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I have been murdered by my classmates forty-nine times, and the worst part is that it’s never the same person twice.

By now, I have memorized the layout of Sehwa Private Academy perfectly.
I know where every flesh-eating monster spawns and how to keep my classmates alive. To them, I look like an omnipotent genius who can predict the future. I could easily carry them all to the exit.

But the System doesn't like easy, happy endings.

To keep the Viewers entertained, it secretly assigns one student as The Warden’s Hound at the start of every reset, granting them monster-tier stats and a single objective: slaughter the class from the shadows. And every time I die, the role shuffles to someone new.

In Loop 48, it was the class president. In Loop 49, it was my crush.

In Loop 50? It could be the quiet girl I just rescued, or the friend currently handing me a bottle of water.
Memorizing the school map is useless against the paranoia. My mind is eroding, my lives are running out and I can't trust a single smile.

[The Graduation Elimination Game has begun. Total Survivors Allowed: 1]

Hello, guys. I'm new to this community so, I hope you can help me. I've been writing a web novel for a couple of months. I've been rejected twice for my novel and since, then I've given up on getting a contract. It's also mostly due to the horrible conditions of the contract that I ignored before. I have decided that I'll be a fully indie author. I don't wanna make money, I want stories for the sake of writing. Though, my novel will go a hiatus for a few months as I want focus on my studies. I want to become an author but right now, my studies are important. However, I'm making this post to just get some feedback on my novel from a third-party. My novel is a sci-fi, fantasy, mystery type of book with a dash of trauma, cosmic horror, mythology and others. So, give your honest review on the first chapter.

Chapter 1: The Second Sun

"The second sun…"

Those words echoed throughout the entire world. The voice came from nowhere and everywhere. Everyone stopped in their tracks, but the sound of their footsteps continued to echo. The clock clicked too loudly to be normal, the shadows danced to a melody that hadn't begun – then reality cracked. A massive void appeared above the city, swallowing the sun. The civilian jaws dropped open, their eyes reflected indescribable fear.

Suddenly, the world was covered in fog, the faces of citizens were shrouded in a thick gray mist. The void released thick black smoke that covered the city in just a few seconds. A man was sitting at a café, wearing an all-black outfit. His gaze wandered into the crack in the sky. His eyes dilated and he let go of the teacup in his hand. The cup shattered on the ground, but no sound came after.

Then, all hell broke loose. Demonic creatures swarmed out of the rift, their skin red like blood and goat horns protruding from their skull. Goblins, ogres, snakes and much more marched out of the rift like soldiers going to war, all with a dark aura covering them. Their bodies were covered in dark aura as if they were being covered by darkness.

But strangest of all…humans also emerged from there...humans from different eras of history, some wearing robes, others wearing coats. They flew over the city with their feathered wings and landed on top of building. They spoke in a deep, demonic tone that sounded like nails on a chalk board. The people covered their ears in pain and fell to their knees. Then, the demons whispered two words that shook the world again.

"Bring the second sun…"

"Bring the second sun."

"Bring the second sun!"

"BRING THE SECOND SUN!!!"

Then, the smoke ignited and explod– 

"AHHHHHHHH!!!"

Missio screamed in agony. His chest burned. Breath caught. Sweat dripped down his chin like oil. His pupils contracted as he remembered. The same dread. The same fire. The same silence after. After a while, his breathing stabilized. He let go of his chest and fell back onto his bed. He was in a dark room with no light. He sat up and pulled the curtains down.

He closed his eyes as sunlight blasted through his window. He lifted his hand and covered his eyes. After a few moments, he lowered his hand and gazed outside. It was beautiful scenery, the birds were chirping, the gardener was watering the plants. Guards wearing pristine white suits with golden accents stood at attention by the gate. He took a sharp breath, remembering the nightmare he had.

'That day again…'

He clutched his head and shook his head violently. His thoughts cleared up as he lowered his hand.

"Not the first time…Let's get ready, shall we?" He muttered to himself.

He stood up, still wearing his pajamas. He turned on the lights and went to his own washroom. His room was brightly colored like the nursery of a child. He walked out with a towel on his waist and opened his closet. He picked up his work uniform which was a full black outfit.

After a few minutes, he came out of his room. He was wearing a black windbreaker with a weighted vest over it, a black shirt, black pants and black sneakers with fingerless gloves. On his back-waist was a sheathed katana and on the back of his windbreaker, "EOC" was written in big bold white letters. He hung on a two-star insignia on his chest and strolled through the hallway. He descended the big staircase, stepping onto the ground floor.

