u/Affectionate_Song141

I’ve been struggling to give the characters a good and compelling long term arc that sticks to the main theme of “finding purposes” but also fits her character.

The characters is named Gudrid Moreau who is a colonel in the military of Löwe, when shes first introduced I have it be from the POV of the main character, Leon and she kinda off as someone who takes things overly serious, impatient and somewhat rude creating tension between her and Leon with her commentating on how she thinks Leon is a waste of talented swordsman for being a bounty hunter and being overly harsh. But as the story goes on I write so that the reader understands that she isn’t trying to be rude or overly serious she’s just very passionate and prideful about her position as colonel and takes it seriously because of how indebted she feels and why she is the way she is rather it be through flashbacks of her before the military or through other characters talking about her. I’m also planing on making the romance aspect of their relationship to be more of a slow burn romance since i think it fits both of their characters.

The main idea for an long term arc that I’ve been playing around with

I could just make her lose her purpose as a warrior and her position as colonel since I think she could be a character that represents “losing purpose” since I think the idea of someone questioning if what they were or are doing is really there purpose in life or if there really is something more interest me a lot. And I also think it could kinda patrol the MC since I wrote him to be a person who nihilistic and callous but I’m not sure if that’s a good enough idea for a long term arc.

(Sorry if my writing is messy I’m currently writing this as I am very tired)
I’ve been struggling to write a good female warrior character to be the secondary protagonist of my story I want to make sure I don’t accidentally make her into a Mary sue character or just have the reader refer to her as “just the love interest” especially the latter of the two. The reason because I kinda made her to be the love interest since the story is about finding purposes in life and sometimes people can find purpose to live because of their spouse witch i think is really interesting even though it isn’t the most important purpose i made i think it’s one of the more major ones.

I honestly don’t know what else to do with her i want to give her a character arc that stays on theme but is unique to her the best concept i could think of is making her lose her main purpose of being a warrior since she takes great pride in the fact that she’s a leader for a army and a warrior and has made it her whole purpose so I think she could kinda represent the idea of losing purpose in life but I’m not sure if that would work.

(Sorry if my writing is messy I’m currently writing this as I am very tired)
I’ve been struggling to write a good female warrior character to be the secondary protagonist of my story I want to make sure I don’t accidentally make her into a Mary sue character or just have the reader refer to her as “just the love interest” especially the latter of the two. The reason because I kinda made her to be the love interest since the story is about finding purposes in life and sometimes people can find purpose to live because of their spouse.

I honestly don’t know what else to do with her i want to give her a character arc that stays on theme but is unique to her the best concept i could think of is making her lose her main purpose of being a warrior since she takes great pride in the fact that she’s a leader for a army and a warrior and has made it her whole purpose but I’m not sure if that would work.

(Sorry if my writing is messy I’m currently writing this as I am very tired)
I’ve been struggling to write a good female warrior character to be the secondary protagonist of my story I want to make sure I don’t accidentally make her into a Mary sue character or just have the reader refer to her as “just the love interest” especially the latter of the two. The reason because I kinda made her to be the love interest since the story is about finding purposes in life and sometimes people can find purpose to live because of their spouse.

I honestly don’t know what else to do with her i want to give her a character arc that stays on theme but is unique to her the best concept i could think of is making her lose her main purpose of being a warrior since she takes great pride in the fact that she’s a leader for a army and a warrior and has made it her whole purpose but I’m not sure if that would work.

(callous means emotionally hardened, insensitive, or having a cruel disregard for others)

So I’ve been writing this story with a callous main character but I don’t really know how I should write so I don’t turn people away from reading the story.

(callous means emotionally hardened, unsympathetic, and insensitive to the suffering of others)

(callous means emotionally hardened, unsympathetic, and insensitive to the suffering of others)

I’m new to writing and I’ve been working on a dark fantasy story for a few weeks but I’m struggling how I can show and write a war torn setting for the story. I want to write it respectfully and realistically but also have it not be in the readers face and I also want it to be somewhat real in a way that kinda makes the reader feel uncomfortable.

