u/Original-Property-58

The state I am is a drama free NAP organized state. We have all spots taken for June but thought I’d put out feelers for next month, or if any singular player wanted to transfer in this month.

We’re very competitive and tend to win our SVS’s and the prep days. Our alliance is perfect if you or your group is looking for people that understand you have a life outside of the game. We’re typically a VERY chatty alliance, so you will never be bored. The whole state tends to be pretty active too.

Feel free to reach out with any questions or inquiries! I’d be happy to answer

Hey! I am in need of some beta readers to look over my story and tell me their thoughts. This is the first “Act” of my story so it’s all of the stakes and dynamics being set.

I am open to swap 100%. If you are wanting to swap I ask that your story is on the romantic side, and can be well over my current word count—beta reading is one of my favorite things to do!

*It is split 3rd person POV!*

**Here is my little blurb:**

Kaia always thought she was just a scholarship girl, fighting to survive the elite halls of Olewood University. That is, until an impossible dream awakens an ancient power within her-and a city under siege brands her a vigilante.

Now, she's bound to a mysterious, masked partner whose cold brilliance infuriates and draws her in. But in the light of day, he is Evren Calem, the untouchable boy who acts like she doesn't exist. When a charming scholar named Doryan appears, he offers her the one thing she craves: answers about her past and a key to unlocking her true potential.

To prevent an ancient prophecy from dooming the world to fire, Kaia must find the four legendary Pillars-guardians hidden across reality-and unite a team of true friends. But as a dark inheritance stirs within her, Kaia finds herself torn between the boy born to protect her and the one sent to claim her, in a war where winning her heart might mean losing her soul.

**I am looking for most of the basics in the critic like:**
What part did you want to stop reading?
What part had you hooked?
Do the characters feel consistent?
Do they feel like natural human beings?
Tell me what you hated and what you loved–and all the in between.
Also big on pacing… leaning to my story being a tad too quick.

Feel free to comment or DM if interested. Thanks!