r/LyricWriters

okay, so theyre pretty awful and just raw, unfiltered, stream of consciousness, but:

theres brown trees, theres a big old cow and its floating in space, nobody has a face, and idk what im saying, theres this giant squid and jt has very long tentacles, ill never marry cause im not what people want, im not what anyone wants, ill never kiss and ill never have kids because what am i without what i pretend i am, im not here, im not there, im not anywhere, im just here, theres a space, and its very big and im scared, i am, i can die and no one would care, i can say lots of things like, fish, turtle, cow, i dont feel im human i dont feel im anything, theres this big old tree and it doesn't have a name, no one named it, i will die before my first kiss

Got a dead end job at the corporate office 

Putting soup into cans and cans into boxes 

All just to rent out a room. 

Old timers here have been working too long 

Just to find out after 20 years that their pensions gone.

But they still act like they got something to prove.

Boss said, “good news!!!”

“You don’t have to work here no more.”

“This here’s Hector,

He’s going to be escorting you off the factory floor.”

(chorus end)

This is my last paycheck, rent’s due.

This is my last paycheck, empty fridge with no food.

trying to be more midwest emo vibes

first half of the first verse:

if i had a million dollars

i'd buy a private island

isolate from humans

hid in distant gardens

i want the next part to also also start with "if i had a million dollars, I'd..."

first half of chorus:

I'm a tightrope walker

ur a clown on stage

we're both sirens in the ocean

birds in different cage

He must land,

he's egotistic, ballistic thesis

thinkin' he on some sick shit

But I'm fixed that his wings are

biscuit

Nevermind, I dont sip tea

But I still fuck 'round like I'm investin'

got no vest on but still barrin'

wick wick

Wicked mouth with a hit list

An evicted clown expectin'

poetic justice

This the real world homie

you mad or autistic

Lines gettin' cold, you better get that sick leave

All bark no bite feelin' like toothless

Or the movin' castle where they be howlin'

A young fowl, all they know is they are prowlin'

I just pick a style and I'm 'bout it

a magic hat or a super power

doubt it

I may look like courage but I'm

cowardly

but I try to fend off bitches if they

found me

I feel like playin' cricket cuz I'm

umpirin'

Takin' no sides but still be firin'

Retarded friends are all I cow with

I'm retarded too

We movin' (mooin) countless

Amount low but you know we're on it

Actin' like just dont give a fuck but we be bad sighted

Not bad sighted but bad minded

Remember we are retarded

But still uncouthed

You laugh on us?

Well, ironic

I laugh too, criminal blarin' in my headphones

Yo, turn the sound full

Doin' this shit up like its too good

My noodle is fried,

Someone hexxed my voodoo

Might be my boo cuz I'm onto

loose screws,

wait, didnt say that right

Got a couple screws loose

yeah, now its cool

The whole clues' that I'm just gettin'

too fooled

My clownin' ass just like a pile of doodoo

Just listened to Man on the Moon

And got high out of the blue

And now I'm spazzin' anti-focal

I would suck if I was a poet

Shakespeare be movin' in his grave

if he see me loadin'

When I started I believed that good lyrics came from inspiration — that the best things I'd ever write would arrive fully formed and my job was to be ready to catch them. This made me a very passive writer. I waited. I protected the "inspired" lines from editing because changing them felt like tampering with something that came from somewhere else.

It took years to unlearn this.

The best lines I've written in the last two years have come from revision, not inspiration. From writing a bad version of something fifteen times until the good version appeared. From being willing to cut the line I was most attached to because the song needed something else.

Inspiration is real but it's a beginning, not a destination. The writers I most admire treat it that way — they catch the spark and then they work. The romance of the untouched first draft has cost a lot of songs their potential.

What's a belief about writing you held early on that you've since changed your mind about?

Hey everyone! I wrote this about a year ago but was too afraid to share until now. It combines three real-life college heartbreaks from people I know into a single story: loving someone from afar, being used by them, and finally waking up to the reality that they are toxic.

I’d love to get your thoughts! Please drop a comment if this resonates with you, or if you have any feedback on how to improve it.

Specifically:

1. Since it blends three different situations (unrequited love, being used, and realizing they are toxic), does it feel like a cohesive journey?
2. Does flipping the "Daytime Star" metaphor at the end work well to show the emotional growth of finally moving on?

[Verse 1]

All this time, I thought you were really the one,

All those days, I believed that I have won,

By finding someone like you to love and pursue,

Though it slowly came to view, you were always blue,

Now I realize I was blinded to the truth,

By your garish light.

[Pre-Chorus]

It was all fun and game [for you],

Just a doll to frame and play,

Now I am the one to blame,

Trusting you to maybe [just maybe..], feel the same.