The story is set in a late 1800s after a long brutal war that shook the whole continent with every part of the continent being affected even if some of the nations were neutral during the war.

If you guys have any questions about the story just ask I’ll probably have an answer

I’m a new writer and I’ve been working on a dark fantasy story for about a few weeks and I was wondering if this would work as a main character/plot
(Feel free to ask me about anything about the story I’ll probably reply and have an answer hopefully or too critique me since I really want to get better at writing)

The story is set in late 1800s and follows a bounty hunter named Leon Askelen a bounty hunter who travels through the war torn continent Meir inspired by Europe that is still recovering from a long brutal war between the humans and the faeries of Meir. I wrote the story to depict Leon as nihilistic, rude, impatient, selfish and numb to the violence that still prevalent in the region because of the horrors he saw in the war and what he’s already done to others and I also made him have a more nihilistic view on life. As the story goes on the readers gets a few moments of the war and his life before the war to better understand Leon and the why he is the way he is. As the story continues Leon begins to start finding purposes in life rather it be on accident or other events and experiences he has throughout the story but I made the story as Leon never really chose to find a purpose he just kinda stubbles upon them. With the whole story being about what are some purposes some people live for and why they might find meaning in it. I’m also planing on making the story into two parts while the first half barley develops the character and more or less focuses on them and how they came to be the second half takes a more slow pace to tell the story and more about the development of the characters rather than fighting.

Obviously this is a very abbreviated version of the story but this is just a basic explanation of the story.

The main inspiration for Leon came from 2 source
Leon was vaguely inspired by a Saint called Saint Moises the Ethiopian who was a 4th century Christian monk who was a bandit and band leader before he became a monk I thought the redemption aspect of Moises was cool

(The main problem with this though is that there’s not much information on Saint Moises so i can’t really base Leon of him alone)

the alchemist by paulo coelho which is a book about a young shepherd boy who on a journey to find hidden treasure and learns valuable life. I read this book after my professor said he’d think I’d like it

There are a few problems I’ve had while writing the story like

How can I write the second half of the story without it feeling boring/sluggish

How can I make my story feel unique from other similar stories

How can I write the secondary main character so that she doesn’t feel like “just the love interest”

How can I make the world feel unique and different from other dark fantasy worlds

These are just a few of the problems but if anyone has any suggestions or advice I’ll gladly listen.

(Sorry for the repost the original one was very buggy and some of the text wouldn’t show even after editing it)
I’m a new writer and I’ve been working on a dark fantasy story for about a few weeks and I was wondering if this would work as a main character/plot
(Feel free to ask me about anything about the story I’ll probably reply and have an answer hopefully or too critique me since I really want to get better at writing)

The story is set in late 1800s and follows a bounty hunter named Leon Askelen a bounty hunter who travels through the war torn continent Meir inspired by Europe that is still recovering from a long brutal war between the humans and the faeries of Meir. I wrote the story to depict Leon as nihilistic, rude, impatient, selfish and numb to the violence that still prevalent in the region because of the horrors he saw in the war and what he’s already done to others and I also made him have a more nihilistic view on life. As the story goes on the readers gets a few moments of the war and his life before the war to better understand Leon and the why he is the way he is. As the story continues Leon begins to start finding purposes in life rather it be on accident or other events and experiences he has throughout the story but I made the story as Leon never really chose to find a purpose he just kinda stubbles upon them. With the whole story being about what are some purposes some people live for and why they might find meaning in it. I’m also planing on making the story into two parts while the first half barley develops the character and more or less focuses on them and how they came to be the second half takes a more slow pace to tell the story and more about the development of the characters rather than fighting.

Obviously this is a very abbreviated version of the story but this is just a basic explanation of the story. And obviously I don’t think this story is original or even unique I’m not breaking new ground but I think it’s a good start to get into writing and maybe someday I might remake the story.

