u/tradefiend69

I had posted this yesterday but due to thread editing errors amongst other things, I deleted the post. I'm back, hopefully with no typos this time!

Title: Cannonball
Format: Short
Length: 9 pages
Genres: Psychological Horror, Dark Comedy

Logline: After crashing his car while dictating a breakup through a voice assistant, a self-absorbed young man stumbles into a late-night pool party where the beautiful, hollow strangers turn out to be far better at using people than he'll ever be.

Feedback Concerns: This is the first thing I had ever written, and first time I'm ever seeking feedback. I came back to it after finishing two scripts (including the feature that this is the cold open for) and polished it up. I have an opportunity to share it with someone who might be able to give me guidance and help me make this short. I just need an honest assessment of: my voice/habits and the short in general.

I don't want to share this with someone who may be able to open doors for me until it's technically sound and cohesive. The only people who have read my works are friends. Of course they like it, lol. I have no idea where I stand.

Thank you to anyone who assists, it's truly so appreciated.

Google drive PDF link

Hey everyone,

I've been writing for a bit and want to finally try to make a short film. I have so many questions. I've saved up so I can have at least some sort of "paid" shoot, even if it's not much. Let's say $1,000-5,000.

This is not "How do I learn to direct actors/do all the glamorous parts of directing?" it's more so "How do I learn the logistical and organizational side of directing?"

Let me give a scenario: 10 page short film. 3 locations, all at night: a moving car, an exterior of a parked car, a backyard. 2 main actors, 3 minor, ideally multiple background characters.

I go on Backstage to find crew and actors. I'd hire whatever the bare minimum crew is to keep things simple while also giving me the best chance at learning & quality. So, I'm assuming that's: DP, Sound person, Light person. Now what?!

1. How do I properly schedule? How do I know how long a single scene takes to film? How do I know how many days the whole production will be?
2. How do I manage the documents/prep work? Shot list? Story boards? Rehearsals? Blocking?
3. How do I make sure no one involved is legally liable for things like safety, location permits, insurance, contracts, etc.
4. How much do I pay people? How do I work out a budget? How do I know if someone is competent or not? What are the expectations as far as meetings, planning, etc with them?
5. Am I overcomplicating this for a 10-page short? (yes). So, what really matters here so that I'm competent and prepared for my cast and crew?

Anyway, my TLDR is: First-time director, comfortable writer, trying to figure out the necessary producing/logistics side of my first short film so I'm prepared and respectful of everyone's time.

Thank you to anyone who helps!

Hello everyone!

(I had just posted this, but was unable to edit the OG post with the correct script. Please remove if not allowed.)

I started writing last July as a hobby. I quickly fell in love with it and realized my desire to be a filmmaker was very much alive! I started writing, I've done about three scripts so far (want to revise all of them haha).

I've never shared my writing with anyone besides friends. This short was the first idea I had, it came to me one day as I was driving. It's what got me to start writing. I've expanded it out to a 90 page feature (with this serving as the cold open). Maybe I'll share that another time.

Title: Cannonball
Format: Short
Page Length: 9
Genres: Black Comedy, Psychological Thriller

Log line: After crashing his car while dictating a breakup through his voice assistant, a self-absorbed young man stumbles into a late-night pool party where the beautiful, hollow strangers turn out to be far better at using people than he'll ever be.

Feedback Concerns: New writer, so feedback on my general voice/any bad habits. General feedback about the script as well, anything you wish to share.

Specific questions:

1. Pacing? The car scene is to my liking, but I originally wanted to let the party scenes breathe a bit, but I felt keeping it snappy was better.
2. ROBOTIC VOICE (O.S.), ROBOTIC VOICE or something else?

To anyone who reads or leaves feedback, thank you so much.

Google Drive link to PDF

Hello everyone!

I started writing last July as a hobby. I quickly fell in love with it and realized my desire to be a filmmaker was very much alive! I started writing, I've done about three scripts so far (want to revise all of them haha).

I've never shared my writing with anyone besides friends. This short was the first idea I had, it came to me one day as I was driving. It's what got me to start writing. I've expanded it out to a 90 page feature (with this serving as the cold open). Maybe I'll share that another time.

Title: Cannonball
Format: Short
Page Length: 8
Genres: Black Comedy, Psychological Thriller

Log line: After a heated break up via virtual assistant and subsequent car crash, a dazed young man seeks help at a seductive suburban house party, unaware the superficial guests are about to systemically strip away his identity.

Feedback Concerns: This is the first time I'm sharing something, so I'm interested in general advice about my voice/writing habits as well as general feedback on this short. This is something I'd like to direct myself some day, if I can build up connections and resources.

Specific questions:

1. Pacing? The car scene is to my liking, but I originally wanted to let the party scenes breathe a bit, but I felt keeping it snappy was better.
2. ROBOTIC VOICE (O.S.), ROBOTIC VOICE or something else?

To anyone who reads or leaves feedback, thank you so much.

Google Drive link to PDF

I know this has been asked a ton, but I haven’t found any comparisons with recent pricing.

Price differences - Around me, GR III isn’t really available, there are plenty of GR IIIx’s though. They sell for around $1,100 - $1,350 (more so $1250 is the avg). A GR IV is $1,590.55 after taxes.

This will be an everyday (travel, friends, walks, life, etc) camera first and foremost.

I understand there have been good and bad changes between the models. IV has better battery and AF (ricoh’s supposed bad autofocus makes me a bit concerned), but III still has TTL and maybe better build quality?

This will be my first camera in a while. I had a Nikon d3400 w/ a 35mm years ago that I got pretty good with, all things considered. (Agonizing over the 28mm vs 40mm has been a nightmare lol).

So, my question to you: Is a used GR III for $1250 or a new IV for $1,590.65 given my use case & this being my entry into the Ricoh system AND cameras for awhile. I sold a camera I was not using and no longer fit my desires recently for about $940, so in reality it’s more like $310 for the III vs $650 for the IV.

The sentiment I found online seems to suggest when the GR III was $750-900 the GR III was the answer.

Looking for a lightly used GR IIIx, standard or HDF. Will entertain GR III as well.

Paypal goods & services only. Comment before PM. Interested in shutter count and any damage/issues disclosed.

I have rep in r/mechmarket.