u/Relevant_Yam_3347

Hey everyone! I wrote this about a year ago but was too afraid to share until now. It combines three real-life college heartbreaks from people I know into a single story: loving someone from afar, being used by them, and finally waking up to the reality that they are toxic.

I’d love to get your thoughts! Please drop a comment if this resonates with you, or if you have any feedback on how to improve it.

Specifically:

1. Since it blends three different situations (unrequited love, being used, and realizing they are toxic), does it feel like a cohesive journey?
2. Does flipping the "Daytime Star" metaphor at the end work well to show the emotional growth of finally moving on?

[Verse 1]

All this time, I thought you were really the one,

All those days, I believed that I have won,

By finding someone like you to love and pursue,

Though it slowly came to view, you were always blue,

Now I realize I was blinded to the truth,

By your garish light.

[Pre-Chorus]

It was all fun and game [for you],

Just a doll to frame and play,

Now I am the one to blame,

Trusting you to maybe [just maybe..], feel the same.

[Chorus]

I wish I could be your daytime star,

Someone that can heal your scars,

Maybe be your superstar, in a world so dark.

But now you have broke my heart [to pieces..],

I knew I was never your art,

We were meant to fall apart,

Maybe this is where my story starts [ we can't be us].

[Verse 2]

Autumn days go by, feelings that I cant deny,

Weren't you my guy? now all I do is cry [for you..],

Those little butterflies I felt,

Hoping that our souls could melt [in love],

Suddenly I realize, when all those moments rewind [ were there any??],

My one .. and .. only question is .. why?

[Pre-Chorus 2]

Was I all fun and game? [for you],

Just a doll to frame and play,

Was I meant to stay away?

We can never be the same..

[Chorus 2]

I wished I could be your daytime star,

Someone that could have healed your scars,

Maybe be your superstar, in a world so dark.

But now you have broke my heart [to pieces..],

I was never meant to be your art,

We had to fall apart,

This is where my story starts.

[Bridge]

We never shared a word,

But I always felt so heard,

When we were together[ were we?],

You too wanted to be seen [she would agree],

I just wanted to be free,

Cause now I know the reality,

Now that I realise,

I was fading through the dimming light..[ just like my love for you].

[Pre-Chorus 3]

Afterall I was all fun and game [for you],

A doll you could frame and play,

I should have stayed away,

We were never the same..

[Chorus 3]

I wished I could be your daytime star,

Someone that can still heal your scars,[and just..]

Maybe be your superstar, in a world so dark.

But now you have broke my heart [to pieces..],

I was never meant to be your art,

We have fallen apart,

I guess this is where my story starts.

[Verse 3 / Breakdown]

Now, as I go through all these emotions,

My heart cant seem to focus[it is after all hopeless],

Just one question remains,

Is there a end to this phase?

Now that I realize,

I shouldn't have had faith,

Or did I miscalculate?

[Pre-Chorus 4]

Was it all fun and game?

Just a doll to frame and play?

You never even cared,

All I am left is with tears.

[Chorus - Variation]

I wish, I was never your daytime star,

Now I'm left to heal from afar,

I cant be your superstar,

When you treat me like I'm too far.

[Outro]

But now that my heart is broken,

I'm left with words that were never spoken,

After all, we were never together,

Just like a fleeting dream in a stormy weather.

[I have finally realized you were never my story]...

Hey everyone! I wrote this about a year ago but was too afraid to share until now. It combines three real-life college heartbreaks from people I know into a single story: loving someone from afar, being used by them, and finally waking up to the reality that they are toxic.

I’d love to get your thoughts! Please drop a comment if this resonates with you, or if you have any feedback on how to improve it.

Specifically:

1. Since it blends three different situations (unrequited love, being used, and realizing they are toxic), does it feel like a cohesive journey?
2. Does flipping the "Daytime Star" metaphor at the end work well to show the emotional growth of finally moving on?

[Verse 1]

All this time, I thought you were really the one,

All those days, I believed that I have won,

By finding someone like you to love and pursue,

Though it slowly came to view, you were always blue,

Now I realize I was blinded to the truth,

By your garish light.

[Pre-Chorus]

It was all fun and game [for you],

Just a doll to frame and play,

Now I am the one to blame,

Trusting you to maybe [just maybe..], feel the same.

[Chorus]

I wish I could be your daytime star,

Someone that can heal your scars,

Maybe be your superstar, in a world so dark.

But now you have broke my heart [to pieces..],

I knew I was never your art,

We were meant to fall apart,

Maybe this is where my story starts [ we can't be us].

[Verse 2]

Autumn days go by, feelings that I cant deny,

Weren't you my guy? now all I do is cry [for you..],

Those little butterflies I felt,

Hoping that our souls could melt [in love],

Suddenly I realize, when all those moments rewind [ were there any??],

My one .. and .. only question is .. why?

[Pre-Chorus 2]

Was I all fun and game? [for you],

Just a doll to frame and play,

Was I meant to stay away?

We can never be the same..

[Chorus 2]

I wished I could be your daytime star,

Someone that could have healed your scars,

Maybe be your superstar, in a world so dark.

But now you have broke my heart [to pieces..],

I was never meant to be your art,

We had to fall apart,

This is where my story starts.

