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If you don't speak Italian you won't get much out of the dialogue, I'm sorry, but to deacribe the scene :

We meet this group of stoners mid conversation, our protagonist (the one with the mohawk) is depressed and only half listening but perks up when the guy with the glasses makes some weird comments over a case of infidelity.

The protagonist argues with him for a bit but to no success and then ends up saying something that was better left unsaid.

The incident marks the breaking of this friendship and leaves the protagonist alone with no support network.

It is kinda better if you don't understand, though. I am curious to know how do the panels flow, if the scene and emotions are decently readable even without text and if you got some sort of reaction out of it.

u/Own_Watercress_8104 — 3 days ago

Pareri su come proseguire

Prima pagina per un webcomic.

Ci tengo che venga bene, ma tra lavoro e altro non vorrei nemmeno passarci più tempo del necessario.

Voglio pareri sulla colorazione (o per meglio dire, la scala di grigi) a sketch. Rende l'idea o toglie dall'impatto, sembra troppo affrettata o la trovate adeguata?

L'intero lavoro sarà a scala di grigi, comunque.

Se pensate che mi stia prendendo di pigrizia dite pure, non mi offendo.

u/Own_Watercress_8104 — 20 days ago

Trans lingo

I've noticed a lot of lingo I am not accostumed to popping up in my spaces, recently.

Things like femoid, passoid and similar sounding things. I've been in trans subs for a while now but these terms are new to me.

My bf is trans and I've never heard him saying this.

I find it perplexing because the "oid" suffix sounds a bit derogatory and I'm familiar with it from my time in 4chan, it sounds very irony-pilled.

Now I know for a fact that many trans people do hail from /trans/, where there's a lot of self-loathing and irony so my guess is that this lingo comes from that too?

Might be mistaken, so I ask. Can you give me a rundown of the terms and what they mean, along with an explaination of where do they come from?

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u/Own_Watercress_8104 — 2 months ago
▲ 15 r/YMS

I've seen "When Evil Lurks"(2023) and I would like people to explain it to me (SPOILERS)

Frankly I don't know what kind of emotion was I supposed to feel. I didn't like it at all but people online are hailing it as a horror achievement.

I was very much into the first act. It was a The Thing setup. Normal ass people find themselves in a supernatural problem and try to act on it all the while we as an audience gather little informations about what is happening in the setting.

I was intrigued, the characters are kind of incompetent but it made sense. They are freaking out and are not the smartest people. The rural setting lends itself well to the setup and we are left to wonder what might be happening to the rest of the world.

But then they go to the protagonist's ex house and the movie never recovers for me. Dialogue devolves into screaming matches that last way too long without giving intersting information about the characters, they all have to repeat the same stuff three times.

"Open the door"

"What are you doing here?"

"I can't explain, open the door"

"You can't be here"

"Open the goddamn door!"

"Get out of here!"

For every single thing until the end of the movie. The gore scenes were cute, but really, in the context of the scenes, they never shocked me, they just made me smile and laugh.

Sure, the dog scene has balls, but why should I care about the child that up until now had nothing to do with the plot? Same with the ex wife, she just freaks out that her ex is at the door but doesn't offer any meaningful interaction or character, even if the family is just a prop for the protagonist's emotion, I have little to care about as their personal history is like a side-thought.

Then we get some kind of explaination and honestly, I would have preferred for the movie to keep its mouth shut. We operate on Gremlins rules, but they are contraddictory, way too many, nonsensical and contraddict each other. They are explained during the car ride and that was not a good scene. The grandma is listing them like she's reading a power point, the scene lacks in atmosphere as the lighting is not particularly dark or moody and the camera work is a bit shacky to communicate panic, but otherwise pedestrian, and again, everyone talks over each other.

The teacher's explaination of the backstory was a jump the shark moment for me. She tells about how the possessed came to be, how God died and so the churches (?) and after that came a secret order of monks called the Cobra. That sound incredibly silly, it felt like wikidiving for a franchise you know nothing about. I was picturing in my mind the GI Joe villains. And again, the scene itself was a car scene, incredibly pedestrian in direction.

Then we got the scene where the mom is eating the son's brains like popcorn out of a bucket, and it was a fun effect, but again, what emotion was I supposed to feel? I don't care for her or the son, they had little to no character and the film still refuses to elaborate on their relationship with the protagonist.

The school scene was moody and I appreciate that, but these kids never do something actually scary, they kill the teacher off camera while she screams at the protagonist over and over again not to do the thing that will get them killed. He seems infuriatingly dumb in that scene.

I don't know. I heard Adum describing it as "nightmare logic" but it felt too grounded for that. To me it just felt inconsistent and clumsy.

Everybody seems to love it and I feel like an alien, please, genuinelly, I ask for people who liked it to explain to me their relationship with this movie, I'm not looking to dunk on anyone.

EDIT : Oh yeah, I forgot about the autism plot point. That just registered as bad writing for me, I thought we left that kind of tripe in the 90's. It felt tropey, silly and kinda in bad taste. They go as far as explaining that the devil gets confused navigating the austistic brain. Really?

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u/Own_Watercress_8104 — 3 months ago