u/Segose-Crying

Vein.fm most streamed song is Rebirth Protocol which is an amazing track in album's context but i was surprised that this song is more popular than Virus Vibrance or Doomtech

Just want to update my SWS collection you know

Verse:

I found a framed state of mind

Our cemetery's here to burn

Why can't you hear me friend, tonight

I'll make this place learn

Chorus:

Kill the lies inside of our voice

I'll make you proud for finding my vice

The only thing is that I can't find any way

To get away, find gateway

Post-chorus:

Find gateway

Verse:

No one hears me as i shut my ears and scream

No one seems to know, why am i still here?

Several issues inside of this place

They made me a martyr to everything

Do i feel shame? Yeah, kinda, maybe

But anyway I'm not so far from my family

And friends, i used to call them by names

Now I don't know and can't find anything

Breakdown:

Disrespectful nature

I'm imprisoned

Save me now

Bridge:

Until it's all over i will illuminate

The world of colors, the world of fame

I've taken this word over demise

Should i be grateful or shoud i fucking die?

Outro:

Disrespectful nature

Disrespectful future

It cannot be renewed

Sorry

Verse:

Dialogues, i wish we never had

I wish we would end conversation on a better note

I wish i could just say goodbye instead of trying to open your eyes

But now we are divided, now we are feel alright

Chorus:

Even when you're sober

You still don't feel like a mindful person

And I've got used to it

But lately you've been addicted to everything

Even when you're sober

Even if you haven't been this way for months

I hope one day you'll see the light

And close your eyes with a smile

Verse:

Honestly my friend

i feel better every day i don't think about you

And I've found a course in life

A crystal lake, a beautiful paradigm

I'm moving my road, full of ambitions

And i haven't thought about your condition

Fuck you and your friends

You're always welcomed to be kicked out of my hands

Chorus:

Even when you're sober

You still don't feel like a mindful person

And I've got used to it

But lately you've been addicted to everything

Even when you're sober

Even if you haven't been this way for months

I hope one day you'll see the light

And close your eyes with a smile

Outro:

And I'm tired of you speaking 'bout youth

That passed five years ago

You're not a friend, you're just fiend

I won't give you a fucking thing

Underoath. Maybe a hot take but i enjoy Spencer Chamberlain cleans more than Aaron.

Amity Affliction. Been listening to Misery lately and was surprised how good Joel's voice is. Especially on verses of Feels Like I'm Dying. He's got some rawness that makes his voice feel more emotional than Ahren

For some reason never payed attention before my friend pointed out on how much Garrett Rapp sounds like Johnny Craig on their Know Hope album. Seriously, if anyone haven't tried it ya need it. It's like if Misery Signals changed their vocalist to Johnny Craig (but Garrett is actually a reakly nice and humble dude tho)

Making this post because of Miss May I - Masses Of A Dying Breed

This song sounds like the opener, especially with its spoken word intro that sets the tone for an album and that catchy riffing in the background. Chorus is the catchiest thing ever but for some reason they decided to make Our Kings an opener. And yeah i like this song but MOADB would've been a better start imo

Also i think Bones by Make Them Suffer would've been a fun one. Imagine if you're not prepared, pressing the play button and the first thing you hear is this I CAN'T BREEEEEEATHE

Also World Without A Sun by Oh Sleeper could've been great. Unfortunately it doesn't work because of the album concept

Intro:

Kill the desolation that hides deep inside

Hollow frontier is everything i see because I'm...

Blinded by nostalgia and days of future past

Everything i feel is a paradox

Verse:

"Life is an illusion and an excuse to feel high"

Dear friend i engraved these words in my mind

You put me on this needle, we're both victims

I'm to blame for knowing you

Interlude:

I want to change everything in my life

Every sungle person I've ever met

I want to forget them, erase them from my head

To feel free and not live in a retrospect

Bridge:

Rotting forever, rotting like this

Grieving is a mark on a wishing list

Rotting forever, rotting like this

Grieving is a mark on a wishing list

Pre-breakdown:

I'd rather feel like shit

Than feel like a wothless slime

But the thing in my blood

Makes me feel like I'm both of these feelings

In a human form!

Breakdown:

Victim of silence and thoughts in my head

I hate you all, you stabbed me in the back

Victim of silence and thoughts in my head

I hate you all, you stabbed me in the back

Outro:

I'm out

Need some advices, non native speaker🥹

Intro:

I never wanted to believe in myself

I never tried to run away from this inner self

Reflection is blinding me

I look in the mirror and see nothing

Verse:

I fear that this taste will kill

Self aware of tragedies made up in my head

Refrain:

Will i cut or will i stab?

This is the only question

Drinking from a wishing well

Losing my excelsior

Verse:

I'll push the helix of extinction

To drown in my own imperfections

Lying to myself, laying in a early grave

I'm ready to stop breathing

Or at least hear farewells

Chorus:

I hate that I'm never, never enough

I'm always such a fragile thief, walking on glass

With my ugliness that shines through wounds i left by myself

Suicide in slow motion, and i hate to be this way, i cannot hide the shame

Refrain:

Will i cut or will i stab?

This is the only question

Drinking from a wishing well

Losing my excelsior

Will i cut or will i stab?

This is the only question

Drinking from a wishing well

Losing my identity

Bridge:

Changing the colors and shapes of my life

In hopes to find a solace of mind

Changing the colors and shapes of my life

Although i know that it's all in my head

Outro:

I will stab myself to death

To see how it feels

To have a cleaner head

Tried to write something about a person with an eating disorder. What can i improve in writing?