meets a guy who comes from a warrior race and falls in love with her instantly the moment she drops the act.

I’d like to get some tips if I can.

As of this time in the story, he’s been given a lifetime’s worth of skills and magic practice that puts him on the same ground as legends.

That being said, Barry is almost entirely among the noncombatants.

Barry was trained and raised by what used to be a fogbank off the coast of Ireland who eventually became his dad as he began to understand humans.

Barry learned to utilize the powers of magic and the powers beyond magic to be of service to the world and let it guide his path, which has led him to a number of strange situations, most of which he doesn’t bring up.

His place of work more or less defines his interests. When he worked as a restaurant worker bussing tables, he’d enchant the tablecloths to fly around like jellyfish to put themselves out properly. When he worked as a postal worker, he’d give wings to his packages that would fly themselves to their destination and slap package thieves.

Most jobs he had he surpassed expectations and became a nuisance until his work as a custodian where he gets to run wild with his magic as long as he gets the job done.

Making this as a concept for a kids show. The earth needed its own people but the human race abandons earth when some force comes to destroy it. The earth, to make sure it has new people, gives the spark of life to machines giving them independent thoughts without any input.

These machines become more human like but still have qualities of the old machines they used to come from. A refrigerator man still has the refrigerator but grew arms and legs. Farming equipment may have changed and grown bigger blades but bodies that resemble farmers.

New cultures grown from the remains of the human civilizations and the same threats that endangered the planet seek to rule it.

The Amazing Screw On Head is a pilot episode for a show that wasn’t ever made, but its villain is interesting because he doesn’t even want to rule the world, he just wants world domination.

He’s perfectly fine serving a superior boss, but he refuses to follow those without ambition. It’s interesting because it also ties into other parts of his character and for that reason I want to make a character whose purpose in life is to be the ultimate servant to whatever master he serves.

How would you approach that idea? Or what suggestions would you make to approach this?

Trying to devise how to use the niece of a madman. Her parents told her to take care of him occasionally but keep her phone on her and 911 on speed dial.

He died in what most decided was a car accident but in his will, he left a bunch of his research notes.

The delusions he was having actually took place and as she starts turning his insane ramblings into some kind of web novel, some people with supernatural experiences and powers began to resonate with the ideas and believe she was the one experiencing them.

I was thinking that she’d start a conspiracy theory group online where people try to find out what really happened and so on, but I was more hoping to get some opinions on this and directions I can take it.

This might be more of a side cast of characters but it’s really in the works and undecided at this point.

The world is having conflicts spring up because reality is caving in on itself. The situation is in its beginning stages where openings are brief but not uncommon, so people become affected by these openings and gain abilities or pass through into our world without any context.

This character’s ability is summoning chains from his hands or the walls and ground near his body.

The character I am making is someone who wants to be the main protagonist but fails in too many ways he sees as essential. He’s not good with people, struggles to have properly good intentions and comes off as a bit short. When he meets up with the main protagonist, he’s blown away by finding someone who feels genuine love for the people he meets and struggles with feelings of inadequacy for a while.

The main protagonist wants to help him recognize his own worth and discover the way he can be a hero, even if it isn’t his perfect vision of what one looks like. The message boils down to the idea that Iron can’t ever be gold, but it’s got the potential to be steel, and that’s pretty amazing in its own ways. Stop comparing to things that you’re not and find the best ways to use what you are.

Trying to map out his growth and see if this development is good for one of the characters who is part of the story the longest.

Alchemists turn elements into a purified form where the symbolic properties can be drawn out from it. Most of the time, it’s just one element they focus on and refine, and that becomes their focus.

With this practice, they can enhance existing properties like durability or weight. Masters can use elements to their fullest, turning gold into a burning element that almost never goes out.

Alchemists can have active control of the properties they bring out but most of the time they remain scholars instead of fighting. That’s why Alchemy Weapons take center stage in most cases.

They have the same enhanced properties the Alchemist made them with but those properties are steady and processed to be stable for long-time use.

Different groups use different elements in different ways. Even if it’s all the same world with the same elements, the possibilities, because of human nature, are endless.

This is still in the works and I could use some opinions for it.