The living room was a lavish place with high ceilings and white walls. Massive sets of couches parallel to each other with a long wooden table in the middle were placed at the center of the room. Underneath was a woolen carpet colored red with golden accents. He moved towards the dining hall. After opening another door, he entered a large wooden room with a chandelier.

He placed his katana on the table and sat down. Moments later, a maid brought him breakfast. He looked at the maid and smiled slightly. The old woman whose brown hair was turning white, looked at Missio with a gentle smile.

"Quickly finish your breakfast, my lord. You're going to be late for work."

"Right…" Missio's voice cracked like he had forgotten to speak.

He picked up the knife and fork and began digging into the delightful meal. He cut open the eggs, the yolk spilling out like fresh honey. He licked his lips and ate it. He savored every bite. He continued eating his breakfast and after a while, he was finished. He let out a burp and put down his utensils.

"Alright, I'll be heading out." He stood up.

Lilla nodded and began to clean up his mess. He looked at the maid with bubbly eyes. He lingered on her for more than he wanted and she was done cleaning up. He snapped back and picked up his katana. He exited the dining hall and sat down on the couch. A few minutes later, he realized he had forgotten something.

'Wait…where's my Music box?' He tapped the side of his waist.

He panicked but before he could stand up, Lilla appeared beside him with his music box and headphones in her hands.

"Forgive me, my lord. I forgot to tell you I cleaned your Music box the other day." She said with the same smile as before.

Missio blinked. Before taking the box, he noticed that Lilla didn't have a shadow. He shrugged it off and took the box and headphones from her hands. He didn't question it – not anymore. He turned it over. The box was too black — not dark, but absent. Light bent around it, refusing to land as if it knew it would become nothing once it touched its surface.

The headphones had the same characteristics as the strange box. He connected the headphone to the Music box. He clipped the Music box onto his belt and put on the headphones. He pressed play. The hum of reality faltered for a moment before the music started playing. He looked at an old-school mechanical clock. The clock ticked — then slowed, its hands dragging through time.

'Looks like it's time to go...'

He sighed, stood up and halted at the door. He looked back and saw Lilla, smiling gently at him. He bit his lip and looked forward. He stepped into a vast, green and lively garden. The middle- aged gardener from before was still watering the plants. Missio strolled on the pavement, heading towards the garage.

He opened the large, white metallic door. The room was lit in an instant. He walked past all the luxurious cars and stopped at a black sports bike with red accents. He picked up the helmet and swung his leg up to sit. As he sat, a holographic interface flickered at the place where the speedometer should've been. It scanned his face and unlocked, revealing the speedometer in digital form. He revved the bike once and sped past. The garage doors closed behind him as the guards opened the gate to the garage.

He stopped outside the manor and looked around. The skyscrapers stood above the clouds like unmoving giants. Their peaks covered half the sky, and shadowed half the city. He tapped his helmet twice. The mirrored visor instantly closed on him and presented him with a digital GPS. He selected a location, and the AI immediately created a route to his destination. The helmet tightened around his head as if it was trying to stick his skin.

He sped off with a blast, swerving around curbs like a professional. He turned corners with unnecessary caution. People glanced at him as he passed the streets. His windbreaker blew in the wind as he stuck himself close to the bike.

I’ve just started reading webnovels for the first time and I’m looking for some webnovels to add to my reading list.

So far I’ve started reading shadow slave, the author’s pov and tbate.
Webnovels I’ve already added to my reading list are: mother of learning, lord of the mysteries, reverend insanity and omniscient reader’s viewpoint

Let me know if you have any other recommendations!

I am js a teenager n don't think I'll be having too much of time but I've always wanted to write

Is there a place where I can casually write web novels with semi success potential?

Edit:I am looking for a place where I can casually publish chapters periodically serialised manner

Genre will prolly be adventure,fantasy,a bit of action

I’m only asking because I was told views don’t matter and yes I know people might say don’t worry about the rejection percentage and focus on writing a good story, but then I realise there are a lot of good novels on the app that aren’t contracted. like it’s all luck and that’s fine, and I have another question I want to start making money soon. So should I make another novel and hope to get contracted which Is probably not gonna happen if we’re being honest or just do what ifs on Ytube, get the requirements and start getting paid?

My novel, has a terrible start; the first 20 chapters are awful. I don't know if I should continue writing chapters or rewrite the first 20 or 30. Please, I need advice.

I really need this to be answered because a lot of the novels on webnovel just aren’t for me unless they are really good written and if this doesn’t work I’m just going to write smut because this app just loves smut tbh