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This is my second preview for the first chapter of my horror drama/action comic REFORMED!

I need a bit of help, with the writing. I fear some things may be confusing so I'm opening up the discussion. But first a little background as to what happens in the story leading up to these pages.

Opus (the guy character) wakes up with black ink streamed from his eyes, in a train wreck. He sees he is fatally wounded. From a distance we see him yank out the thing that is pierced through his stomach and collapse. He dies but is brought back to life with electricity exuding from his body. He notices the pipe is on the ground and his wound is completely healed. It, his attention is turned to the mysterious shirt he wears with black symbols on it.

BAM. Caught up. I need you to read pages first before we move on to the questions.

1. "That night" is an important topic that gets brought up by Magnum (the girl character). Is it clear what that is referring to given the context of what is shown? "That night" will be a reoccurring subject that gets explored deeper, I'm intending it to be a mystery as to what happened "that night" but again I'm afraid that it may not be clear as to what "that night" even is. Did you understand it?

2. Did anyone notice the look on Opus' face when she put her robotic hand on her shoulder, and the look of worry/recognition in her eyes as to what he might be sad about, like she knows him too well? I'm intending for a lot of this to be subtext and for the key information to be gathered through context clues, so please, tell me; does any of this even work?

Idk, maybe I'm so stuck in my head but it's hard to view another's perspective of the missing puzzle pieces when you already have the full picture of the puzzle in your head.

If anyone could give advice that would be great!

I did this traditionally with a brush pen. I feel like my first two pages - specifically the poses - aren’t as good as the third page. And I don’t know if it’s clear enough what’s happening.

And sorry for my bad handwriting.

Hello everyone!

I want to thank you all for the feedback on my last post. It’s been 5 days since I launched the pre-launch page, and honestly, I’m still not sure if it’s going well or badly.

Right now the page has 8 followers, so I’m only 2 away from the follower count becoming public on Kickstarter.

I’ve been spending $20 a day on Meta ads, and I have to say, I expected better results. The conversion rate has been pretty poor, so I’m pausing the ads for now.

I’ve also been creating content for YouTube, published the comic on GlobalComix, and have been trying different ways to get the project in front of more people.

At this point, I’m not really sure what to expect from the next few days since I’m going to focus more on organic content.

For those of you who have launched Kickstarter projects before, what were your first few days or weeks of pre-launch like?

Here are some more pages from the comic, and I’ll also leave the Kickstarter link if you want to check it out.

https://www.kickstarter.com/projects/893790236/last-world-volume-1

Artist: Krisis Comic

Thank you all!

I do like the style its in vs the super clean comics but it also looks like a 3 year old did it in my eyes sometimes 😭 i like making short strips exploring my feelings. Some are ment to be funny some more so uplifting

The story is called The Race, about a boy whose desire to understand the world shakes up his father and brother's triathlon mission. It might be 300 of these square pages in total. I'm more focused on the story now. If the story seems promising, then I might invest in the three years it will likely take to produce the first chapter at a level of illustration... that people might want to read.

I am creating a comic book horror anthology featuring various characters who are causing mayhem for humanity. As a Gen X kid who grew up obsessed with breakfast cereal, I created a mascot imp who gains sentience and likes the idea of using kids who love his sugary cereal to go on killing sprees. The more brutal the kill, the more cereal they receive. I am the writer and creator. The first image is my artwork. The second and third images are from artist friends of mine.

I would like to know what you think of the different styles and the overall concept. It's all part of an upcoming Kickstarter campaign: https://www.kickstarter.com/projects/collectiblecardboard/mephistopheles-flakes