u/MuseOfSunrise

Hi! Would love some feedback on the prologue and first chapter of my first novel, Muse of Sunrise. This is a complete urban fantasy/superhero novel exploring themes of vengeance, power, and the lengths people will go to atone for their own sins.

Blurb for the novel as a whole:

"Yuri Song is a bright, young, Korean-American... thief. And now she's fled to Sunrise, a city of advanced technology and larger-than-life heroes, where she wants nothing more than a clean slate. But when her brother is killed in an attack by the supervillain Brimstone, that dream dies with him.

Desperate for revenge, she seeks power under the tutelage of Muse, a Sentinel left broken and disabled by the same attack.

As she hunts for Brimstone, Yuri uncovers corruption festering beneath the city's shining image, from the opulent manors of the Sunrise elite to the underground Deeps where shame and secrets hide. Along the way, she must confront her own demons and decide once and for all who she’s really trying to save."

Hi all! This is the third draft of my first novel, and first time posting here.

Muse of Sunrise is a complete sci-fi/superhero novel exploring themes of vengeance, power, and the lengths people will go to atone for their own sins.

>Yuri Song is a bright, young, Korean-American... thief. And now she's fled to Sunrise, a city of advanced technology and larger-than-life heroes, where she wants nothing more than a clean slate. But when her brother is killed in an attack by the supervillain Brimstone, that dream dies with him.
Desperate for revenge, she seeks power under the tutelage of Muse, a Sentinel left broken and disabled by the same attack.
As she hunts for Brimstone, Yuri uncovers corruption festering beneath the city's shining image, from the opulent manors of the Sunrise elite to the underground Deeps where shame and secrets hide. Along the way, she must confront her own demons and decide once and for all who she’s really trying to save.

Would love critiques on pacing, character development, and overall entertainment factor! Ideally a 4-week window (to end of June 2026).

Will send a sample (Prologue and Chapter 1, 3218 words) to confirm interest before full manuscript.

Prologue and Ch. 1 of "Muse of Sunrise" [Urban Fantasy, 3218 words]

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