Personal Statement conundrum: should I sacrifice my true voice/writing style for clarity?
I worked with a medical student on an admissions committee to refine my personal statement, ultimately arriving at a draft I was satisfied with. My writing style is naturally literary and narrative-driven, often relying on storytelling and analogies, but he helped me temper this approach to achieve a stronger balance between creativity and clarity of experience.
Separately, a family acquaintance who serves on an admissions committee, reviewing and evaluating applications before they reach the final board, also read my draft. She felt the storytelling and creativity were strong, fitting for a literary context, but advised that the essay ultimately needed to be more direct and straightforward (and less creative). This, I feel, would sacrifice the way I would naturally convey my writing and voice. Will it be more clear? Possibly. Will it flow as good as it does now? Probably not.
Where might I find the final word or judgement call to help me determine exactly how to frame my PS since I’m currently caught between two conflicting perspectives?