Critique on a hybrid prose/visual format.
Hi! I didn’t know where to post this exactly, since it isn’t necessarily a full comic or visual book, nor is it fully prose. Edit: Just found out it’s more of an Illustrated Novel.
Title: Divinity’s Dread
Genre: Speculative Fantasy
If it works or doesn’t work please let me know. I’m looking to continue creating but don’t want waste my time on a format that doesn’t work when I finally let other see it, so this is a Work-in-Progress Chapter 0.
This format I’m testing works best in theory for physical books rather than digital.
It uses page turns as illustrative reveals. While the prose takes on the mundane less visual work. This chapter is a first person focused chapter which is a special kind that won’t be used very much. But gets across the extent of the format I’m using. The typography is used to match the environment aesthetic, moment, or emotion. Same as the background for the prose.
A more realistic page by page example read would be slide 19. With illustrations as reveals. The hand used on slide 15, is used for anticipation for the next page action.
That’s a little summary of the format for now.
Some questions:
Does the visual storytelling work?
Are there any pacing issues or successes? If so where are they?
Do the 'page turn (scroll)' reveals work ?
Are there any point where you felt confused?
If you have any other critique or comments on it please let me know.
Note: I am considering editing the BOOM page, by adding a little illustration of the character we’re looking through