[Chorus]

I wish I could be your daytime star,

Someone that can heal your scars,

Maybe be your superstar, in a world so dark.

But now you have broke my heart [to pieces..],

I knew I was never your art,

We were meant to fall apart,

Maybe this is where my story starts [ we can't be us].

[Verse 2]

Autumn days go by, feelings that I cant deny,

Weren't you my guy? now all I do is cry [for you..],

Those little butterflies I felt,

Hoping that our souls could melt [in love],

Suddenly I realize, when all those moments rewind [ were there any??],

My one .. and .. only question is .. why?

[Pre-Chorus 2]

Was I all fun and game? [for you],

Just a doll to frame and play,

Was I meant to stay away?

We can never be the same..

[Chorus 2]

I wished I could be your daytime star,

Someone that could have healed your scars,

Maybe be your superstar, in a world so dark.

But now you have broke my heart [to pieces..],

I was never meant to be your art,

We had to fall apart,

This is where my story starts.

[Bridge]

We never shared a word,

But I always felt so heard,

When we were together[ were we?],

You too wanted to be seen [she would agree],

I just wanted to be free,

Cause now I know the reality,

Now that I realise,

I was fading through the dimming light..[ just like my love for you].

[Pre-Chorus 3]

Afterall I was all fun and game [for you],

A doll you could frame and play,

I should have stayed away,

We were never the same..

[Chorus 3]

I wished I could be your daytime star,

Someone that can still heal your scars,[and just..]

Maybe be your superstar, in a world so dark.

But now you have broke my heart [to pieces..],

I was never meant to be your art,

We have fallen apart,

I guess this is where my story starts.

[Verse 3 / Breakdown]

Now, as I go through all these emotions,

My heart cant seem to focus[it is after all hopeless],

Just one question remains,

Is there a end to this phase?

Now that I realize,

I shouldn't have had faith,

Or did I miscalculate?

[Pre-Chorus 4]

Was it all fun and game?

Just a doll to frame and play?

You never even cared,

All I am left is with tears.

[Chorus - Variation]

I wish, I was never your daytime star,

Now I'm left to heal from afar,

I cant be your superstar,

When you treat me like I'm too far.

[Outro]

But now that my heart is broken,

I'm left with words that were never spoken,

After all, we were never together,

Just like a fleeting dream in a stormy weather.

[I have finally realized you were never my story]...

hey guys, wrote 'UR CALL' few months back after thinking about a veryy close friend from school. We had something really special, but as life happened, she moved on--and in a way, I had to too.

I’d love to know if this resonates with any of you. If it does, drop a comment and let me know which specific lyrics hit you the hardest. Also, if you have any ideas on how to structure this musically or turn it into an actual song, please share,

[Verse 1]

I still seem to remember,

Our promise of staying together,

The world with u seemed never ending,

Didn't know it'd be over. [so soon]

Felt happy every day,

Seeing you by the hallway,

Memories seem to decay,

Even blue skies feel grey.

[Pre-Chorus]

Should I wait a little longer?

Do you still think of me? I wonder,

Dreaming by the corner,

Knowing my days are now longer.

[Chorus]

My mind seems to be fading,

Moments of us being crazy,

Wished we were like before,

Should I be waiting for your call?

[Verse 2]

You came into my life a bit too late,

Ever since, you made my day,

Stayed with me through all my pain,

So why should we face this break? [so soon]

I thought I saw your name light up my phone,

For a second, I wasn’t alone.

I'm worried I will forget your face,

And those funny jokes you make.

[Pre-Chorus]

Should I wait a little longer?

Do you still think of me? I wonder,

Dreaming by the corner,

How long should I bear this torture?

[Chorus 2]

My mind seems to be fading,

Moments of us being crazy,

Wished we were like before,

Should I still be waiting for your call?

[Bridge]

Been a year now since we spoke,

This silence is enough to choke.

Is my wish a bit too strong?

There ain't no path without you on this road.

Did you ever hesitate at all?

Or was I never hard to lose?

Was I that easy to ignore?

Or did you take me for a fool?

[Pre-Chorus 3]

I waited a little longer.

You probably don’t think of me — I wonder.

I tried to cry by the corner,

Does it even matter?

[Chorus - Variation]

My mind seems to be fading,

Moments of us being crazy,

Wished we were like before,

I won't wait any longer.

[Outro]

Lost my faith...

Accepted my fate...

What more is there to take?

It's now too late...

Where are u now?

Amongst this crowd..

I tried to look around,

But you were no where to be found...

so... I kept my phone on silent,

Hoping you’d call.