Convince Me - Acoustic Original

How is this? It was one of my first songs I wrote at 16, a couple friends said it was decent enough to share. Feedback? Necessary changes? I wrote this after a relationship with someone who presented a certain way in public but acted very differently in a private relationship with me.

lyrics:

Revolutions

Revelations

You become a poet when it gets dark

My head’s in your lap

I can’t talk back

Blood in the water

You’re a shark

Convince me you love me

Make me believe it

Convince me you mean it in all that you do

Convince me you want me

Make me believe it

Convince me I should want you too

Gentle bodies

Gentle movements

Your skin is like a work of art

You keep a thesaurus

Under your nightstand

I know you do it to make you look smart

Convince me you love me

Make me believe it

Convince me you mean it in all that you do

Convince me you want me

I’ll keep it a secret

Convince me I should want you too

Revelations

Change the station

You never were good at telling the truth

But I can’t blame you

Nor can I change you

I secretly hate you and all that you do

Convince me you love me

Make me believe it

Convince me you mean it in all that you do

Convince me you want me

I’ll keep it our secret

Convince me I will want you too

Convince me

Convince me

Convince me you love me

Convince me

Convince me

Convince me I will want you too

u/RaiseOfSun — 21 hours ago