The main inspiration for Leon came from 2 source
Leon was vaguely inspired by a Saint called Saint Moises the Ethiopian who was a 4th century Christian monk who was a bandit and band leader before he became a monk I thought the redemption aspect of Moises was cool

(The main problem with this though is that there’s not much information on Saint Moises so i can’t really base Leon of him alone)

the alchemist by paulo coelho which is a book about a young shepherd boy who on a journey to find hidden treasure and learns valuable life. I read this book after my professor said he’d think I’d like it

I’m a new writer and I’ve been working on a dark fantasy story for about a few weeks and I was wondering if this would work as a main character/plot
(Feel free to ask me about anything about the story I’ll probably reply and have an answer hopefully or too critique me since I really want to get better at writing)

The story is set in late 1800s and follows a bounty hunter named Leon Askelen a bounty hunter who travels through the war torn continent Meir inspired by Europe that is still recovering from a long brutal war between the humans and the faeries of Meir. I wrote the story to depict Leon as nihilistic, rude, impatient, selfish and numb to the violence that still prevalent in the region because of the horrors he saw in the war and what he’s already done to others and I also made him have a more nihilistic view on life. As the story goes on the readers gets a few moments of the war and his life before the war to better understand Leon and the why he is the way he is. As the story continues Leon begins to start finding purposes in life rather it be on accident or other events and experiences he has throughout the story but I made the story as Leon never really chose to find a purpose he just kinda stubbles upon them. With the whole story being about what are some purposes some people live for and why they might find meaning in it. I’m also planing on making the story into two parts while the first half barley develops the character and more or less focuses on them and how they came to be the second half takes a more slow pace to tell the story and more about the development of the characters rather than fighting.

Obviously this is a very abbreviated version of the story but this is just a basic explanation of the story. And I obviously don’t think the story is original or I’m breaking new ground it’s just a way for me to step into writing.

The main inspiration for Leon came from 2 sources
He was vaguely inspired by a Saint called Saint Moises the Ethiopian who was a 4th century Christian monk who was a bandit and band leader before he became a monk I thought the redemption aspect of Moises was cool
(The main problem with this though is that there’s not much information on Saint Moises so i can’t really base Leon of him alone)

2. the alchemist by paulo coelho which is a book about a young shepherd boy who on a journey to find hidden treasure and learns valuable life. I read this book after my professor said he’d think I’d like it

(Sorry if my writing is messy)
I’m a new to writing and I’ve been working on a dark fantasy story for a while now but I’ve been struggling to write the main continent that the story takes place in as war torn place. the story takes place after a long war between faeries and human that live in the continent.

The main things I’m struggling with is how I can approach the idea of war torn respectfully and how I can show it without it being right in the readers face. I’m also struggling on how I can show the effect of the war on not just the people involved in the war but also people who were just catching on the middle of it.

So I’m hoping someone can give me some books,shows,movies or comics that do the idea well or maybe some advice and pointers on how i can do it.

(Sorry if my writing is messy)
I’m a new to writing and I’ve been working on a dark fantasy story for a while now but I’ve been struggling to write the main continent that the story takes place in as war torn place. the story takes place after a long war between faeries and human that live in the continent.

The main things I’m struggling with is how I can approach the idea of war torn respectfully and how I can show it without it being right in the readers face. I’m also struggling on how I can show the effect of the war on not just the people involved in the war but also people who were just catching on the middle of it.

So I’m hoping someone can give me some books,shows,movies or comics that do the idea well or maybe some advice and pointers on how i can do it.

(Sorry if my writing is messy)
I’m a new to writing and I’ve been working on a dark fantasy story for a while now but I’ve been struggling to write the main continent that the story takes place in as war torn place. the story takes place after a long war between faeries and human that live in the continent.

The main things I’m struggling with is how I can approach the idea of war torn respectfully and how I can show it without it being right in the readers face. I’m also struggling on how I can show the effect of the war on not just the people involved in the war but also people who were just catching on the middle of it.