[Bridge]

We never shared a word,

But I always felt so heard,

When we were together[ were we?],

You too wanted to be seen [she would agree],

I just wanted to be free,

Cause now I know the reality,

Now that I realise,

I was fading through the dimming light..[ just like my love for you].

[Pre-Chorus 3]

Afterall I was all fun and game [for you],

A doll you could frame and play,

I should have stayed away,

We were never the same..

[Chorus 3]

I wished I could be your daytime star,

Someone that can still heal your scars,[and just..]

Maybe be your superstar, in a world so dark.

But now you have broke my heart [to pieces..],

I was never meant to be your art,

We have fallen apart,

I guess this is where my story starts.

[Verse 3 / Breakdown]

Now, as I go through all these emotions,

My heart cant seem to focus[it is after all hopeless],

Just one question remains,

Is there a end to this phase?

Now that I realize,

I shouldn't have had faith,

Or did I miscalculate?

[Pre-Chorus 4]

Was it all fun and game?

Just a doll to frame and play?

You never even cared,

All I am left is with tears.

[Chorus - Variation]

I wish, I was never your daytime star,

Now I'm left to heal from afar,

I cant be your superstar,

When you treat me like I'm too far.

[Outro]

But now that my heart is broken,

I'm left with words that were never spoken,

After all, we were never together,

Just like a fleeting dream in a stormy weather.

[I have finally realized you were never my story]...

hey guys, wrote 'UR CALL' few months back after thinking about a veryy close friend from school. We had something really special, but as life happened, she moved on--and in a way, I had to too.

I’d love to know if this resonates with any of you. If it does, drop a comment and let me know which specific lyrics hit you the hardest. Also, if you have any ideas on how to structure this musically or turn it into an actual song, please share,

[Verse 1]

I still seem to remember,

Our promise of staying together,

The world with u seemed never ending,

Didn't know it'd be over. [so soon]

Felt happy every day,

Seeing you by the hallway,

Memories seem to decay,

Even blue skies feel grey.

[Pre-Chorus]

Should I wait a little longer?

Do you still think of me? I wonder,

Dreaming by the corner,

Knowing my days are now longer.

[Chorus]

My mind seems to be fading,

Moments of us being crazy,

Wished we were like before,

Should I be waiting for your call?

[Verse 2]

You came into my life a bit too late,

Ever since, you made my day,

Stayed with me through all my pain,

So why should we face this break? [so soon]

I thought I saw your name light up my phone,

For a second, I wasn’t alone.

I'm worried I will forget your face,

And those funny jokes you make.

[Pre-Chorus]

Should I wait a little longer?

Do you still think of me? I wonder,

Dreaming by the corner,

How long should I bear this torture?

[Chorus 2]

My mind seems to be fading,

Moments of us being crazy,

Wished we were like before,

Should I still be waiting for your call?

[Bridge]

Been a year now since we spoke,

This silence is enough to choke.

Is my wish a bit too strong?

There ain't no path without you on this road.

Did you ever hesitate at all?

Or was I never hard to lose?

Was I that easy to ignore?

Or did you take me for a fool?

[Pre-Chorus 3]

I waited a little longer.

You probably don’t think of me — I wonder.

I tried to cry by the corner,

Does it even matter?

[Chorus - Variation]

My mind seems to be fading,

Moments of us being crazy,

Wished we were like before,

I won't wait any longer.

[Outro]

Lost my faith...

Accepted my fate...

What more is there to take?

It's now too late...

Where are u now?

Amongst this crowd..

I tried to look around,

But you were no where to be found...

so... I kept my phone on silent,

Hoping you’d call.

[Verse 1]

I still seem to remember,

Our promise of staying together,

The world with u seemed never ending,

Didn't know it'd be over. [so soon]

Felt happy every day,

Seeing you by the hallway,

Memories seem to decay,

Even blue skies feel grey.

[Pre-Chorus]

Should I wait a little longer?

Do you still think of me? I wonder,

Dreaming by the corner,

Knowing my days are now longer.

[Chorus]

My mind seems to be fading,

Moments of us being crazy,

Wished we were like before,

Should I be waiting for your call?

[Verse 2]

You came into my life a bit too late,

Ever since, you made my day,

Stayed with me through all my pain,

So why should we face this break? [so soon]

I thought I saw your name light up my phone,

For a second, I wasn’t alone.

I'm worried I will forget your face,

And those funny jokes you make.

[Pre-Chorus]

Should I wait a little longer?

Do you still think of me? I wonder,

Dreaming by the corner,

How long should I bear this torture?

[Chorus 2]

My mind seems to be fading,

Moments of us being crazy,

Wished we were like before,

Should I still be waiting for your call?

[Bridge]

Been a year now since we spoke,

This silence is enough to choke.

Is my wish a bit too strong?

There ain't no path without you on this road.

Did you ever hesitate at all?

Or was I never hard to lose?

Was I that easy to ignore?

Or did you take me for a fool?

[Pre-Chorus 3]

I waited a little longer.

You probably don’t think of me — I wonder.

I tried to cry by the corner,

Does it even matter?

[Chorus - Variation]

My mind seems to be fading,

Moments of us being crazy,

Wished we were like before,

I won't wait any longer.

[Outro]

Lost my faith...

Accepted my fate...

What more is there to take?

It's now too late...

Where are u now?

Amongst this crowd..

I tried to look around,

But you were no where to be found...

so... I kept my phone on silent,

Hoping you’d call.