So I’m hoping someone can give me some books,shows,movies or comics that do the idea well or maybe some advice and pointers on how i can do it.

(Sorry if my writing is messy)
I’m a new to writing and I’ve been working on a dark fantasy story for a while now but I’ve been struggling to write the main continent that the story takes place in as war torn place. the story takes place after a long war between faeries and human that live in the continent.

The main things I’m struggling with is how I can approach the idea of war torn respectfully and how I can show it without it being right in the readers face. I’m also struggling on how I can show the effect of the war on not just the people involved in the war but also people who were just catching on the middle of it.

So I’m hoping someone can give me some books,shows,movies or comics that do the idea well or maybe some advice and pointers on how i can do it.

(Repost since the original post was very vague)
Ive been working on this dark fantasy story for a while but recently I’ve been struggling on how i should go about writing a religious character arc for one of my main characters where the characters gains faith that he previously didn’t have.

I want the character arc and conversion to feel realistic and to actually mean something beyond the character just being religious for the sake of being religious , and I don’t want it to feel like I’m “forcing religions beliefs” on the reader.

The two reasons I want to add a religious character arc
1.The main inspiration for the character is actually a saint called Saint Moises the Ethiopian who was a bandit and band leader before he was a monk

2.I feel like it fits his character well since I wrote the story as just a long redemption story where he goes from being a nihilistic , earnest and rude person to a person who lives a life of regret for all he has done

(Repost since the original post was very vague)
Ive been working on this dark fantasy story for a while but recently I’ve been struggling on how i should go about writing a religious character arc for one of my main characters where the characters gains faith that he previously didn’t have.

I want the character arc and conversion to feel realistic and to actually mean something beyond the character just being religious for the sake of being religious , and I don’t want it to feel like I’m “forcing religions beliefs” on the reader.

The two reasons I want to add a religious character arc
1.The main inspiration for the character is actually a saint called Saint Moises the Ethiopian who was a bandit and band leader before he was a monk

2.I feel like it fits his character well since I wrote the story as just a long redemption story where he goes from being a nihilistic , earnest and rude person to a person who lives a life of regret for all he has done

Ive been working on this dark fantasy story for a while but recently I’ve been struggling on how i should go about writing a religious character arc for one of my main characters where the characters gains faith that he previously didn’t have.

I want the character arc and conversion to feel realistic and to actually mean something beyond the character just being religious for the sake of being religious , and I don’t want it to feel like I’m “forcing religions beliefs” on the reader.

The two reasons I want to add a religious character arc

1. The main inspiration for the character is actually a saint called Saint Moises the Ethiopian who was a bandit and band leader before he was a monk

2. I feel like it fits his character well since I wrote the story as just a long redemption story where he goes from being a nihilistic , earnest and rude person to a person who lives a life of regret for all he has done

(Sorry if this post is messy I’m writing this as I’m very tired)
I’m new to writing and I’m currently working on a dark fantasy story but recently I’ve been struggling on how I can make the world feel real and how I can make point A to point B different and unique to one another. I also want all the races in the land that the story takes place to feel different from one another.

(Repost since my original post was very vague)

I’ve been struggling on how i should go about writing a religious character arc for one of my characters where the characters gains faith that he previously didn’t have.

For redemption purposes I want the character arc and conversion to feel realistic and to actually mean something rather than the characters just being religious for the sake of being religious , and I don’t want it to feel like I’m “forcing religions beliefs” on the reader.
The two reasons I want to add a religious character arc

1. The main inspiration for the character is actually a saint called Saint Moises the Ethiopian who was a bandit and band leader before he was a monk and then a saint

2. I feel like it fits his character well since I wrote the story as just a long redemption story where he goes from being a nihilistic , earnest and rude person to a person who lives a life of regret for all he has done

So I was hoping someone can give me a few pointers on how I can execute the arc properly and if i can get some examples in media on how to do it.